The Lull before the Storm
a reflective nonet87 total reviews
Comment from Phil Kitom
A beautifully constructed poem Brooke
but a heart breaking subject that even
now, all those years later the shadow
of that awful bomb hangs over us all.
Unfortunately Pandora is out of the box
and will never go back in again...
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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A beautifully constructed poem Brooke
but a heart breaking subject that even
now, all those years later the shadow
of that awful bomb hangs over us all.
Unfortunately Pandora is out of the box
and will never go back in again...
Comment Written 07-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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Thank you, Dave. I fear you are right about Pandora, my friend. How sad. Brooke
Comment from Nanny 6
This was certainly a dreadful event in history, and you took it one step further and honed in on the emotions of mothers watching their children suffer, something the average person doesn't take into consieration. Well done, Brooke. Judy
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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This was certainly a dreadful event in history, and you took it one step further and honed in on the emotions of mothers watching their children suffer, something the average person doesn't take into consieration. Well done, Brooke. Judy
Comment Written 07-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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Judy, thank you - this event is so big that it's hard to describe it in toto - a focus on one tiny thing seemed to be the way to go. Brooke
Comment from louparis
Well done within the constraints of the requirements. I'm not a fan of this sort of poetry, but it was interesting for me to read your piece.I would have used the instead of those in the second line.
Lou Paris
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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Well done within the constraints of the requirements. I'm not a fan of this sort of poetry, but it was interesting for me to read your piece.I would have used the instead of those in the second line.
Lou Paris
Comment Written 07-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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Thank you for the review, Lou. Could I please ask what sort of revision you think is necessary since you've given it a four rating? Brooke
Comment from joan marie
This is perfect without artwork. I got that you wanted the mothers to understand what it must have been like for those trapped in a war they wanted no part of. How do you protect a child from this? You don't. Wonderful writing. joan marie
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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This is perfect without artwork. I got that you wanted the mothers to understand what it must have been like for those trapped in a war they wanted no part of. How do you protect a child from this? You don't. Wonderful writing. joan marie
Comment Written 07-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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Joan Marie, I cannot imagine being a mother with no power whatsoever to protect my children from such horrors. Thank you, my friend. Brooke
Comment from Lyrical_CD
WOW...
powerful and speachless
what a thought you penned here...
Kinda glad there was not picture with this...
Good work.
Cory
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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WOW...
powerful and speachless
what a thought you penned here...
Kinda glad there was not picture with this...
Good work.
Cory
Comment Written 07-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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Cory, I could not imagine what sort of picture to include. Thank you so much for your most generous response. Brooke.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Oh, this is a sorrowful
piece, Brooke - how terrifying
is that -- tucking your children
up for the night and wondering
at the same time if they were next
to die.
Margaret.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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Oh, this is a sorrowful
piece, Brooke - how terrifying
is that -- tucking your children
up for the night and wondering
at the same time if they were next
to die.
Margaret.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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Margaret, I cannot even imagine - there were also many mothers in London during those years who must have known such terror with the Blitz. I'm so grateful I never had to face such a thing. Thank you. Brooke
Comment from patwannabe
OMG, Brooke, aren't those statistics incredible. I remember my husband telling me he saw the shadow on the sidewalk in Nagasaki of a man. That's all that was left. A perfect shadow. I think of it many times. I can see why the pilot of the Enola Gay committed suicide. How absolutely horrible. I pray no other atom bomb will ever be released. Thank you for sharing this terrible reminder. pat
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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OMG, Brooke, aren't those statistics incredible. I remember my husband telling me he saw the shadow on the sidewalk in Nagasaki of a man. That's all that was left. A perfect shadow. I think of it many times. I can see why the pilot of the Enola Gay committed suicide. How absolutely horrible. I pray no other atom bomb will ever be released. Thank you for sharing this terrible reminder. pat
Comment Written 07-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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I just double checked because the suicide thing didn't sound right to me - he died an old man at 92 and claimed all those years after the bombing to have no regrets. I guess he was one of those people who in his mind justified this as a way of saving a much greater number of people. I don't know how people could have talked themselves into this, but many have. Thank you so much for your thoughtful response. Brooke
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Well, thank you. I don't know now where I got the suicide thing, but I've thought that for many years. Never thought to check it out. Appreciate you doing that before I made a fool of myself to thousands of people :-) Don't think I've ever told anybody else. Gulp! Pat
Comment from Amicus
Excellent. Thought provoking. These were the core events so important in shaping the conscience of this, then six month old, soul.
Nagasaki tears
the fabric of all being
Hiroshima too
the nightmare began
with terrifying flashes
war to end all...wars
Thanks for reminding everyone. Well done, my friend.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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Excellent. Thought provoking. These were the core events so important in shaping the conscience of this, then six month old, soul.
Nagasaki tears
the fabric of all being
Hiroshima too
the nightmare began
with terrifying flashes
war to end all...wars
Thanks for reminding everyone. Well done, my friend.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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Thank you for your most thoughtful poetic response, my friend - I don't think the human mind was built to comprehend something like this if one has not actually lived it. All descriptions fall so short. Brooke
Comment from IndianaIrish
Hello Brooke! Very powerful poem that has no political overtones...just emotion of a horrific time. I remember the first time I read about the bombings when I was a kid, and I thought the book had made a mistake that the US was the country that dropped those bombs. Excellent piece!
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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Hello Brooke! Very powerful poem that has no political overtones...just emotion of a horrific time. I remember the first time I read about the bombings when I was a kid, and I thought the book had made a mistake that the US was the country that dropped those bombs. Excellent piece!
Indy :>)
Comment Written 07-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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Karyn, I wish it were a mistake. Thanks so much. Brooke
Comment from Jarlsbane
All I can is Poignant... very good writing Brooke... I don't really have anything else to add as I think that one word sums this up for me. -Michael
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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All I can is Poignant... very good writing Brooke... I don't really have anything else to add as I think that one word sums this up for me. -Michael
Comment Written 07-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2009
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Michael, poignant will do for me! Thank you. Brooke
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I loved it but it is so sad a poem... I see why you were miserable earlier
