Rejoice: Christmas Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Sleep Warm, Sweet Child"Christmas poems in various formats.
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Comment from TinyTeena
Really beautiful. This format is well suited to the topic and sounds like a lullaby. There are so many difficult roads that lie ahead of Baby Jesus, so He should make the most of this helpless time and enjoy his childhood. Soon enough many difficulties will come along. The poem flows easily along with unforced rhymes.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2009
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Really beautiful. This format is well suited to the topic and sounds like a lullaby. There are so many difficult roads that lie ahead of Baby Jesus, so He should make the most of this helpless time and enjoy his childhood. Soon enough many difficulties will come along. The poem flows easily along with unforced rhymes.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2009
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Thank you, Kristene - as always, I appreciate your thoughtful comments :-) Brooke
Comment from Dave M
Brooke,
This is an excellent poem, actually better than that but Fanstory won't let me give you a six-star. You do an excellent job of tying the serenity of Jesus's infanthood with the travails and dangers of what comes later.'
I have one minute suggestion:
"Before that [the] road that lies ahead," I don't think you need to emphasize Jesus' future with a harder "that." Everyone knows what you're talking about, and it reads better IMHO as "the."
Dave
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2009
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Brooke,
This is an excellent poem, actually better than that but Fanstory won't let me give you a six-star. You do an excellent job of tying the serenity of Jesus's infanthood with the travails and dangers of what comes later.'
I have one minute suggestion:
"Before that [the] road that lies ahead," I don't think you need to emphasize Jesus' future with a harder "that." Everyone knows what you're talking about, and it reads better IMHO as "the."
Dave
Comment Written 16-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2009
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Thank you, Dave - I appreciate your wish of a six :-) I will reread the poem with your suggestion in mind :-) Brooke
Comment from volunteer angel
Beautifully done pearl! Your poem gives the story of the birth of the Christ Child and goes on to tell the reader of the crucifixtion that will follow. "In coming years, God's word you'll spread" is my favorite line. I wish you luck in the contest! Mary Ann
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2009
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Beautifully done pearl! Your poem gives the story of the birth of the Christ Child and goes on to tell the reader of the crucifixtion that will follow. "In coming years, God's word you'll spread" is my favorite line. I wish you luck in the contest! Mary Ann
Comment Written 16-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2009
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Thank you, Volunteer Angel - I appreciate your lovely review :-) Brooke
Comment from fictionwriter
It's sad to think of all that he'll go through as he lies sleeping in the manger of hay. I love the way this poem forshadows his life. Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2009
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It's sad to think of all that he'll go through as he lies sleeping in the manger of hay. I love the way this poem forshadows his life. Well done.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2009
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Thank you, Joy - I appreciate your kind comments :-) Brooke
Comment from percival86jack
This is an all around gorgeous presentation Brooke! The beautiful message, the beautiful image, the great example of a rondeau all combine to make a unique presentation.
Cheers and warm wishes... Jack xoxox
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2009
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This is an all around gorgeous presentation Brooke! The beautiful message, the beautiful image, the great example of a rondeau all combine to make a unique presentation.
Cheers and warm wishes... Jack xoxox
Comment Written 16-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2009
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thank you so much, Jack - I'm really touched by your comments :-) Brooke
Comment from Writeaway...
Wow adewpearl, you truly do have a talent for writing and should certainly look at getting some of your work published, excellent job, keep writing!!
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2009
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Wow adewpearl, you truly do have a talent for writing and should certainly look at getting some of your work published, excellent job, keep writing!!
Comment Written 16-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2009
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Thank you, Jakeyboy - I appreciate your encouraging comments :-) Brooke
Comment from babylonia
brooke,
nicely done rondeau. great example. perfect meter and rhyme. easy to read and follow. no spaggies. imagery is excellent. the picture goes perfectly with it.
good luck~
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2009
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brooke,
nicely done rondeau. great example. perfect meter and rhyme. easy to read and follow. no spaggies. imagery is excellent. the picture goes perfectly with it.
good luck~
love,
barbara
Comment Written 16-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2009
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Thank you, Barbara. I appreciate your thoughtful comments :-) Brooke
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brooke,
you are very welcome. i hope you are having a great day.
love,
barbara
Comment from Deejharrington
Your poem really brings home that the Christ child was a baby. No matter what would happen in the next 30 years, at that moment he was a babe like any other. We tend to forget that he was human, a baby born just like we all were. You've reminded us of that beautifully.
deb
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2009
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Your poem really brings home that the Christ child was a baby. No matter what would happen in the next 30 years, at that moment he was a babe like any other. We tend to forget that he was human, a baby born just like we all were. You've reminded us of that beautifully.
deb
Comment Written 16-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2009
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Thank you, Deb - I'm so glad you like the message of my Christmas rondeau :-) Brooke
Comment from WRITER1
This is another lovely piece for the season. How wonderful it must have been to see that star above; as angels sung of the lord who had come.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2009
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This is another lovely piece for the season. How wonderful it must have been to see that star above; as angels sung of the lord who had come.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2009
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Thank you, Donna, for a lovely review :-) Brooke
Comment from BarnCat
Brooke, I really enjoy your poems with religious themes. I think that the first time I have written that on this site. Rather than trying to preach from a pulpit, you create art from a reverence that we want to drink in a savor. Thank you for another piece like this one. Deb
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2009
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Brooke, I really enjoy your poems with religious themes. I think that the first time I have written that on this site. Rather than trying to preach from a pulpit, you create art from a reverence that we want to drink in a savor. Thank you for another piece like this one. Deb
Comment Written 16-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2009
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Thank you, Deb. Preaching at people is never what I set out to do, so I appreciate your comments greatly! :-) Brooke
