You're Your Words
In 78 words let people discover your status, personality160 total reviews
Comment from Adri7enne
"Each alpha tells your persona." Perhaps you mean "Each alpha REVEALS your persona."
"Grace, gravity and grandeur or greatness would BE REVEAL." would BE REVEALED.
IF "you ever think yourself correct, right or THE best in the world, let people certify TO IT. The Truth will be REVEALED." These are the corrections I would suggest to make these sentences correct in good English. Good luck with your writing, ALD.
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"Each alpha tells your persona." Perhaps you mean "Each alpha REVEALS your persona."
"Grace, gravity and grandeur or greatness would BE REVEAL." would BE REVEALED.
IF "you ever think yourself correct, right or THE best in the world, let people certify TO IT. The Truth will be REVEALED." These are the corrections I would suggest to make these sentences correct in good English. Good luck with your writing, ALD.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
Comment from JB Lynn
I like the alliteration in "Grace, gravity and grandeur or greatness would reveal." I'm just sorry the sentence breaks off. What are these things describing? I like the general concept of this short short piece "You are your words." 51 words, wow, that's quite a challenge! Thank you for sharing.
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I like the alliteration in "Grace, gravity and grandeur or greatness would reveal." I'm just sorry the sentence breaks off. What are these things describing? I like the general concept of this short short piece "You are your words." 51 words, wow, that's quite a challenge! Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
Comment from Jackarrie
Words have so much power, whether written or spoken (the pen is mightier than the sword)
A blatantly truthful piece of work, with wisdom. I like it.
Well done.
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Words have so much power, whether written or spoken (the pen is mightier than the sword)
A blatantly truthful piece of work, with wisdom. I like it.
Well done.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
Comment from Kingsland
There is not very much here to respond to. The way this is written leaves big gaps. I am not at all sure what the end meaning from this I was supposed to take. I think this need to be longer with more written to flesh it all out on what the point was you were trying to make here. I think this was a three star performance, but I will be generous and award it four stars. It really needs more of what leaves the reader scratching his head... John
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There is not very much here to respond to. The way this is written leaves big gaps. I am not at all sure what the end meaning from this I was supposed to take. I think this need to be longer with more written to flesh it all out on what the point was you were trying to make here. I think this was a three star performance, but I will be generous and award it four stars. It really needs more of what leaves the reader scratching his head... John
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
Comment from H Darwin Reeves
Nice. I think any of us who attempt to craft words can certainly identify with your work. You've nailed the feelings (if we are truthful with ourselves) that each writer experiences. Thanks for sharing.
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Nice. I think any of us who attempt to craft words can certainly identify with your work. You've nailed the feelings (if we are truthful with ourselves) that each writer experiences. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
Comment from Edward Buatois
I agree with some of the other comments here. I don't mean to be overly critical, but it doesn't make a lot of sense to me and in some ways I don't see how the different ideas relate. Overall I feel that the piece is about only finding out if you're a good writer based on reader response, which really is the ultimate truth on the quality of a work (though even that isn't always true -- it can easily happen that good work goes unrecognized, and bad work shoots in popularity -- look at 50 Shades of Gray).
I don't know if I got that right or not, but I will say this: Making your point obscure isn't necessarily the same thing as offering a beautiful underlying truth through carefully chosen abstract thoughts and images.
A good sentiment -- if I understood it correctly -- just needs some tightening up. All my best.
You are your words. Your wisdom sparks in alphas. Each alpha tells your persona. If published, readers would appreciate your excellence. Grace, gravity and grandeur or greatness would reveal. You ever think yourself correct, right or best in the world. Let people certify. Truth reveals.
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I agree with some of the other comments here. I don't mean to be overly critical, but it doesn't make a lot of sense to me and in some ways I don't see how the different ideas relate. Overall I feel that the piece is about only finding out if you're a good writer based on reader response, which really is the ultimate truth on the quality of a work (though even that isn't always true -- it can easily happen that good work goes unrecognized, and bad work shoots in popularity -- look at 50 Shades of Gray).
I don't know if I got that right or not, but I will say this: Making your point obscure isn't necessarily the same thing as offering a beautiful underlying truth through carefully chosen abstract thoughts and images.
A good sentiment -- if I understood it correctly -- just needs some tightening up. All my best.
You are your words. Your wisdom sparks in alphas. Each alpha tells your persona. If published, readers would appreciate your excellence. Grace, gravity and grandeur or greatness would reveal. You ever think yourself correct, right or best in the world. Let people certify. Truth reveals.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
Comment from patsolstad
Oh, my. I feel so ignorant. The only thing I really understand is the first line, but I am having trouble agreeing with it. I am more than my words...I am my actions, as well, and maybe the latter is more important (actions speak louder than words). Sorry...
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Oh, my. I feel so ignorant. The only thing I really understand is the first line, but I am having trouble agreeing with it. I am more than my words...I am my actions, as well, and maybe the latter is more important (actions speak louder than words). Sorry...
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I haven't been on much due to moving home and country, so I might have missed some of your writing. I agree with what you say to a point, I try to write poetry drawing from my experiences, but when it comes to fiction, I am anything but what my character is. So this is a 50/50 review, half, I agree with and half I don't. But that's what makes us human, we are all different, with different perspectives. Nice to read you again!! xsx Sandra
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I haven't been on much due to moving home and country, so I might have missed some of your writing. I agree with what you say to a point, I try to write poetry drawing from my experiences, but when it comes to fiction, I am anything but what my character is. So this is a 50/50 review, half, I agree with and half I don't. But that's what makes us human, we are all different, with different perspectives. Nice to read you again!! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
Comment from TheWriteTeach
I get your first line - you are your words. Unfortunately, after that not much makes any sense to me. Your wisdom sparks in alphas. An alpha is the first letter of the Greek alphabet, the brightest star in the sky, the leader of a pack, etc. I fail to make the connection. You continue on with incomplete sentences that are difficult, if not impossible, to understand. Your sentence, 'You ever think yourself correct, right or best in the world.' appears to be a question but you used a period instead. You have 45 words here and were allowed 51. Those other six words could go a long way to fix incomplete sentences and give the reader a complete thought to aid in understanding.
I see you have a blue ribbon of recognition and the seal for All Time Best. This makes me wonder what I have missed that others, apparently, did not.
Suzanne
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I get your first line - you are your words. Unfortunately, after that not much makes any sense to me. Your wisdom sparks in alphas. An alpha is the first letter of the Greek alphabet, the brightest star in the sky, the leader of a pack, etc. I fail to make the connection. You continue on with incomplete sentences that are difficult, if not impossible, to understand. Your sentence, 'You ever think yourself correct, right or best in the world.' appears to be a question but you used a period instead. You have 45 words here and were allowed 51. Those other six words could go a long way to fix incomplete sentences and give the reader a complete thought to aid in understanding.
I see you have a blue ribbon of recognition and the seal for All Time Best. This makes me wonder what I have missed that others, apparently, did not.
Suzanne
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
Comment from Sapphire33
Wow you are right, every word you have penned here makes perfect sense, and I do feel, if by chance you are lucky enough to become Published, Doing you very best is needed for success.
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Wow you are right, every word you have penned here makes perfect sense, and I do feel, if by chance you are lucky enough to become Published, Doing you very best is needed for success.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
