You Are Being Watched
Happy living Protect and keep safe 202 words A Non-Fiction122 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You are probably correct. Your second paragraph has a gigantice sentence it. Usually there are nor more than three items in series. You might want to break that sentence up.
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You are probably correct. Your second paragraph has a gigantice sentence it. Usually there are nor more than three items in series. You might want to break that sentence up.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
Comment from Dawn Munro
Well now, there is truth in what you write, undoubtedly, and it behooves us to be vigilant, but to live in fear is no life at all - watchful, yes, paranoid, no. I suggest there needs to be balance in life.
You make a strong statement - unfortunately, I think it is overstated. There are many good people watching too...
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Well now, there is truth in what you write, undoubtedly, and it behooves us to be vigilant, but to live in fear is no life at all - watchful, yes, paranoid, no. I suggest there needs to be balance in life.
You make a strong statement - unfortunately, I think it is overstated. There are many good people watching too...
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
Comment from wierdgrace
My better half, tell this to me everyday, and he takes great care of me, You are so true, someone is always watching us, freedon, well not always there. well said
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My better half, tell this to me everyday, and he takes great care of me, You are so true, someone is always watching us, freedon, well not always there. well said
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
Comment from Jade Lawson
I agree that prevent is always best than the cure,
however we cannot live in fear that someone is watching over us or may harm us.
You can't see, forecast or predict the future... it's true, still we ought to live.
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I agree that prevent is always best than the cure,
however we cannot live in fear that someone is watching over us or may harm us.
You can't see, forecast or predict the future... it's true, still we ought to live.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
Comment from humpwhistle
Please. If I can't see or predict the future, how can you?
What you are advocating is widespread paranoia.
I support your right to be paranoid, but I don't support the attempt to spread it, especially when you offer no substanitive proof. In effect, you are yelling, 'Fire', in a crowded movie theater.
If you want to change public opinion, bring documented proof next time.
Peace, Lee
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Please. If I can't see or predict the future, how can you?
What you are advocating is widespread paranoia.
I support your right to be paranoid, but I don't support the attempt to spread it, especially when you offer no substanitive proof. In effect, you are yelling, 'Fire', in a crowded movie theater.
If you want to change public opinion, bring documented proof next time.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
Comment from God's Writer
A very enjoyable story to read. Short, but a book could be written from what is in this story. I love the way you give each word so much power. Thank you
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A very enjoyable story to read. Short, but a book could be written from what is in this story. I love the way you give each word so much power. Thank you
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
Comment from kiwijenny
This rings very true to me because we were robbed a couple of years ago....they indeed had watched our house and neighbor hood ,,,,,,trying yo case the joint.....scary
God bless
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This rings very true to me because we were robbed a couple of years ago....they indeed had watched our house and neighbor hood ,,,,,,trying yo case the joint.....scary
God bless
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I guess this fits the category. I'm not sure who in the world would keep gold jewelry on a road. Maybe change the last sentence to something like: "Don't keep your gold jewelry in plain sight."
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I guess this fits the category. I'm not sure who in the world would keep gold jewelry on a road. Maybe change the last sentence to something like: "Don't keep your gold jewelry in plain sight."
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
Comment from JeanneHP
Very interesting take on where we find ourselves today, though a little scary. Today, more than ever we are being watched and it IS a dangerous world. Well written. I noticed one typo, should be - (jewelry). :-)
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Very interesting take on where we find ourselves today, though a little scary. Today, more than ever we are being watched and it IS a dangerous world. Well written. I noticed one typo, should be - (jewelry). :-)
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
Comment from Julia.
I'm not really sure the intent behind this. Is this meant to be a warning to people to be vigilant? While I agree with the general message, it does seem a bit exaggerated to imply that you are always being watched. I think in some areas--those with high crime rates--that is particularly true, but in other areas, not so much. Still, being cautious and looking out for family and friends is a good sentiment.
Some of the sentences in this are awkward, however, and repetitive. For example:
"...keeping account of your living activities to violate your rights to living" -- Do you need the first instance of "living"? Also, the phrase "rights to living" is awkward. Di you mean "right to life"? Or do you mean other rights that people have?
"and secured self," -- I think you mean "yourself" not just "self"
"anybody or anything that you earn, acquire, inherit, get or obtain" -- As written, it sounds like the "earn, acquire..." is meant to modify both "anybody" and "anything". And it doesn't make moral sense to apply that to "anybody" since one does not earn or acquire (or ...) a person.
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I'm not really sure the intent behind this. Is this meant to be a warning to people to be vigilant? While I agree with the general message, it does seem a bit exaggerated to imply that you are always being watched. I think in some areas--those with high crime rates--that is particularly true, but in other areas, not so much. Still, being cautious and looking out for family and friends is a good sentiment.
Some of the sentences in this are awkward, however, and repetitive. For example:
"...keeping account of your living activities to violate your rights to living" -- Do you need the first instance of "living"? Also, the phrase "rights to living" is awkward. Di you mean "right to life"? Or do you mean other rights that people have?
"and secured self," -- I think you mean "yourself" not just "self"
"anybody or anything that you earn, acquire, inherit, get or obtain" -- As written, it sounds like the "earn, acquire..." is meant to modify both "anybody" and "anything". And it doesn't make moral sense to apply that to "anybody" since one does not earn or acquire (or ...) a person.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
