Tantalizing Eyes
Viewing comments for Chapter 44 "Chapter thirteen; part one"Dishonesty VS Love. Which will win?
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Comment from jadapenn
There we go. My last BIG SIXER to you. I thought this was a great and action filled chapter. I liked the tension and inner conflict as Leya made her escape. They she does what is unthinkable and kills her mob father. She must really love Steven to bits.
Well written. luv jada.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2010
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There we go. My last BIG SIXER to you. I thought this was a great and action filled chapter. I liked the tension and inner conflict as Leya made her escape. They she does what is unthinkable and kills her mob father. She must really love Steven to bits.
Well written. luv jada.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2010
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Thank you for the the 6. Coming from you makes me feel really special. Thank you, again.
Comment from dportwood
Wow! Your lover or your father. I would have made the same choice Leya did. This writing definitely held my interest because I finished it before I wanted to. Good job.
I did notice this little booboo
It's unusual for him to out by himself.
Duane
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2010
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Wow! Your lover or your father. I would have made the same choice Leya did. This writing definitely held my interest because I finished it before I wanted to. Good job.
I did notice this little booboo
It's unusual for him to out by himself.
Duane
Comment Written 24-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I will get on that error.
Comment from Thilophian
It is indeed a good piece of writing. As you are an established writer, you have all the skills needed for a writer. Your words are apt, accurate. Certain dialogues are meaningul and noteworthy. You tend to convey a lot of meaning in simple day to day conversations.
Itis a great attempt indeed. The chapter would definitely constitute an important part of the story.
Congratulations!
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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2010
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It is indeed a good piece of writing. As you are an established writer, you have all the skills needed for a writer. Your words are apt, accurate. Certain dialogues are meaningul and noteworthy. You tend to convey a lot of meaning in simple day to day conversations.
Itis a great attempt indeed. The chapter would definitely constitute an important part of the story.
Congratulations!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your kind words.
