Cautionary Tales
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Comment from flamingstar
Wow, that was fun and fantastic rhyme and rhythm throughout the entire composition! I love Grandma's comment toward the end...and the name Fleur. Very creative.
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Wow, that was fun and fantastic rhyme and rhythm throughout the entire composition! I love Grandma's comment toward the end...and the name Fleur. Very creative.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
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Thank you.
This is for my series of Cautionary Tales inspired by Hilaire Belloc's poems - some of his miscellaneous characters make even dryer comments than Grandma's!
Steve
Comment from tdragonfly
The really sad part is that there is a lot of parents who are much like this. Let allow our children to be children for a little while. They have a lifetime to solve all of the world's problems.
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The really sad part is that there is a lot of parents who are much like this. Let allow our children to be children for a little while. They have a lifetime to solve all of the world's problems.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
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Ah, yes. For every cautionary tale there's a grain of truth.
Thanks for stopping by.
Steve
Comment from ravenblack
Very funny, your mighty wit on full display. I see this all the time, parents pushing their kids so hard that they don't have any time to just be kids. "We know they scream, we know they dart, we know they...draw the curtain here"- hilarious, your comic timing, the drawing of the curtain spot-on.
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Very funny, your mighty wit on full display. I see this all the time, parents pushing their kids so hard that they don't have any time to just be kids. "We know they scream, we know they dart, we know they...draw the curtain here"- hilarious, your comic timing, the drawing of the curtain spot-on.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
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Thank you!
Don't think I can do comic timing in real life, but I know what it looks and feels like.
Steve
Comment from royowen
You write a great traditional style poem Steve, it's quite an undertaking to write something this length an maintain objectivity and interest even if one does a scan it perfectly! So well done, beautiful rhythmic meter, couplet rhyming, blessings, Roy.
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You write a great traditional style poem Steve, it's quite an undertaking to write something this length an maintain objectivity and interest even if one does a scan it perfectly! So well done, beautiful rhythmic meter, couplet rhyming, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
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Thanks, Roy.
I am acutely aware that many reviewers won't even tackle lengthy poems. This is the second in a series of cautionary tales...
Steve
Comment from sweetwoodjax
oooh, this is just too cute, kiwisteveh, information overload can surely make a brain explode. my ears let out what once goes in, so I think my brain's a little thin.
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oooh, this is just too cute, kiwisteveh, information overload can surely make a brain explode. my ears let out what once goes in, so I think my brain's a little thin.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
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Thank you.
This is the second in a series of cautionary tales...
Steve
Comment from djsaxon
Awesome! Impeccable and innovative rhyme throughout coupled with great meter. And yes, I did know where it was going but not quite how you would resolve the journey. Hilarious and equally cautionary. Roald Dahl on a particularly dark say. Love it! Cheers - DJ
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Awesome! Impeccable and innovative rhyme throughout coupled with great meter. And yes, I did know where it was going but not quite how you would resolve the journey. Hilarious and equally cautionary. Roald Dahl on a particularly dark say. Love it! Cheers - DJ
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
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Thanks, DJ. Haven't seen you around in a while...
This is actually modelled to some extent on the Cautionary Tales of Hilaire Belloc, although updated - I hope to have a series of these eventually.
Steve
Comment from LIJ Red
I am sure you read about the prodigy of last century-his father was the jerk-finished college in single digits and
burned out and was a shiftless ne'er do much afterward?
This was funny to the point of excellence.
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I am sure you read about the prodigy of last century-his father was the jerk-finished college in single digits and
burned out and was a shiftless ne'er do much afterward?
This was funny to the point of excellence.
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Thanks for the kind ords.
Steve
Comment from MAB
LOL LOL I can totally feel the rhythm when reading this. Funny clever and Great Poetry mechanics. You should have entered this in a contents. In my opinion this shoots to one top plateaus of poem of the month.
GREAT JOB
SAM
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LOL LOL I can totally feel the rhythm when reading this. Funny clever and Great Poetry mechanics. You should have entered this in a contents. In my opinion this shoots to one top plateaus of poem of the month.
GREAT JOB
SAM
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
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Thanks, Sam.
I could have entered it for a contest, but then I believe it's not eligible for Poem of the Month so in a way I'm shooting for that.
Steve
Comment from Jackarrie
I love this poem because firstly it is written so well
also it has great humor, brilliant rhymes. such a joy to read, I will bookcase to read it again. Well done, a glowing six for this.
Mary
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I love this poem because firstly it is written so well
also it has great humor, brilliant rhymes. such a joy to read, I will bookcase to read it again. Well done, a glowing six for this.
Mary
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
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Thanks, Mary, for the great review and the six stars.
This is the second in a series of cautionary tales...
Steve
Comment from w.j.debi
Nice cautionary tale on not overloading your poor child with more than she can handle. I love the humor. Some parents do think the child has to be exceptional right from the beginning and expert at everything.
I remember in high school calculating that if I did just the things my mother expected of me I could have four hours of sleep a night. To her dismay, I promptly dropped a few of the activities she loved so much and did what I wanted. Teenage rebellion? Sort of. I considered survival.
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Nice cautionary tale on not overloading your poor child with more than she can handle. I love the humor. Some parents do think the child has to be exceptional right from the beginning and expert at everything.
I remember in high school calculating that if I did just the things my mother expected of me I could have four hours of sleep a night. To her dismay, I promptly dropped a few of the activities she loved so much and did what I wanted. Teenage rebellion? Sort of. I considered survival.
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Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
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Thanks for the great review - yes, it's a fine line between wanting your child to explore options and do well and being the classic pushy parent. And all kids are different - some can take pushing, others rebel in different ways and some just break.
Steve
