Gloom Soon Passes
trochaic meter in 7/8/7/8122 total reviews
Comment from padumachitta
Hi, I have no idea what a traditonal poem is. I guess it is this:-) Bubbles, you amyze me how you come up with ideas, and they are always good and make me think.
We have a store down town that has a bear blowing bubble machine. And i do stand there and feel better. I do notice other people doing the same thing.
So bubbles it is.
padumachitta
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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Hi, I have no idea what a traditonal poem is. I guess it is this:-) Bubbles, you amyze me how you come up with ideas, and they are always good and make me think.
We have a store down town that has a bear blowing bubble machine. And i do stand there and feel better. I do notice other people doing the same thing.
So bubbles it is.
padumachitta
Comment Written 26-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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Padumachitta, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Eric1
Hi brooke, this is a beautifully constructed poem my friend, I perceive that you have a secret love affair with the dandelion,I seem to recall it in a few of your poems, great picture of sawyer.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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Hi brooke, this is a beautifully constructed poem my friend, I perceive that you have a secret love affair with the dandelion,I seem to recall it in a few of your poems, great picture of sawyer.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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Eric, thank you so much :-) not sure it's much of a secret LOL Brooke
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You are very welcome Brooke, have a lovely weekend,
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Really great as always. You are always so creative with your poems. I rarely think like this. I still have a kids mind, I always like to be funny or silly. Wish I could write like this. Hope you do well in the contest. Rox
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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Really great as always. You are always so creative with your poems. I rarely think like this. I still have a kids mind, I always like to be funny or silly. Wish I could write like this. Hope you do well in the contest. Rox
Comment Written 26-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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Rox, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from amahra
I love living in the city where all the excitement is, but I miss the grass and squirrels and yes, dandelions. Very nice poem and Sawyer blowing bubbles.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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I love living in the city where all the excitement is, but I miss the grass and squirrels and yes, dandelions. Very nice poem and Sawyer blowing bubbles.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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amahra, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from stroncoso1
I love the flow and several poetic lines like "Lonely stems are left to grieve," and Dandelion seeds of silk hitch a ride on breezes blowing." This is well written and lovely. I enjoyed reading this piece.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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I love the flow and several poetic lines like "Lonely stems are left to grieve," and Dandelion seeds of silk hitch a ride on breezes blowing." This is well written and lovely. I enjoyed reading this piece.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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stroncoso, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Gloom Soon Passes' is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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'Gloom Soon Passes' is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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duchess, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Brooke, you're more than welcome :-)the Duchess
Comment from marijmd
There truly is something magical about a dandelion in a kids hand. Who would think that a weed could be so delicate and delightful!
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There truly is something magical about a dandelion in a kids hand. Who would think that a weed could be so delicate and delightful!
Comment Written 25-Sep-2014
Comment from Delahay
It is interesting that you switch between the childish fun of blowing bubbles to the lesson in life found there and in the dandelion going to seed. The bubbles live briefly in a shimmering rainbow, then it bursts and dies on a blade of grass. At the same time, the dandelion has lost it's color and is now stark and bare.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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It is interesting that you switch between the childish fun of blowing bubbles to the lesson in life found there and in the dandelion going to seed. The bubbles live briefly in a shimmering rainbow, then it bursts and dies on a blade of grass. At the same time, the dandelion has lost it's color and is now stark and bare.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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WardHays, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from MissMerri
Well done... and a great little message contained in your beautifully metered and rhymed lines too. Where there is life, there will be loss... but also renewal and fresh starts. I enjoyed the Trochaic meter too... different and not so easy to do, but very pleasant to the ear.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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Well done... and a great little message contained in your beautifully metered and rhymed lines too. Where there is life, there will be loss... but also renewal and fresh starts. I enjoyed the Trochaic meter too... different and not so easy to do, but very pleasant to the ear.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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Adonna, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Jewell McChesney
Dandelion seeds of silk,
hitch a ride on breezes blowing.
Meadows once as white as milk
then will thrive with gold aglowing.
I enjoyed the dance between dandelions and children and the way you've connected them. This is a well written traditional poem. As always,
Jewell
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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Dandelion seeds of silk,
hitch a ride on breezes blowing.
Meadows once as white as milk
then will thrive with gold aglowing.
I enjoyed the dance between dandelions and children and the way you've connected them. This is a well written traditional poem. As always,
Jewell
Comment Written 25-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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Jewell, thank you so much :-) Brooke
