Barren Fields
contemplative tanka100 total reviews
Comment from skye
Terrific artwork... captures the whole essence of what could have been, but is not.
I love the idea of lack... of not planting, not reaping, not sowing, not anything. No growth.
Excellent imagery.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2010
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Terrific artwork... captures the whole essence of what could have been, but is not.
I love the idea of lack... of not planting, not reaping, not sowing, not anything. No growth.
Excellent imagery.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Skye, for your perceptive comments :-) Brooke
Comment from patmedium
Brooke, you have a genius for lulling us all into a false sense of security with your beautiful poems ......................then you whip the rug from under our feet by forcing us to think! Thankyou. Pat.
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Brooke, you have a genius for lulling us all into a false sense of security with your beautiful poems ......................then you whip the rug from under our feet by forcing us to think! Thankyou. Pat.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2010
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Pat, that is one of the best things anyone has ever said about my poetry. Thank you!! Brooke :-)
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Well... I speak as I find! I found myself on my back on the floor after the safe, cushy rug had been whipped away! Pat.
Comment from Adri7enne
Did you write this one for me? "I have strewn no seeds." Sounds like me. Unless you count dreams. I've sown lots of those.
Makes me stop to think, Brooke. You're so versatile.
Good luck in the contest.
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Did you write this one for me? "I have strewn no seeds." Sounds like me. Unless you count dreams. I've sown lots of those.
Makes me stop to think, Brooke. You're so versatile.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Adrienne - there is no better compliment a reader can pay than to say a poem seemed directed individually to her. And then to say it made you think! You couldn't have written a review that meant more to me. Brooke :-)
Comment from Curt Mongold
Is there a really bad drought somewhere? This is not the firstdrought poem I have reviewed as of late. It seems I get my news from the poetry now. I didn't know about Tiger Woods until someone wrote a poem about it. That's why I'm asking about the drought.
AS usual, you take a couple of stale, dry words and make them into stone soup. Know the story? I bet you do.
Great write Brooke. I don't know how I can win against this, esp. since I rhymed mine! oops!
Curt
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Is there a really bad drought somewhere? This is not the firstdrought poem I have reviewed as of late. It seems I get my news from the poetry now. I didn't know about Tiger Woods until someone wrote a poem about it. That's why I'm asking about the drought.
AS usual, you take a couple of stale, dry words and make them into stone soup. Know the story? I bet you do.
Great write Brooke. I don't know how I can win against this, esp. since I rhymed mine! oops!
Curt
Comment Written 29-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2010
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While there often is a drought somewhere I am not aware of a specific one. It's just metaphoric. Yes, I know the stone soup story :-) Thanks so much, Curt. And it's impossible to predict site contests - I've only won one site-sponsored contest since joining in August of 08, so I wouldn't worry much about me. Brooke
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After Penny's post, I feel bad about not reading the rules closer!
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In site contests, at least, one doesn't have to worry about the people doing the judging voting for people who break the rules, and lots of people break them totally innocently.
In member contests the ones that get Penny and me and others are those who won't change a poem once they've been TOLD they broke the rules and still get their friends to vote for them despite the fact they know damn well their piece doesn't qualify.
Comment from Rick Koestler
This is great, Brooke, but it sounds depressing. I don't quite understand what you're trying to say. Can you give me a clue. What is contemplative tanka?
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This is great, Brooke, but it sounds depressing. I don't quite understand what you're trying to say. Can you give me a clue. What is contemplative tanka?
Comment Written 29-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2010
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It's a tanka because of the form and contemplative because I wrote it in a contemplative state of mind :-) It is depressing - it is about someone who plants no seeds, takes no chances, does not get in the game in order to avoid anything's going wrong. But while having no seeds in the ground assures a person that his plans will not be devastated by flood or drought, it also means there is no chance for anything to grow at all since there are no seeds. Brooke
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Brilliant reply. Thank you so much for the explanation, Brooke. This type of persons has issues, right? It's like they tip toe softly through life to arrive safely at death. Blessings, Rick
Comment from perunest
How sad to be left with such hopelessness -
your words convey so well the ending of hope
and of searching for it. It depicts a soul so
defeated it seeks to heal its pain with no
expectations, thus no disappointment. Good luck
in the contest with this emotion-filled piece!
Carolyn
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How sad to be left with such hopelessness -
your words convey so well the ending of hope
and of searching for it. It depicts a soul so
defeated it seeks to heal its pain with no
expectations, thus no disappointment. Good luck
in the contest with this emotion-filled piece!
Carolyn
Comment Written 29-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Carolyn. I appreciate your perceptive comments. Brooke :-)
Comment from c_lucas
The seeds of life come about through our dreams and actions. This is very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.
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The seeds of life come about through our dreams and actions. This is very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Charlie. I appreciate your kind review :-) Brooke
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You're welcome Brooke. You and Margaret, sometimes, make me reach beyond my means to post enough words to satisfy FS judges. (LOL)Charlie
Comment from mermaids
One can think of many things this poem can be applied to. I like to think of those who never try or take any risks. life can be barren. You did well with the form and best wishes for the contest.
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One can think of many things this poem can be applied to. I like to think of those who never try or take any risks. life can be barren. You did well with the form and best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2010
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Your interpretation is precisely what I intended, Elaine. Brooke :-)
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Brooke...you have written an exceptional tanka poem. It certainly does make one stop and reflect on the meaning. The sad looking cabin is a perfect picture to enhance your chosen words. Well done and good luck in the contest....blessings....chey
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Hi Brooke...you have written an exceptional tanka poem. It certainly does make one stop and reflect on the meaning. The sad looking cabin is a perfect picture to enhance your chosen words. Well done and good luck in the contest....blessings....chey
Comment Written 29-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Chey - I had to search to find a picture appropriate in tone and subject - not many photographers, it seems, are into photographing empty fields. LOL Brooke :-)
Comment from Thomas Raine
Such a stark piece, with imagery that is equally grim and full of...desolation. This can be interpreted so many ways, literally of course, but I see it almost like a life that someone has neglected, and laid to waste.
Excellent piece, Brooke, and good luck in the contest,
- TR
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Such a stark piece, with imagery that is equally grim and full of...desolation. This can be interpreted so many ways, literally of course, but I see it almost like a life that someone has neglected, and laid to waste.
Excellent piece, Brooke, and good luck in the contest,
- TR
Comment Written 29-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Thomas, and yes, the meaning is metaphorical - I appreciate your perceptive comments. Brooke
