Surcease
a mirage poem168 total reviews
Comment from Sonjalee
Yes, it is a complicated poem. I like the way the first 2 lines are repeated in the next stanza -lines 4 and 5,
The fourth stanza repeats in the 3rd and fourth line in the last stanza.
The third stanza stands on its own, I think
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Yes, it is a complicated poem. I like the way the first 2 lines are repeated in the next stanza -lines 4 and 5,
The fourth stanza repeats in the 3rd and fourth line in the last stanza.
The third stanza stands on its own, I think
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Sonja, thank you so very much for your gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from Lulube
Wow what a confusing style of writing for this poem. I did so enjoyed reading this poem, even though I had no clue about the style.
lulube
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Wow what a confusing style of writing for this poem. I did so enjoyed reading this poem, even though I had no clue about the style.
lulube
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Lulube, thank you so very much :-) The style was just invented by Honeycomb last week. Brooke
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maybe I will take another look at the style.
lulube
Comment from K.W.
Beautiful in both form and content. Lovely cadence and unforced rhyme. This flows so naturally I can hear it sung. I truly appreciate your talent Brooke. :) very best, k
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Beautiful in both form and content. Lovely cadence and unforced rhyme. This flows so naturally I can hear it sung. I truly appreciate your talent Brooke. :) very best, k
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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KW, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
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My pleasure!
Comment from jppoet
A nice poem but too much repetition. Poetry is not about technicality (syllabicatios that fall upon a page in various convolutions) but about the BIG ESSES; SYMPATHY, SINCERITY, SENSITIVITY, SWEETNESS AND STRAIGHT-FROM-THE-HEARTNESS. YOU, ABOVE ALL, KNOW THAT, KNOW HOW TO DO IT.
I STILL LOVE SAWYER THE LAWYER -- and YOU TOO. JOHN
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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A nice poem but too much repetition. Poetry is not about technicality (syllabicatios that fall upon a page in various convolutions) but about the BIG ESSES; SYMPATHY, SINCERITY, SENSITIVITY, SWEETNESS AND STRAIGHT-FROM-THE-HEARTNESS. YOU, ABOVE ALL, KNOW THAT, KNOW HOW TO DO IT.
I STILL LOVE SAWYER THE LAWYER -- and YOU TOO. JOHN
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Sorry you didn't think the feeling came through. Thanks for reviewing. Brooke
Comment from bhogg
Brooke - what can I say. I love your work. In this one, you've captured my favorite time of the day, sun-rise. I'm guilty of staying curled up for just a few minutes and listening to the birds, my natural alarm clock. Always warm regards, Bill
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Brooke - what can I say. I love your work. In this one, you've captured my favorite time of the day, sun-rise. I'm guilty of staying curled up for just a few minutes and listening to the birds, my natural alarm clock. Always warm regards, Bill
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Bill, thank you so very much, my friend. I truly appreciate your encouraging comments and your wonderfully generous exceptional rating. Brooke
Comment from Bina1
Such a beautiful, peaceful feel to this lovely poem. The hush before dawn, the world is still sleeping, one of my favorite times. Thank you as well for the description of this fine poem.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Such a beautiful, peaceful feel to this lovely poem. The hush before dawn, the world is still sleeping, one of my favorite times. Thank you as well for the description of this fine poem.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Bina, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from KYPollard/El Gato
Like the dawn this is such a quiet, calming poem. Makes you want to hold your breath because it is as fragile as the dawn. That's my experience with this. Nicely done, my friend.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Like the dawn this is such a quiet, calming poem. Makes you want to hold your breath because it is as fragile as the dawn. That's my experience with this. Nicely done, my friend.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Kathy, thank you so much for your thoughtful review :-) I so appreciate your generous exceptional rating. Brooke
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Excellent is this mirage specialised form of poem, the joy and ecstasy is infinite in the moments ending night and resuming a new dawn, so serene and calm, so sweet and lyrical, so mild and shady, nice visual, glowing vision. 9/154
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Excellent is this mirage specialised form of poem, the joy and ecstasy is infinite in the moments ending night and resuming a new dawn, so serene and calm, so sweet and lyrical, so mild and shady, nice visual, glowing vision. 9/154
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Thank you for your thoughtful review, Alcreator :-) Brooke
Comment from Leineco
What an interesting form! I would not have guessed such restrictions would produce such an eminently enjoyable poem :-) Although to my personal taste (not REVIEWERS taste) the repetition is a bit distracting, that does not detract from the skill you employed to write this mirror poem. I particularly liked "silence forms a wordless song" and "many clamor to be heard...defered" . Nicly done. I enjoyed the experience :-)
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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What an interesting form! I would not have guessed such restrictions would produce such an eminently enjoyable poem :-) Although to my personal taste (not REVIEWERS taste) the repetition is a bit distracting, that does not detract from the skill you employed to write this mirror poem. I particularly liked "silence forms a wordless song" and "many clamor to be heard...defered" . Nicly done. I enjoyed the experience :-)
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Leineco, thank you for your thoughtful feedback. My daughter is also one who is not in love with repeating forms, but I love them :-) Brooke
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Brooke,
a true wordsmith delivering a picture perfect vision of imagery. There was such a calmness that befell me as I read this exquisite poem, but I know it will only be surcease, for my day is about to start.
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Hi Brooke,
a true wordsmith delivering a picture perfect vision of imagery. There was such a calmness that befell me as I read this exquisite poem, but I know it will only be surcease, for my day is about to start.
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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James, thank you so much for such lovely comments and for your most generous exceptional rating :-) Brooke
