Monkeyshines
Some silly thoughts on human foibles120 total reviews
Comment from schiestyboy
This was great! A very fun read, I just caught one nit in the 3rd stanza, I think you meant "pulled the wool over his eyes" (past tense like everything else). Thanks for sharing this wonderful piece, great use of humor :)
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2008
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This was great! A very fun read, I just caught one nit in the 3rd stanza, I think you meant "pulled the wool over his eyes" (past tense like everything else). Thanks for sharing this wonderful piece, great use of humor :)
Comment Written 12-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2008
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I just checked - the pull goes with the certain he'd from the line before - certain he'd pull - so I want it that way, but thank you as I always appreciate input thanks so much for your kind review. :-)
Comment from Nescher Pyscher
Might wanna rethink your doulbe use of "schnook". You've demonstrated you certainly have the ability to find another word that works.
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reply by the author on 12-Sep-2008
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Might wanna rethink your doulbe use of "schnook". You've demonstrated you certainly have the ability to find another word that works.
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Comment Written 12-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2008
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I noticed that - am working on it :-) Thanks!
Comment from Dave-Aranda-Richards
Have you done song lyrics with these ideas. Have a feeling you could write monster hit. Thanks again for the splendid entertainment....have a God weekend!
Dave
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2008
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Have you done song lyrics with these ideas. Have a feeling you could write monster hit. Thanks again for the splendid entertainment....have a God weekend!
Dave
Comment Written 12-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2008
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This is a most generous review - wish I could write music :-) Thank you :-)
Comment from nora arjuna
Hello brooke, you know it's great that you constantly produce something like this cause we do need some fun in here. Well, other than having a good laugh, you also taught me some new words I haven't come across before. Enjoyed, thanks!
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2008
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Hello brooke, you know it's great that you constantly produce something like this cause we do need some fun in here. Well, other than having a good laugh, you also taught me some new words I haven't come across before. Enjoyed, thanks!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2008
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I am so glad you are entertained - guess it's obvious that's my goal :-) Thanks :-)
Comment from sharon fallis
Very good bit of poetical gibberish! Wonderful word choices and usage. Great flow of rhyming verse. Wonderful visuals and imagery. Sharon
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2008
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Very good bit of poetical gibberish! Wonderful word choices and usage. Great flow of rhyming verse. Wonderful visuals and imagery. Sharon
Comment Written 12-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2008
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I love when you are entertained by my gibberish! Thanks ever so much :-)
Comment from raimie
Jake thought he'd found his patsy -
a clodhopper, a schnook,
but the knuckles on that knucklehead
did form one MEAN left hook!
I love this it is very ala Leroy Brown! Never be to confident because you don't always no the measure of a man! Excellent!
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2008
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Jake thought he'd found his patsy -
a clodhopper, a schnook,
but the knuckles on that knucklehead
did form one MEAN left hook!
I love this it is very ala Leroy Brown! Never be to confident because you don't always no the measure of a man! Excellent!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2008
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I am so pleased you liked this little cautionary tale! Thanks for the lovely review :-)
Comment from kassey
And I can still say it again, keep them coming, they are all just as good as the one before. Hilarious romps all of them. well done again for your imagination and amazing words. Excellent Kay
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2008
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And I can still say it again, keep them coming, they are all just as good as the one before. Hilarious romps all of them. well done again for your imagination and amazing words. Excellent Kay
Comment Written 12-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2008
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Well, aren't you just sweet? I am having such a fun time, and praise like this sure doesn't hurt! Thank you!!!!!
Comment from wierdgrace
more more more, you writing is so fun, and cheerie. i love it, the structuer makes since, and flows smoothly from line to line, draws on each emotions, and even presents strong images with its rhymes. I found not one error as I was enjoying the poem, i also found no revisions either. great writing, keep going.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2008
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more more more, you writing is so fun, and cheerie. i love it, the structuer makes since, and flows smoothly from line to line, draws on each emotions, and even presents strong images with its rhymes. I found not one error as I was enjoying the poem, i also found no revisions either. great writing, keep going.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2008
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I love your enthusiasm!! I could use you at my church to be on some committees that need livening up! :-) Thank you :-)
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thank you
Comment from E. W. Crowe
These are so brilliant! How many do you have? If they were mine, I'd definitely be searching somewhere to publish them.
I don't know if this will be helpful. In the line with MEAN, I think it needs a comma before the hook. But I'm not 100% sure. Good Job.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2008
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These are so brilliant! How many do you have? If they were mine, I'd definitely be searching somewhere to publish them.
I don't know if this will be helpful. In the line with MEAN, I think it needs a comma before the hook. But I'm not 100% sure. Good Job.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2008
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Thanks for the tip on the comma - I will check it out and thanks for the encouragement about publication which I really do need to try, especially after all the support I'm getting from this community!
Comment from chesli
I love all kinds of poetry. This is an fun read - the antics of Jake :) If you ever add an image (not that you need one) choose a grinning chimp LOL
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2008
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I love all kinds of poetry. This is an fun read - the antics of Jake :) If you ever add an image (not that you need one) choose a grinning chimp LOL
Comment Written 12-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2008
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I still need to get the nerve up to do that image thing! Haven't tried it yet - a phobia about technology :-) I'll screw up my courage yet. Thanks for the nice review! :-)
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It is simpler than I thought it would be. The easist way is to just click on add image from fanartreview.com. It's one of the first options listed. Then a page will come up with a search box in it and you type in (for example) "monkey" a lot of pics will come up that you can scroll through and when you choose one you just click the "select this" button on top of the photo and it automatically adds it to your page and takes you back to your entry page where you can choose a coordinating color. You can still do this to any of your poems right now. Just click "edit" and give it a whirl! Let me know if I can help you with it and I'll be happy to :)
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thank you - I will try it over the weekend!
