The Night When the Skeletons Woke
a poem of horror in anapestic meter138 total reviews
Comment from Eric1
Hi Brooke, what a startlingly beautiful poem this is, it flows along at a very past pace taking the reader quickly up a hill and allowing them to amble down the other side, your words have great description and wonderful imagery with wonderful rhyming and rhythm, it is worth more than a six but alas I have none remaining.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Hi Brooke, what a startlingly beautiful poem this is, it flows along at a very past pace taking the reader quickly up a hill and allowing them to amble down the other side, your words have great description and wonderful imagery with wonderful rhyming and rhythm, it is worth more than a six but alas I have none remaining.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Eric, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You are most welcome Brooke.
Comment from mfowler
I'm not a Halloween fan as it's simply a not a big aspect of life here, but I do know about the skeletons arising from graves; I assume a reference to the graves opening after Christ's execution.
This is such a great narrative. It is so clear and imaginable. You had me empathising with the poor skeletons as they emerge unwanted and unwelcome by misunderstansing livers of real life. And how sad it was when they had to return to the graves. Your versifying is crisp, balanced and gripping. The language builds in sombre tones, but allows emotion to seep through the cracks.
Loved:
But the greetings they gave were not given with cheer,
those gasps filled with horror as danger drew near.
No welcomes extended, no greetings exchanged,
the bones took their leave of the graveyards, deranged.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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I'm not a Halloween fan as it's simply a not a big aspect of life here, but I do know about the skeletons arising from graves; I assume a reference to the graves opening after Christ's execution.
This is such a great narrative. It is so clear and imaginable. You had me empathising with the poor skeletons as they emerge unwanted and unwelcome by misunderstansing livers of real life. And how sad it was when they had to return to the graves. Your versifying is crisp, balanced and gripping. The language builds in sombre tones, but allows emotion to seep through the cracks.
Loved:
But the greetings they gave were not given with cheer,
those gasps filled with horror as danger drew near.
No welcomes extended, no greetings exchanged,
the bones took their leave of the graveyards, deranged.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much, Mark, for such a thoughtful response to this poem, and thank you for the generous six stars :-) Brooke
Comment from IndianaIrish
An incredibly wonderful way to end your month of dark poetry, Brook.What a poem of fear and horror. Everything poetic and a great story as well. The anapestic meter makes it a delight to read out loud.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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An incredibly wonderful way to end your month of dark poetry, Brook.What a poem of fear and horror. Everything poetic and a great story as well. The anapestic meter makes it a delight to read out loud.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Karyn, thank you so very much, my friend :-) Sending you smiles for the stars :-) Brooke
Comment from seaglass
Whew...I'm glad their all back in their graves. If I heard all that bone rattling, I would end up in a grave. This has great rhyme like a children's book.
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Whew...I'm glad their all back in their graves. If I heard all that bone rattling, I would end up in a grave. This has great rhyme like a children's book.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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seaglass, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Love the phrase "burial berth"... and the whole poem is fun. I can just picture the bones wiggling up thru the earth. I don't think I'd be scared, since without muscles they can't do much. I'd be fascinated to watch ... almost wish it would happen. LOL!
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Love the phrase "burial berth"... and the whole poem is fun. I can just picture the bones wiggling up thru the earth. I don't think I'd be scared, since without muscles they can't do much. I'd be fascinated to watch ... almost wish it would happen. LOL!
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much, PHyllis - I was pleased with that little phrase myself. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from GracieAnn
Brooke, this balanced in meter and rhyme. The word choices are powerful and carry the connotations that make this very dark, indeed. Yes, I am weary of the dark writes, too. :0 GracieAnn
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Brooke, this balanced in meter and rhyme. The word choices are powerful and carry the connotations that make this very dark, indeed. Yes, I am weary of the dark writes, too. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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GracieAnn, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from CR Delport
As a kid, I spend a lot of time in cemeteries, as I enjoyed the quiet and peacefulness of the please. Of course if the earth started to move and skeletons pushed through the dirt, that would have freaked me out :) This is well written. Great stuff.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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As a kid, I spend a lot of time in cemeteries, as I enjoyed the quiet and peacefulness of the please. Of course if the earth started to move and skeletons pushed through the dirt, that would have freaked me out :) This is well written. Great stuff.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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CR, thank you so much. My mom died right when I turned 8, and I loved visiting the cemetery. Later, I learned to love them for their art and social history as well as their serenity. I appreciate your thoughts and your generous six stars :-) Brooke
Comment from royowen
A very well designed and composed work Brooke, a seemingly effortless work.that seems to flowed off the pen, my admiration always remains, great smooth aabb rhyming, metronomic meter, beautiful stylish language, good one, blessings, Roy.
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A very well designed and composed work Brooke, a seemingly effortless work.that seems to flowed off the pen, my admiration always remains, great smooth aabb rhyming, metronomic meter, beautiful stylish language, good one, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Roy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from tdragonfly
I enjoyed reading your poem. It was an easy read and entertaining. I liked the AABB stanza. Nice rhythm. I liked your artist note---until next year :). The artwork was a good choice.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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I enjoyed reading your poem. It was an easy read and entertaining. I liked the AABB stanza. Nice rhythm. I liked your artist note---until next year :). The artwork was a good choice.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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tdragonfly, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Oh! Groan! (when I saw the title) black black black! But... Very very excellent! Fantastic poem... And I really loved it, (down with honesty... Always gets me into trouble) Thank goodness, October, Black October, is almost at an end! Gruesome skeletons be gone! I say, be gone! Mo-vember is here and all we'll have to put up with is those men's awful moustaches! Giddy
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Oh! Groan! (when I saw the title) black black black! But... Very very excellent! Fantastic poem... And I really loved it, (down with honesty... Always gets me into trouble) Thank goodness, October, Black October, is almost at an end! Gruesome skeletons be gone! I say, be gone! Mo-vember is here and all we'll have to put up with is those men's awful moustaches! Giddy
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Giddy, thank you so much, my friend. I so appreciate your generous six stars :-) Brooke
