If Fall Should Ever Disappear
rhyming quatrains174 total reviews
Comment from MelReyn
I love fall, and I feel that this does it justice. You touched on each thing that makes that season so special to me. The colorful leaves and the relief from the heat of summer are the big ones for me. I'm not so good with poetry, so I'm useless when it comes to finding ways to improve. But I can tell you that this doesn't need to improve. It is enjoyable in every way,and I couldn't ask for a better executed poem.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2012
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I love fall, and I feel that this does it justice. You touched on each thing that makes that season so special to me. The colorful leaves and the relief from the heat of summer are the big ones for me. I'm not so good with poetry, so I'm useless when it comes to finding ways to improve. But I can tell you that this doesn't need to improve. It is enjoyable in every way,and I couldn't ask for a better executed poem.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2012
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MelReyn, thank you so very much for this encouraging review :-) Brooke
Comment from sunnilicious
Lovely poem. It has a nice flow of rhythm and rhymes. Subtle rhymes on an abab scheme. It is well thought out and clearly written. Nicely done. Excellent work.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2012
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Lovely poem. It has a nice flow of rhythm and rhymes. Subtle rhymes on an abab scheme. It is well thought out and clearly written. Nicely done. Excellent work.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2012
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sunnilicious, thanks so very much for your gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from ScarletClearwater
This was an interesting concept to follow. Great job using your imagination in this piece. It is a beautiful read. From a great mind.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2012
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This was an interesting concept to follow. Great job using your imagination in this piece. It is a beautiful read. From a great mind.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2012
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Scarlet, thank you so much for your gracious response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Brooke,
The Fall colours are always a lovely show, especially for someone like myself used to a climate where the difference between the seasons is the length of the daylight hours!
Patrick
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2012
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Hi Brooke,
The Fall colours are always a lovely show, especially for someone like myself used to a climate where the difference between the seasons is the length of the daylight hours!
Patrick
Comment Written 14-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much, Patrick :-) Brooke
Comment from missy98writer
Brooke,
I'm glad your back. I wrote two poems to you. I have one posted and the other in preview mode. Your poem is fabulously written with exquisite imagery.
The art work you used is gorgeous of the autumn scene.
In your quatrains poem you used excellent rhyme and meter.
You used very fine alliteration: "though trees, consumes the air and chilling, to travel, learn life's & crisp and clear."
You also used great metaphors: "rainbow landscape never seen, dream of leaves, summer's heat consumes the air, fails to leave, cornucopia dreams to take the whole view & life's changed"
I enjoyed your last stanza:
If fall should ever disappear
as if its days have been swept clean,
I'll dream of autumn, crisp and clear,
although the world stays ever green.
I love your whimsical poem about Autumn.
I wish you good luck in the contest with your amazing poem.
Would I recommend your food for thought poem to others reviewers?
Yes, I would,
Keep rocking the poetic art.
Please have a Happy Holidays, my friend ,
Love ya,
Melissa.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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Brooke,
I'm glad your back. I wrote two poems to you. I have one posted and the other in preview mode. Your poem is fabulously written with exquisite imagery.
The art work you used is gorgeous of the autumn scene.
In your quatrains poem you used excellent rhyme and meter.
You used very fine alliteration: "though trees, consumes the air and chilling, to travel, learn life's & crisp and clear."
You also used great metaphors: "rainbow landscape never seen, dream of leaves, summer's heat consumes the air, fails to leave, cornucopia dreams to take the whole view & life's changed"
I enjoyed your last stanza:
If fall should ever disappear
as if its days have been swept clean,
I'll dream of autumn, crisp and clear,
although the world stays ever green.
I love your whimsical poem about Autumn.
I wish you good luck in the contest with your amazing poem.
Would I recommend your food for thought poem to others reviewers?
Yes, I would,
Keep rocking the poetic art.
Please have a Happy Holidays, my friend ,
Love ya,
Melissa.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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Melissa, I don't fly home until Sunday but came back on to post the contest poem before the deadline. That is so nice that you've written poems for me. I will go look for the one you've already posted. I really appreciate your generous exceptional rating, too.
Brooke :-)
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I was hurting so to take my mind off my pain I write all kinds of poetry. I wish you safe passage home, my friend. Please have a blessed Holidays, my friend.
Your poem deserved ten stars.
Love ya,
Melissa.
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I'm so sorry to hear you've been hurting, my friend :-)
Please know I am thinking of you.
Comment from Robert Lee Brown
Excellent write. Makes me think: If death should ever disappear. What then?
I love fall also. I find it quite a show. It would be nice if people became more beautiful just before their end. Yet, for the best, maybe their spirits do.
Many thanks for sharing. Are you back home? Bob
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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Excellent write. Makes me think: If death should ever disappear. What then?
I love fall also. I find it quite a show. It would be nice if people became more beautiful just before their end. Yet, for the best, maybe their spirits do.
Many thanks for sharing. Are you back home? Bob
Comment Written 14-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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Have you seen the classic movie Death Takes a Holiday? You should watch it if you don't know it :-) I won't fly home until Sunday :-) Thanks so much, Bob Brooke
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello adewpearl, Brooke,
The splendor of autumn, indeed. Beautiful descriptive writing and imagery, especially ...
If fall should ever disappear
as if its days have been swept clean,
I'll dream of autumn, crisp and clear,
although the world stays ever green.
A perfect autumn poem. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. Happy Holidays, LateBloomer
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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Hello adewpearl, Brooke,
The splendor of autumn, indeed. Beautiful descriptive writing and imagery, especially ...
If fall should ever disappear
as if its days have been swept clean,
I'll dream of autumn, crisp and clear,
although the world stays ever green.
A perfect autumn poem. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. Happy Holidays, LateBloomer
Comment Written 14-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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Late Bloomer, thank you so very much for you kind contest wishes and for your most generous exceptional rating - I truly appreciate it :-) Brooke
Comment from KYPollard/El Gato
I forgot how much I love reading your poems, Brooke. As always, your words paint a beautiful picture that pulls me in. Nicely done, my friend.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2012
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I forgot how much I love reading your poems, Brooke. As always, your words paint a beautiful picture that pulls me in. Nicely done, my friend.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2012
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Kathy, thank you so very much, my friend :-) It really is great to see your name again :-) Brooke
Comment from Tonulak
Dear Brooke,
I loved the varied beautifully rendered metaphors here; the harvest moon on imagined vine, the dreaming up of flocks of geese...This one is a total winner--Ted
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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Dear Brooke,
I loved the varied beautifully rendered metaphors here; the harvest moon on imagined vine, the dreaming up of flocks of geese...This one is a total winner--Ted
Comment Written 14-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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Ted, thank you so very much!! I truly appreciate your encouragement and your wonderfully generous exceptional rating :-) Brooke
Comment from robina1978
So pleased that you are back, Brooke. I hope you had a lovely time with the family. This poem I can relate to. We don't want to do without autumn and its beauty. Great rhyming quatrains. Best wishes for the prompt.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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So pleased that you are back, Brooke. I hope you had a lovely time with the family. This poem I can relate to. We don't want to do without autumn and its beauty. Great rhyming quatrains. Best wishes for the prompt.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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Ine, I fly home on Sunday. I had to post this from my daughter's due to the contest deadline. Thanks so much :-) Be back soon! Brooke
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Robert thought you came back too early and he was right again. Can't wait till you are back.
