Twenty for Halloween
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Beware When the Vulture Flies"Halloween Poems in Various Forms
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Comment from Ankh
Ooh this one is really eerie and carries a warning. Well written with a good flow and rhythm. The imagery was dark and moody. Well done :-0~
Seth
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Ooh this one is really eerie and carries a warning. Well written with a good flow and rhythm. The imagery was dark and moody. Well done :-0~
Seth
Comment Written 29-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2010
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Seth, thank you - glad you found it eerie :-) Brooke
Comment from Realist101
Hi Brooke! You should enter this in the Halloween contest! This is perfectly done! Very excellent message too! Creepy and dark! ") I love it! susan
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2010
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Hi Brooke! You should enter this in the Halloween contest! This is perfectly done! Very excellent message too! Creepy and dark! ") I love it! susan
Comment Written 29-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2010
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Thanks, Susan - I will enter a later poem in the contest :-) Brooke
Comment from jackpeg
Perfectly spooky in iambic trimeter. This is the kind of stuff to read around a camp fire, or if indoors, with a flashlight held under one's chin. Third stanza, second line, "Take heed when dark spirits rise," doesn't scan as well as the rest. Without "dark" is does, but I can see why you would like that left in. Still...awful, awful good. It rates a sinister six.
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Perfectly spooky in iambic trimeter. This is the kind of stuff to read around a camp fire, or if indoors, with a flashlight held under one's chin. Third stanza, second line, "Take heed when dark spirits rise," doesn't scan as well as the rest. Without "dark" is does, but I can see why you would like that left in. Still...awful, awful good. It rates a sinister six.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2010
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Thanks so much, Jack - I originally had when the spirits rise instead of dark spirits, which scans better but has less impact. I keep going back and forth. You are most generous and I appreciate that :-) Brooke
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I hope I'm not too overly generous. I don't wish to cheapen the six, but so few postings come even close to what you and and very few others crank out. Many of the top listed poems that give you a dollar or more for a review, are laced with sixes from previous reviewers that I cannot see fit to give more than a four. Keep up the good work. You might make it to the top 100 someday.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I think I would be scared to death if I heard a banshee scream. I bet this was fun to write. I enjoyed reading it. I am glad FS fixed their site. Earlier I tried to review and received an error message.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2010
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I think I would be scared to death if I heard a banshee scream. I bet this was fun to write. I enjoyed reading it. I am glad FS fixed their site. Earlier I tried to review and received an error message.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2010
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Earlier I tried to post and couldn't! And I couldn't review either - it happened to everyone, near as I can tell :-) Thanks so much for persisting, Barbara :-) Brooke
Comment from gramalot8
Adewpearl, this is a great Halloween Poem. I loved your image of each separate character that comes out this time of year. Good job as always... Jerri
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2010
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Adewpearl, this is a great Halloween Poem. I loved your image of each separate character that comes out this time of year. Good job as always... Jerri
Comment Written 29-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2010
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Thanks, Jerri, for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Maxine Kendall
You really do love Halloween, don't you Brooke? I bet it's fun at your house!
Love the poem. I really like how the first word on the first three lines of each quatrain is the same.
Well done!
Maxine.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2010
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You really do love Halloween, don't you Brooke? I bet it's fun at your house!
Love the poem. I really like how the first word on the first three lines of each quatrain is the same.
Well done!
Maxine.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2010
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Maxine, thank you :-) Yes, it's always been a fun time for me. Brooke :-)
Comment from jadapenn
Run, jada, run! You are rhyming doom and gloom and making me chilly. I don't want to experience all the sounds and flutterings you're making me hear and visualise. Ugh! When is it Halloween's again. I need to crawl under my bed with Crunchie that night. Hope she ain't got too many fleas. lol. I loved this wonderful poem. Well done and awesome presentation. luv jada
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Run, jada, run! You are rhyming doom and gloom and making me chilly. I don't want to experience all the sounds and flutterings you're making me hear and visualise. Ugh! When is it Halloween's again. I need to crawl under my bed with Crunchie that night. Hope she ain't got too many fleas. lol. I loved this wonderful poem. Well done and awesome presentation. luv jada
Comment Written 29-Sep-2010
Comment from lola29
Brooke, your Haloween quatrains are excellent. Awareness of your surroundings is the key to escaping imminent danger, and I'm now on the lookout for your warnings.
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Brooke, your Haloween quatrains are excellent. Awareness of your surroundings is the key to escaping imminent danger, and I'm now on the lookout for your warnings.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2010
Comment from Bellringer
This is a scary poem beyond its Halloween theme. Dark thought can take a life of their own and if we are not proactive in exorcising those "demons," we can be consumed by those "spirits." Well written quatrains and very effective use of repetition--a frightening set of chants. Regards, Hector
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2010
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This is a scary poem beyond its Halloween theme. Dark thought can take a life of their own and if we are not proactive in exorcising those "demons," we can be consumed by those "spirits." Well written quatrains and very effective use of repetition--a frightening set of chants. Regards, Hector
Comment Written 29-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2010
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Thank you, Hector, for your thoughtful reading of this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from annettebda
I will be so glad when Halloween is over, all these dire warnings and ghost stories, I so believe in banshees and ghosts and goblins, I think it might be my celtic roots.
Your usual high standard of writing, the kids will love this one.
Annette
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I will be so glad when Halloween is over, all these dire warnings and ghost stories, I so believe in banshees and ghosts and goblins, I think it might be my celtic roots.
Your usual high standard of writing, the kids will love this one.
Annette
Comment Written 29-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2010
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Annette, I don't actually believe in any of those things, which allows me to write about them with a sense of fun and no fear. LOL Sorry if I scared you ;-) Brooke
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Right up there with percivaljacks funny hat and whitey tightey's...you had to be there!
Annette
