Surcease
a mirage poem168 total reviews
Comment from reconciled
HI Brooke, It's I raven. Can't get into my site from Michaels computer. Don't know why. Anyway!!! WHERE"S Sawyer???? LOL Really I have never seen this form before. But I love the wording and the form of your poem. And the picture is just beautiful. Great job!! Luff ya Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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HI Brooke, It's I raven. Can't get into my site from Michaels computer. Don't know why. Anyway!!! WHERE"S Sawyer???? LOL Really I have never seen this form before. But I love the wording and the form of your poem. And the picture is just beautiful. Great job!! Luff ya Linda xxoo
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Linda, you're not the first to ask. I keep telling everyone I had to give him a day off under child labor laws. LOL So, I need to hear more about your being at Michael's. Inquiring minds want to know :-) Brooke
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Child labor laws. LOL You read his poem Finally. Kind of tells a bit. Just let me say I love waking up in the mornings. All is well. He is truly a great guy. Not perfect like me. But what can I say. LOL LOL Will talk at ya later. Luff ya Linda xxoo hugs
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Sending you both smiles :-)
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Thank you!!!zzoo
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Brooke,
A very interesting form for a poem, one that looks familiar yet obviously isn't. Nice rhythm to it and a good set of mental images in the stanzas.
It works very well.
Patrick
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Hi Brooke,
A very interesting form for a poem, one that looks familiar yet obviously isn't. Nice rhythm to it and a good set of mental images in the stanzas.
It works very well.
Patrick
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Patrick, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from amahra
surcease?Wow I've learned a new word. I'll look it up later. Nothing cuter to say about the lovely baby so on with the poem. The words are rich and so artfully written. Great job.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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surcease?Wow I've learned a new word. I'll look it up later. Nothing cuter to say about the lovely baby so on with the poem. The words are rich and so artfully written. Great job.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Amahra, thank you for your gracious review. It just means cessation :-) Brooke
Comment from hurkad
Another beauty Brooke!! Love this form of poetry..you have inspired me to try it out:-)Your words are really soothing and have the 'feel good' effect.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Another beauty Brooke!! Love this form of poetry..you have inspired me to try it out:-)Your words are really soothing and have the 'feel good' effect.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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hurkad, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Ceallach
I've never heard of this form but it appeals to me much. It doesn't seem as rigid as other forms but I am sure it can be. You have done very well with this poem. So well in fact that I cannot find any nits. The flow is superb, cadence very sound, word choice excellent, and metaphors wonderfully applied. So a sixer is what you get. :)
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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I've never heard of this form but it appeals to me much. It doesn't seem as rigid as other forms but I am sure it can be. You have done very well with this poem. So well in fact that I cannot find any nits. The flow is superb, cadence very sound, word choice excellent, and metaphors wonderfully applied. So a sixer is what you get. :)
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Ceallach, thank you so very much. Honeycomb just invented the form several days ago. I so appreciate your generous exceptional rating :-) Brooke
Comment from Cariboubill
Peaceful, Brooke. A wonderful time of day. Very interesting rhyme scheme. I like the way you altered it a little in the third verse. Good friends don't have to always talk to enjoy their companionship.
Bill
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Peaceful, Brooke. A wonderful time of day. Very interesting rhyme scheme. I like the way you altered it a little in the third verse. Good friends don't have to always talk to enjoy their companionship.
Bill
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Bill, thanks so much for your thoughtful review :-) Glad you like the slight modification :-) Brooke
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Brooke,
looks like in fact you did Master the Mirage format..
The moring is to peacful until the singing of birds
Love this part
When first light arrives at last
and the bleak of night has passed,
comes that momentary hush
just before the morning rush.
Great way to begin your poem
Gert
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Hello Brooke,
looks like in fact you did Master the Mirage format..
The moring is to peacful until the singing of birds
Love this part
When first light arrives at last
and the bleak of night has passed,
comes that momentary hush
just before the morning rush.
Great way to begin your poem
Gert
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Gert, thank you so very much :-) I so appreciate your encouraging and generous sixth star :-) Brooke
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You are welcome Brooke
Gert
Comment from jaydub99
Excellent. A total joy to read. It made me think of the moments in the morning when it is totally silent and I am reflective. A little quiet brings a great deal of peace, at least in my crazy frenetic world. This is a complex and wonderfully written poem, another great post. Thanks. J
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Excellent. A total joy to read. It made me think of the moments in the morning when it is totally silent and I am reflective. A little quiet brings a great deal of peace, at least in my crazy frenetic world. This is a complex and wonderfully written poem, another great post. Thanks. J
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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jay, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Brooke,
This is the second mirage poem I have read and you have done a stellar job with this one. Good alliteration in starlings'/song speech/should. The use of 'surcease' is gifted, the flow is easy and the theme is wonderful. Well done....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Hi Brooke,
This is the second mirage poem I have read and you have done a stellar job with this one. Good alliteration in starlings'/song speech/should. The use of 'surcease' is gifted, the flow is easy and the theme is wonderful. Well done....blessings, chey
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Chey, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from justatuna
I always learn when I read your work. Always so smooth and without a stutter. Your words capture the reader, at least this reader, making me go back and read it again for meaning. Another great write.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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I always learn when I read your work. Always so smooth and without a stutter. Your words capture the reader, at least this reader, making me go back and read it again for meaning. Another great write.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Rob, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
