The Ghost of Marion Lear
A tale of love, loss and revenge in the old west...75 total reviews
Comment from Ric Myworld
Thanks for the pleasure of reading another of your fine poem stories that gives us a little of everything. A gun fight by a lover, and a want-a-be, along with justice by the hands he would never have suspected. Great job. :-)
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Thanks for the pleasure of reading another of your fine poem stories that gives us a little of everything. A gun fight by a lover, and a want-a-be, along with justice by the hands he would never have suspected. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 22-Dec-2014
Comment from adewpearl
excellent rhyming couplets
and good use of internal rhyming also - great quiet/riot pairing
I love the story line
good use of dialogue, good character development
vivid, mood-creating detail of setting
town folk's surprise - folks' surprise - plural possessive
an effectively dramatic conclusion to your dramatic story poem :-) Brooke
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excellent rhyming couplets
and good use of internal rhyming also - great quiet/riot pairing
I love the story line
good use of dialogue, good character development
vivid, mood-creating detail of setting
town folk's surprise - folks' surprise - plural possessive
an effectively dramatic conclusion to your dramatic story poem :-) Brooke
Comment Written 22-Dec-2014
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is yet another chilling tale that the author has told in poetic firm. U love this tale and it is a wonderful rendition of the love lost story from the author in that totally depressing and wonderfully morbid tone of the author.
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This is yet another chilling tale that the author has told in poetic firm. U love this tale and it is a wonderful rendition of the love lost story from the author in that totally depressing and wonderfully morbid tone of the author.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2014
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Dean: You are so talented. Great rhymes and beat and story telling of the old west. Lost love then duals happen face to face. I like how everyone had to see, hush, nails bit, dust ball and then Randy won. Marion was sad and got even. What a waste of lives. Great photos. flylikeaneagle - nancy
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Dean: You are so talented. Great rhymes and beat and story telling of the old west. Lost love then duals happen face to face. I like how everyone had to see, hush, nails bit, dust ball and then Randy won. Marion was sad and got even. What a waste of lives. Great photos. flylikeaneagle - nancy
Comment Written 22-Dec-2014
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Dean Kuch,
Nice story told in rhyme form. Having read Charlie's work, I can see the parallel. Not a lady to be messed with, obviously, alive or dead.
May you and yours have a very Merry Christmas.
Patrick
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Hi Dean Kuch,
Nice story told in rhyme form. Having read Charlie's work, I can see the parallel. Not a lady to be messed with, obviously, alive or dead.
May you and yours have a very Merry Christmas.
Patrick
Comment Written 22-Dec-2014
Comment from nor84
He burst through the door, spit upon the floor -- took at (did you mean a seat?) seat down at the bar. I suggest spit on instead of upon, just sounds better to my ear.
She wouldn't recovered (recover), would ne'er love another, and remained a spinster for life.
Good one. Just found a couple of things.
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He burst through the door, spit upon the floor -- took at (did you mean a seat?) seat down at the bar. I suggest spit on instead of upon, just sounds better to my ear.
She wouldn't recovered (recover), would ne'er love another, and remained a spinster for life.
Good one. Just found a couple of things.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2014
Comment from nancy_e_davis
That's very good Dean. I love the western theme. I did a few in the past and they are always popular. She got even with her lovers killer but suffered the rest of her life. How sad. The nerve of him thinking she was his just for the taking! Well done! Nancy
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2014
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That's very good Dean. I love the western theme. I did a few in the past and they are always popular. She got even with her lovers killer but suffered the rest of her life. How sad. The nerve of him thinking she was his just for the taking! Well done! Nancy
Comment Written 22-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2014
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Thanks so much, Nancy. I truly appreciate it. :)
~Dean
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I intended to give you a six. I guess the curser slipped. Now it won't let me. Sorry
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Aw, no worries, Nancy. I'm just very happy that you enjoyed it. I've done that myself a couple of times, and while you can upgrade ones on up to fours, we can't upgrade a five to a six. It's the thought that counts. That, and the fact that you were entertained, of course.
Happy holidays, Nancy! ;)
Comment from LIJ Red
To the town of Agua Fria rode a stranger one fine day
and pulling the trigger she fell crost the dead cowboy's chest
well, he only did what he had to do and now he's growing old
her final prayer was answered when the rifles fired again
and I hate you one and all GD yore eyes
Me a fan of old cowboy songs? Surely not.
Excellent poem.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2014
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To the town of Agua Fria rode a stranger one fine day
and pulling the trigger she fell crost the dead cowboy's chest
well, he only did what he had to do and now he's growing old
her final prayer was answered when the rifles fired again
and I hate you one and all GD yore eyes
Me a fan of old cowboy songs? Surely not.
Excellent poem.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2014
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Thanks, LIJ Red. I appreciate you reading it, my friend. Merry Christmas to you and yours.
~Dean ;)
Comment from Jay Squires
Love your poem and the blending of Physical and verbal art. Do you tweak the picture to go with the poem ... or vice versa?
Folks sat in silence, showing stout defiance of Randy's Red's request. [of RANDY Red's request.]
She wouldn't recovered, would ne'er love another, [I can't see why you'd not use RECOVER, especially to rhyme with ANOTHER... No, I think Dean screwed up!
Entertaining, as usual, Dean.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2014
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Love your poem and the blending of Physical and verbal art. Do you tweak the picture to go with the poem ... or vice versa?
Folks sat in silence, showing stout defiance of Randy's Red's request. [of RANDY Red's request.]
She wouldn't recovered, would ne'er love another, [I can't see why you'd not use RECOVER, especially to rhyme with ANOTHER... No, I think Dean screwed up!
Entertaining, as usual, Dean.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2014
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Thanks, Jay. I write the poem, in this instance inspired by a few of Charlie Lucas's stories, then I go in seach of pictures and/or animations I have saved. I'll admit, I didn't have too many western photos saved, and the cover art I created myself for the poem. It took longer than the poem did, actually, LOL.
I really appreciate your kind and thoughtful review.
Merry Christmas to you & yours. ;)
~Dean
Comment from royowen
Brilliant poem Dean, I haven't actually read Charlie's work but I'll have to soon! Well done, my friend, my favourite reading genre was sci-fi, but I did read some westerns, I like a story/poem written well, and this is a goody, with tongue stuck firmly in your cheek, however you did get a little horror in there, with the ghost of Marion Lear, well done, Dean, great write, blessings, Roy.PS. Merry Christmas and a happy and prosperous new year and beyond to you and yours! Are you writing a Christmas poem/ story this year?
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Brilliant poem Dean, I haven't actually read Charlie's work but I'll have to soon! Well done, my friend, my favourite reading genre was sci-fi, but I did read some westerns, I like a story/poem written well, and this is a goody, with tongue stuck firmly in your cheek, however you did get a little horror in there, with the ghost of Marion Lear, well done, Dean, great write, blessings, Roy.PS. Merry Christmas and a happy and prosperous new year and beyond to you and yours! Are you writing a Christmas poem/ story this year?
Comment Written 22-Dec-2014