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5-7-5. Short-lived dark pleasure or long-lived white joy?186 total reviews
Comment from Cynthia Vale
The pleasure of flesh and the hot white joy that comes with it :) Nicely phrased. It inspires to try the 5-7-5 format... it's so distilled and poignant. Good work!
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The pleasure of flesh and the hot white joy that comes with it :) Nicely phrased. It inspires to try the 5-7-5 format... it's so distilled and poignant. Good work!
Comment Written 10-May-2013
Comment from Amenian Aypotheeno
Baa baa black sheep have you any wool, the black sheep of the family... so from dark stormy cloud in the sky and releasing its tears on the world, we see it transform in to a white fluffy cloud in that very same sky, with bright sunshine backing it... conversion complete... all you gotta do is release :)
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Baa baa black sheep have you any wool, the black sheep of the family... so from dark stormy cloud in the sky and releasing its tears on the world, we see it transform in to a white fluffy cloud in that very same sky, with bright sunshine backing it... conversion complete... all you gotta do is release :)
Comment Written 05-May-2013
Comment from Auroraboreal800
"Happy with short-lived
Dark, illusive, black pleasure?
If tasted white joy"
This leads to a deep and honest reflection. Are there three different questions?
Have a nice day Alcreator!
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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"Happy with short-lived
Dark, illusive, black pleasure?
If tasted white joy"
This leads to a deep and honest reflection. Are there three different questions?
Have a nice day Alcreator!
Comment Written 03-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR YOUR NICE QUEST REVIEW.
Comment from Norbanus
Turn opponents hot, bury them when cold.
Ladle them from in the pot when nine days old
There are times when pleasures rise
from the grief that others prize
It matters not how long you yearn,
there comes a age when it's your turn
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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Turn opponents hot, bury them when cold.
Ladle them from in the pot when nine days old
There are times when pleasures rise
from the grief that others prize
It matters not how long you yearn,
there comes a age when it's your turn
Comment Written 03-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR YOUR COMMENDABLE PROFESSIONAL REVIEW.
Comment from hari anand
Happy with short-livedDark, illusive, black pleasure?If tasted white joyi think dark pleadure here means material things and white joy is eternal long lived Gods grace.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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Happy with short-livedDark, illusive, black pleasure?If tasted white joyi think dark pleadure here means material things and white joy is eternal long lived Gods grace.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR YOUR NICE APPRECIABLE REVIEW.
Comment from Walu Feral
Another great little piece mate! You have such a God given ability to make a big statement in very few words and I respect you for it. Cheers Fez.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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Another great little piece mate! You have such a God given ability to make a big statement in very few words and I respect you for it. Cheers Fez.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR YOUR REVIEW WITH COMPLEMENTS.
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Most of sin and its pleasures are short lived. Your reference to dark, illusive and black (evil) pleasure, contrasting white (pure) joy is well written. I like the philosophical yet genuine nature of this 5-7-5, Good job, Carolyn
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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Most of sin and its pleasures are short lived. Your reference to dark, illusive and black (evil) pleasure, contrasting white (pure) joy is well written. I like the philosophical yet genuine nature of this 5-7-5, Good job, Carolyn
Comment Written 02-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR PROFESSIONAL REVIEW.
Comment from Spitfire
People don't like to admit they have a dark side, one that gives them pleasure. Cruelty is the nature of the beast, and those who taste white joy from its practice will not admit it. Ask any politician. :-)
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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People don't like to admit they have a dark side, one that gives them pleasure. Cruelty is the nature of the beast, and those who taste white joy from its practice will not admit it. Ask any politician. :-)
Comment Written 02-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR PROFESSIONAL REVIEW.
Comment from Eternal Muse
A well written poem with a punch which sounds like a senryu. Good choise of words. A thought proviking composition. Like your choice of the picture.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Love, Y.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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A well written poem with a punch which sounds like a senryu. Good choise of words. A thought proviking composition. Like your choice of the picture.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Love, Y.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR PROFESSIONAL REVIEW.
Comment from JohnDope
Very good imagery. I personally didn't care message that much, however the piece served it's purpose, was clear, and was well-written.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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Very good imagery. I personally didn't care message that much, however the piece served it's purpose, was clear, and was well-written.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
