rondels and rondeaus
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Comment from cherry_rose
Brook, this is a wonderful poem brimming with the emotion of loneliness, of feeling alone. I think I prefer rhythm and rhyme to free verse almost anytime, so I definitely like those aspects of this poem.
cherry_
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2009
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Brook, this is a wonderful poem brimming with the emotion of loneliness, of feeling alone. I think I prefer rhythm and rhyme to free verse almost anytime, so I definitely like those aspects of this poem.
cherry_
Comment Written 21-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2009
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Cherry, thank you - yes, rhyme is just in my blood - I admire good free verse, but it just is not what I write with any flair at all!! Brooke
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You're welcome. As always, it was a pleasure to read one of your poems.
cherry_
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Adewpearl ...
This is an all-round good presentation. Both the picture at the top and your words tell a story and provide great imagery for your readers so that they will surely have to pause and think about what you have written.
There is nothing to suggest changing and, as it is a Contest entry, I wish you well.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
With love from ....... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2009
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Hullo Adewpearl ...
This is an all-round good presentation. Both the picture at the top and your words tell a story and provide great imagery for your readers so that they will surely have to pause and think about what you have written.
There is nothing to suggest changing and, as it is a Contest entry, I wish you well.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
With love from ....... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2009
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Thank you, Nanette Mary, for your thoughtful comments - I did not enter it in the contest because it's not free verse, but I appreciate your support!!! Brooke :-)
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Brooke...I'm glad you let this rondeau stand even though the contest calls for free verse...it is lovely. The words and picture are both heart-wrenching. We are the richest country in the world but our homeless population is a disgrace...excellent poem....blessings....chey
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2009
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Hi Brooke...I'm glad you let this rondeau stand even though the contest calls for free verse...it is lovely. The words and picture are both heart-wrenching. We are the richest country in the world but our homeless population is a disgrace...excellent poem....blessings....chey
Comment Written 21-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2009
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Chey, thank you. I am never concerned enough about contests to let them dictate what I write - 95% of what I write is not contest-related anyway. Brooke :-)
Comment from expressly4u
Another excellent rondeau showing your kind spirit and connection to people, particularly the disenfranchised. I continue to be amazed at your poetic talent that seems to be an eternal font of compassion.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2009
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Another excellent rondeau showing your kind spirit and connection to people, particularly the disenfranchised. I continue to be amazed at your poetic talent that seems to be an eternal font of compassion.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2009
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Thank you, my friend. I am honored by your kind comments. Brooke :-)
Comment from jadapenn
Hi Brooke, this was beautiful and yet heartrending. One never knows what road was travelled to bring people to this destiny. The picture reflects the mood of the poem.
Luv jada
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2009
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Hi Brooke, this was beautiful and yet heartrending. One never knows what road was travelled to bring people to this destiny. The picture reflects the mood of the poem.
Luv jada
Comment Written 21-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2009
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Thank you, Jada - no, many people assume, but few know - you are SO right! Brooke :-)
Comment from darkgreennights
hmm may throw up lunch now. That put me in my usual fine Friday-or hell day as I lovingly call it here mood. Of course they have shame, of course they have feeling, its me its you, its all of us, idiots and freaks who fail to see this forget EVERYTHING they ever knew about being human if they were in the first place! But keep it up folks, drive on by and laugh hearty. Because God of course hates the poor and suffering and loves those who find them humorous, that is all over the bible!
love
Kathleen
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2009
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hmm may throw up lunch now. That put me in my usual fine Friday-or hell day as I lovingly call it here mood. Of course they have shame, of course they have feeling, its me its you, its all of us, idiots and freaks who fail to see this forget EVERYTHING they ever knew about being human if they were in the first place! But keep it up folks, drive on by and laugh hearty. Because God of course hates the poor and suffering and loves those who find them humorous, that is all over the bible!
love
Kathleen
Comment Written 21-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2009
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I met the director of Midnight Run when a group from my church went to NYC one night to help him with their work - the group drives around routes where the homeless live on the streets in Manhattan in order to distribute a bagged meal, clothing, etc. He had been homeless himself once when he dropped out of Duke, drugged out, and though he was from the South, he found himself alone in NYC when his car broke down there. I asked him what the absolute worst part of being homeless had been - and he did not say being cold or wet or hungry - he said the worst part was becoming so dirty that people walked around him and looked at him as if he were a filthy, smelly animal. His answer has always made such an impact on me. Thank you, Kathleen. Brooke :-)
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whenever I meet homeless people that old song, theres a story in your eyes runs through my head, having read your story just reminded me to download that!
Comment from wierdgrace
I do know what you mean, so well, I see this alot and do my best to volunteer when feeling well, I loved the words your wrote, and how emotional they are, great entry, and wonderful poem, thank you so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2009
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I do know what you mean, so well, I see this alot and do my best to volunteer when feeling well, I loved the words your wrote, and how emotional they are, great entry, and wonderful poem, thank you so much for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2009
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Thank you, Grace. I always appreciate your thoughtful responses :-) Brooke
Comment from Phil Kitom
Brooke you may not have placed this poem in that writing prompt contest, but for me you have a glorious winner.
The depth of true feeling in this poem stands as testimony to a wonderful caring soul who it is a pleasure to know.
With great pleasure I award you a SIX
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2009
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Brooke you may not have placed this poem in that writing prompt contest, but for me you have a glorious winner.
The depth of true feeling in this poem stands as testimony to a wonderful caring soul who it is a pleasure to know.
With great pleasure I award you a SIX
Comment Written 21-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2009
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Dave, thank you for your generous wish of a six :-) Comments like yours more than make up for not entering a contest! Brooke :-)
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If I can I intend reviewing this poem again and awarding it a six for I am so impressed with it my dear friend.
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Thank you, I really appreciate that, Dave :-) Brooke
Comment from MsRefusenik
You are a rare one. You see those that are invisible to so many. This poem and its apt picture hit another one out of the field for a home run. I love how large your heart is. It is good that you remember the unremembered. Excellent.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2009
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You are a rare one. You see those that are invisible to so many. This poem and its apt picture hit another one out of the field for a home run. I love how large your heart is. It is good that you remember the unremembered. Excellent.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2009
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Thank you, Maryellen - they are there for all to see. I just wish more people would open their eyes and hearts :-) Brooke
Comment from Razz
So beautifully sad, and so unfortunately real.
Wonderful flow and rhyme.
This is the hardest part we all must face.
"I once had those who held me dear,
who kept me in their loving sphere,
till from their minds I was erased
as crowds pass by."
Have a magical day.
Razz
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2009
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So beautifully sad, and so unfortunately real.
Wonderful flow and rhyme.
This is the hardest part we all must face.
"I once had those who held me dear,
who kept me in their loving sphere,
till from their minds I was erased
as crowds pass by."
Have a magical day.
Razz
Comment Written 21-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2009
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Thank you, Razz, for a most insightful review :-) Brooke
