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Another Pretty Face

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Can love survive small town gossip?

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Comment from sheilanewton
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I like Captain Terrible's artwork too!
This is a really good chapter. Intriguing and enticing. It leaves me wanting more!
Your ability with creating good dialogue is well in evidence here. That's what makes the piece so attractive to me.
Good characterisations too. I particularly like Sarah. YEP! She's a strong character in a strong chapter.
Who's the protagonist of the whole story? Is it Sarah - I'd like to think so.

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Soledadpaz
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Sounds like Sara has a lot of unresolved issues and now on top of that, a missing child. I would be going out of my mind with fear as well.

Sorry about your computer, we had the same problem a short while back, such a nuisance. Hope you are doing better. Sending good thoughts your way.

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
    Thank you for your kind thoughts. I appreciate the review. Computers and I have a love hate relationship anyway. I love to hate them.
Comment from Dave-Aranda-Richards
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The narrative is good, though it could use some editing for un-necessary words. Your dialogue is good but needs editing also. Will be praying for God's strong presence during your latest life hurdle.

Dave

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
    HUmmm, usually keeping out un-necessary words is my strong area. I will recheck this.
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
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Another well written chapter. Of course Joe would never hurt her or cassie, but can't blame the woman for wondering. You have captured the feelings of that situation well.

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from jadapenn
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Hi Girlfriend, thanks for the update on your treatment. Hope all goes well, but there will be off days. Just keep your chin up, sweetness.
This was a busy but interesting chapter. I love it when all these men start to move in on a case. You want to get in there and help them. Sorry that Sara is now afraid of our terrific guy Joe. She'll have to come around.
Little gremlins for you to consider:


They'll be assisting Joe[to] find Cassie."

"Glad to meet you. Sorry it has to[be] under these circumstances."

Stay well and take care. luv jada

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
    Thank you for catching these errors. I just received a review that said I had un-necessary words. I told him that is usually my strong area. Now you tell me to put more words in. I am teasing. Thank you, girlfriend.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
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This is the first time I've read something you wrote. The chapter is well written,and has peeked my curiosity about the Sara as well as what happened to Cassie.

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from dportwood
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barbara.wilkey,

Written very well as are all of your stories. They are always enjoyable and believable and hold the reader's interest. Well done.

Duane

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
    Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from lola29
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OMG! What is wrong with Sara that she suddenly thinks Joe would harm her? Does she not have a morsel of anger about her rape or the way Roy treated her? I would think she would be thankful that Joe stepped in to defend her. Her attitude is becoming a turn-off.

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
    Sara is under a lot of stress. She will get her act together, I hope. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from adewpearl
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come to the aide of beautiful women - aid
It must be so frightening for a woman to see the man she loves in the middle of acting like a killing machine - I'm confident he will win her full trust and she'll realize that is not the man he'll be with her and her child. I understand her concern though - I know that some soldiers, cops, football players, etc, have a hard time turning off that adrenaline and that attitude and have abused their wives and kids. Brooke

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
    Thank you for catching that for me. I am trying to learn word 7 as I am doing this. It took me forever to figure out how to spell check. Now I can figure out how to get my word count. I hope my computer get fixed soon.
Comment from R. K. Alan
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Personally, I think Sara is being a bit of a pill. So now the team goes to work. I assume the computer will be the key. Thanks for a nice update. Ray aka Krylon

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 Comment Written 02-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
    Thank you for your kind review. Mother's under stress do some stupid things.