Quaterns: Observations on Life
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "I Found a Fawn"Assorted Reflections
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Comment from Roisin
I love the line you've used for the repetition Brooke. It has a lovely ring to it. As always, your rhymes and rhythm are perfect and I love the little story that unfolds here. You've found a perfect piece of artwork to go with your words. I love it.
Hugs
Roisin
reply by the author on 10-May-2009
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I love the line you've used for the repetition Brooke. It has a lovely ring to it. As always, your rhymes and rhythm are perfect and I love the little story that unfolds here. You've found a perfect piece of artwork to go with your words. I love it.
Hugs
Roisin
Comment Written 10-May-2009
reply by the author on 10-May-2009
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I am pleased with this line, that came to me on my drive home from church, so I am glad you like it too. It's one of those cases where I had a line and no idea what it would grow into. Thanks, Brooke :-)
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I have to tell you Brooke. I've just brought the children to school and have the line going around and around in my head all morning 'I found a fawn among the ferns.' For whatever reason, I just can't get it out of my head! Just thought I'd tell you.
Hugs
Roisin
Comment from Sasha
This is both touching and delightful. What a beautiful description of an unexpected encounter. I especially like the caution you expressed in not wanting to frighten the little fawn. Beautiful poem. Very, very nice work, as always.
reply by the author on 10-May-2009
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This is both touching and delightful. What a beautiful description of an unexpected encounter. I especially like the caution you expressed in not wanting to frighten the little fawn. Beautiful poem. Very, very nice work, as always.
Comment Written 10-May-2009
reply by the author on 10-May-2009
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Valerie, thank you for such a thoughtful response. I always appreciate your visits and comments. Brooke
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Brooke I love your reflective quatern
in fact anything about nature and especially when you write about a sweet little fawn. I like the repeated lines-
I found a fawn among the ferns.
smiles
Gert
reply by the author on 10-May-2009
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Hello Brooke I love your reflective quatern
in fact anything about nature and especially when you write about a sweet little fawn. I like the repeated lines-
I found a fawn among the ferns.
smiles
Gert
Comment Written 10-May-2009
reply by the author on 10-May-2009
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Gert, thank you - I imagined you would like the nature, and you're a sweetheart, so I knew you would be drawn to a fawn. Brooke
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You are so welcome
Brooke
Gert
Comment from Adri7enne
Ah, touching, Brooke. Like doctors, sometimes the best we can hope is to do no harm. I see you're still enjoying the quatern. And I'm enjoying reading them. Good job.
reply by the author on 11-May-2009
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Ah, touching, Brooke. Like doctors, sometimes the best we can hope is to do no harm. I see you're still enjoying the quatern. And I'm enjoying reading them. Good job.
Comment Written 10-May-2009
reply by the author on 11-May-2009
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Thanks so much - I appreciate your supportive comments :-) Brooke
Comment from Annelisa
So lovely. To see a fawn is a wondrous event. This is a beautiful quatern for the spring and Mother's day as well because the doe was probably close by. Well done. Annelisa
reply by the author on 11-May-2009
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So lovely. To see a fawn is a wondrous event. This is a beautiful quatern for the spring and Mother's day as well because the doe was probably close by. Well done. Annelisa
Comment Written 10-May-2009
reply by the author on 11-May-2009
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Annelisa, good morning and thank you!! Brooke
Comment from Hall Scott
Hopkins-esque meter and sentiment. Created an emotional image for me of sudden self-evaluation. The fawn as a symbol of innocence and powerlessness is very moving.
reply by the author on 14-May-2009
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Hopkins-esque meter and sentiment. Created an emotional image for me of sudden self-evaluation. The fawn as a symbol of innocence and powerlessness is very moving.
Comment Written 10-May-2009
reply by the author on 14-May-2009
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Hall Scott, thank you so much - sorry, your review got buried under newer ones - I usually don't take so long to thank a reviewer! Brooke
Comment from AlvinTEthington
Great quatern, Brooke. Quite seamless. I didn't even realize it was a quatern until the second read. It paints such a bucolic picture. I like the fact you didn't want to disturb nature--that's how all us of should live--in harmony with nature.
Superb iambic tetrameter. Excellent execution of the difficult abab rhyme scheme. Wonderful alliteration.
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reply by the author on 10-May-2009
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Great quatern, Brooke. Quite seamless. I didn't even realize it was a quatern until the second read. It paints such a bucolic picture. I like the fact you didn't want to disturb nature--that's how all us of should live--in harmony with nature.
Superb iambic tetrameter. Excellent execution of the difficult abab rhyme scheme. Wonderful alliteration.
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Comment Written 10-May-2009
reply by the author on 10-May-2009
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Thank you, Alvin - I was pleased with the flow of this one.
I appreciate your thoughtful comments. Brooke
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Adewpearl ....
What a beautiful word-picture you have painted in this well-written poem, presenting your readers with so much vivid imagery. In this, you project a valuable lesson for all those who have the wisdom to understand and that is .... be aware of the fear which humans generate in young animals before approaching them or touching them, just for the joy of doing so.
There is nothing to suggest changing and I thank you for sharing this with us.
With love from ...... Nanette Mary.
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reply by the author on 11-May-2009
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Hullo Adewpearl ....
What a beautiful word-picture you have painted in this well-written poem, presenting your readers with so much vivid imagery. In this, you project a valuable lesson for all those who have the wisdom to understand and that is .... be aware of the fear which humans generate in young animals before approaching them or touching them, just for the joy of doing so.
There is nothing to suggest changing and I thank you for sharing this with us.
With love from ...... Nanette Mary.
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Comment Written 10-May-2009
reply by the author on 11-May-2009
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Nanette Mary, good morning and thank you! I always appreciate your visits and kind comments :-)
