Comment from Arkine

Excellent

Something we could sure use some of...just not all at once like it normally does. ~L~ Though, the growing season is almost over with, just the last cuts and the fall plants to harvest. I really need to learn how to grow something.

Nice job on the poem. It's amazing in spring how everything just suddenly comes to life after the first good rain. :)

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2009

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009

Thank you, my friend - I have no green thumb either - I just make flowers grow in my imagination and poems LOL Brooke

Comment from starkat

Excellent

Hi Brooke,
You did a beautiful job with all the rich imagery within this poem. I like how you take the reader's focus from beneath the blackened sky to the roots beneath the soil. We see the intrinsic value of every drop of water... the lifeblood of all life. You painted a lovely tableau with the sky, the thirsty crop, drops on leaf that will reach the roots within the soil.

Your poem flows smoothly and effortless within this rictameter so the reader is not even aware a form is involved. This is a tricky form, and I think you've done a masterful job with it. I'm sure you will do well in this contest.

Delightful poem.
Well done,
Be well,
Art

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2009

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009

Art, I've always believed the ultimate goal of form poetry is to make the form disappear - thank you so much for that comment - it makes my day!! Brooke :-)

Comment from Just2Write

Excellent

Another earth-friendly poem for our consideration. The world thirsts, and rain is nature's way of watering her garden. The plants in turn offer nitrogen and oxygen which helps to move the air and clouds around. A perfect match, really. Very thoughtful poem, dear friend. Most enjoyable read. Rose

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2009

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009

Rose, thank you. I appreciate your thoughtful comments and perceptive reading of my poem. Brooke :-)

Comment from amada

Excellent

Great choice of words to enlace with the iron-clad syllable count. I admire the way you can do it, so easily. A veiled ode to rain.

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2009

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009

Thank you, Amada. The syllable count of this form is not as difficult as making the first/last word that repeats sound unforced. Brooke :-)

Comment from fictionwriter

Excellent

There is so much to this little poem. Although I hate to be out in the rain trying to work, it is essential for the crops. Well done.

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2009

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009

Thank you, Joy - yes, the rain certainly has its disadvantages also! Brooke :-)

Comment from Xuders

Excellent

What a nice job! This poem has a lovely message, and it's punctuated correctly, so reading it is a pleasure.

I've not read a rictameter before, so this was a poetic adventure.

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2009

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009

I've never written a rictameter before, so it was an adventure for me too. Thank you, Redux. Brooke

Comment from joan marie

Excellent

Isn't this and Ethere? Great topic. Luckily it's been raining here almost everyday. Everything is lush and green. Great read. joan marie

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2009

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009

I don't know what your question means, Joan Marie. What is an Ethere? Thanks for your positive comments. Brooke :-)

reply by joan marie on 10-Sep-2009

It is a poem beginning with one word, then two, etc. google it. jm

reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009

yes, I did after I wrote back to you - but an etheree goes 1/2/3 etc and the rictameter goes 2/4/6 etc. I have never done an etheree. There sure are lots and lots of forms out there :-)

Comment from MariJo

Excellent

I liked this poem so much better than the last one you wrote! It is beautiful & adheres to the contest requirements. It flows perfectly & smoothly with normal phrasing & without any inverted lines. An excellent entry. Good luck!

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2009

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009

MariJo, thank you. Sorry the last one gave you trouble!! LOL
Brooke :-)

Comment from DecrepitOldBag

Excellent

My word! This is a truly difficult prompt, I cannot think of another FS member better equipped to deal with it. And how you have dealt with it! This is fantastic, Brooke. Absolutely faultless.

Good luck in the contest -- not that you'll need luck, I'm sure!

Warmest wishes and hugs
Kat

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2009

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009

Thank you, Kat, it is my first attempt at a rictameter - they are usually off-putting to me because the repeated first/last words end up sounding forced. I'm glad this one came across OK for you :-) Brooke

Comment from L.lora

Excellent

An excellent poem in message and the count is spot on. I liked this, gave birth to a whole plethora of thoughts and my mind has been blank for so long..your write is refreshing and invigorating..Lora

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2009

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009

Thank you, Lora, for your positive comments. If I could ask, what revision do you find necessary so that it would no longer be a four? Brooke :-)

reply by L.lora on 10-Sep-2009

There is non,,,,that was an oversight on my part and I'm on my way to correct it...never push buttons when children are talking to you...sorry about that...L

reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009

Thanks, Lora - you're lovely to take the time to change it :-) Brooke

reply by L.lora on 10-Sep-2009

Not a problem, glad you let me know..:) L