The Hummingbird
a reflective septolet90 total reviews
Comment from Roisin
THis is beautiful Brooke. You've painted quite a picture here with your words. I love your final line: 'God's divine design.' You have it all in such few words - rhymes, internal rhymes and alliteration. I've never seen a hummingbird but from what I've seen on TV they're absolutely beautiful. I'd love to see one. Thanks for your notes too.
Hugs
Roisin
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009
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THis is beautiful Brooke. You've painted quite a picture here with your words. I love your final line: 'God's divine design.' You have it all in such few words - rhymes, internal rhymes and alliteration. I've never seen a hummingbird but from what I've seen on TV they're absolutely beautiful. I'd love to see one. Thanks for your notes too.
Hugs
Roisin
Comment Written 25-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009
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Roisin, thank you - oh, they are just beautiful and fairy-like - so tiny and fluttering. :-) Thanks, Brooke
Comment from Domino
Hi, Brooke. I'll have to plant some of that 'sharon' stuff for when I next run out of 'wine'. Mind you, hummingbirds will be shot on site if they try to pinch any. LOL!
Nice write. Ray xx
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009
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Hi, Brooke. I'll have to plant some of that 'sharon' stuff for when I next run out of 'wine'. Mind you, hummingbirds will be shot on site if they try to pinch any. LOL!
Nice write. Ray xx
Comment Written 25-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009
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Ray, thank you - I'll warn the hummingbirds to avoid you as I hear you're a crack shot! :-) Brooke
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I'm not that good, Brooke, so I've got a machine-gun to be on the safe side. Mwahahaha. xx
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Thinking of joining the NRA? That seems to be their philosophy! LOL
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You do seem to have your share of nutters, Brooke.
Good job us Brits are all normal. ;-) xx
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We have our share of nutters and then a boatload more for good measure :-) How you didn't manage to migrate here remains a mystery. :-D
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ROFLMAO!! xoxoxox
Comment from AlvinTEthington
These are extremely hard to write and you have done well. I especially like the working in of rhyme. The two stanzas have a nice contrast between flora and fauna. Good juxtaposition of picture and poem.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009
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These are extremely hard to write and you have done well. I especially like the working in of rhyme. The two stanzas have a nice contrast between flora and fauna. Good juxtaposition of picture and poem.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009
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I appreciate your gracious comments, Al. Brooke :-)
Comment from SHAHEND
Dear Adew, I have been too busy lately to write or read these wonderful writings from everywhere around the world!! I have missed it alot! This is such beautiful artwork and the simply lovely words just made me think how very beautiful nature and God is!! The flow was as beautiful as the thoughts and artwork!! Supurb!!!! Many Blessings and Thank you! Sharon
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009
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Dear Adew, I have been too busy lately to write or read these wonderful writings from everywhere around the world!! I have missed it alot! This is such beautiful artwork and the simply lovely words just made me think how very beautiful nature and God is!! The flow was as beautiful as the thoughts and artwork!! Supurb!!!! Many Blessings and Thank you! Sharon
Comment Written 25-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009
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Thank you so much, Sharon :-) Brooke
Comment from benjan
Two of my favorite things in one poem -- Rose of Sharon and hummingbirds. How did you know? I love the picture. I love the poem, and yes, they are God's divine design. I keep a calendar with hummingbirds on it every year.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009
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Two of my favorite things in one poem -- Rose of Sharon and hummingbirds. How did you know? I love the picture. I love the poem, and yes, they are God's divine design. I keep a calendar with hummingbirds on it every year.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009
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They're both so beautiful - I knew I couldn't go wrong - it's almost like cheating! LOL Thanks so much, Brooke
Comment from Amicus
Lovely, lovely septolet, Brooke. The flower bird imagery is sharp and the last line is just perfect commentary on the scene you have just word-painted.
Great job.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009
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Lovely, lovely septolet, Brooke. The flower bird imagery is sharp and the last line is just perfect commentary on the scene you have just word-painted.
Great job.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009
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Thank you - I appreciate your getting my morning off with a smile :-) Brooke
Comment from rama devi
What a delightful presentation with glorious artwork and lovely septolet (true to form) with rich purple background.
An artistic and tasteful display.
Lovely tone and tenor.
Fine work.
No spags.
Love, rd
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009
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What a delightful presentation with glorious artwork and lovely septolet (true to form) with rich purple background.
An artistic and tasteful display.
Lovely tone and tenor.
Fine work.
No spags.
Love, rd
Comment Written 25-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009
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Rama devi, thank you - I truly appreciate your visits and thoughtful comments, Brooke
Comment from stormwolf2
Nice little poem that painted me a picture. So much said in such a few words.
Beautiful picture. Nice rhyme too.
Best wishes,
Malcolm
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009
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Nice little poem that painted me a picture. So much said in such a few words.
Beautiful picture. Nice rhyme too.
Best wishes,
Malcolm
Comment Written 25-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009
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Malcolm, I appreciate your warm response, Brooke :-)
Comment from Joan E.
I was not aware that the rose of sharon attracts hummingbirds, but it does make sense, since plants are colorful and probably sweet smelling/tasting, which are all things that lure these jeweled creatures.
Your ensemble has everything: your poem portrays a beautiful picture duplicated by the artwork and harmonizing colors you chose, and you included rhyme, alliteration and delightful rhythm.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009
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I was not aware that the rose of sharon attracts hummingbirds, but it does make sense, since plants are colorful and probably sweet smelling/tasting, which are all things that lure these jeweled creatures.
Your ensemble has everything: your poem portrays a beautiful picture duplicated by the artwork and harmonizing colors you chose, and you included rhyme, alliteration and delightful rhythm.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009
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Joan, I googled plants that attract hummingbirds and got a list of ten - this is then mentioned in a bunch of websites as a good hummingbird plant. Thanks for your thoughtful comments, Brooke :-)
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So I should expect nine more beautiful plant poems! I am so glad we have google, but I know without it, you would make it your business to go to the library to do your research. Bottom line, we have more time to write poetry with the good time saving technologies. Have a great weekend and enjoy your jewelry booth volunteering.
Comment from jakuper
Such colours - od the picture adn of the words.
And the poem sounds very good.
It have the rhyming (as I like) and leaves a beatiful mood after the reading.
Sort and good.
Jack
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009
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Such colours - od the picture adn of the words.
And the poem sounds very good.
It have the rhyming (as I like) and leaves a beatiful mood after the reading.
Sort and good.
Jack
Comment Written 25-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009
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Thank you so much, Jack :-) Brooke
