Tantalizing Eyes
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Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
So Steven is going off somewhere to lick his wounds, thinking he has been used. Depending on how one looks at it, I suppose that could appear to be the case.
Maybe teh cultural differences are beginning to show a little as well.
Good chapter, keeping the tension on.
Juliette
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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So Steven is going off somewhere to lick his wounds, thinking he has been used. Depending on how one looks at it, I suppose that could appear to be the case.
Maybe teh cultural differences are beginning to show a little as well.
Good chapter, keeping the tension on.
Juliette
Comment Written 10-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from anabelle
Good chapter, Barbara. Wow! Just when I thought things were settling down between them. You certainly know how to throw in the twists and turns.
Thanks for the lovely read.
Regards, anabelle
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Good chapter, Barbara. Wow! Just when I thought things were settling down between them. You certainly know how to throw in the twists and turns.
Thanks for the lovely read.
Regards, anabelle
Comment Written 10-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I certainly let them sail smoothly in love, the novel would have to end.
Comment from Mariea
Good morning Barbara. A good continuation of the story. Well written, as ever, without cluttere or any spags that I could see.
Have a great day, regards Mia
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Good morning Barbara. A good continuation of the story. Well written, as ever, without cluttere or any spags that I could see.
Have a great day, regards Mia
Comment Written 10-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your kind words. I hope you have a great day.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form, good meter, good flow, wonderful picture. i am enjoying this story and can't wait to see how steve forgives leya. good job
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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this is very well written with good form, good meter, good flow, wonderful picture. i am enjoying this story and can't wait to see how steve forgives leya. good job
Comment Written 10-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from Savoy8you
I LIKE YOUR STORIES AND I LIKE THIS CHAPTER. ME AND MY MOM LIKE READING THEM BECAUSE IT GIVES A CHARACTER AND POINT OF VIEW
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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I LIKE YOUR STORIES AND I LIKE THIS CHAPTER. ME AND MY MOM LIKE READING THEM BECAUSE IT GIVES A CHARACTER AND POINT OF VIEW
Comment Written 10-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Thank you for the nice compliment. I appreciate your review.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi barbara,
Silly man, he could at least have asked and thought about it.
Well written dialogues and good descriptions. I liked the interplay between Leya and Matt.
Patrick
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Hi barbara,
Silly man, he could at least have asked and thought about it.
Well written dialogues and good descriptions. I liked the interplay between Leya and Matt.
Patrick
Comment Written 10-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your review and support.
Comment from lola29
Wow! I think Leya may have had good intentions, but she certainly went about it all wrong. Unless, of course, she's pretending with Matt. I feel sorry for Steven.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Wow! I think Leya may have had good intentions, but she certainly went about it all wrong. Unless, of course, she's pretending with Matt. I feel sorry for Steven.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Leya intentions are honorable, just misguided. Thank you for your support and the review.
Comment from Perp Ihebom
Now i cannot wait to read the next chapter. I am longing to know how this poor (well, rich but disadvantaged ) girl will wriggle out of this tight corner. IN ONE of the lines in italics, you omitted the word 'of'. Great work. cheers
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Now i cannot wait to read the next chapter. I am longing to know how this poor (well, rich but disadvantaged ) girl will wriggle out of this tight corner. IN ONE of the lines in italics, you omitted the word 'of'. Great work. cheers
Comment Written 10-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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I will check it out. Thank you for finding my left out word. I read what it's supposed to say, not what it actually says. I appreciate your support.
Comment from Helen Tan
I think Matt might just be able to talk Steven round and get him to return.
he put his hand on her back and rubbed softly.
I feel that "and gently stroked it" sounds more concerned. Maybe "rubbed" sounds a bit harder, just a thought.
someway
I'm not sure about this but should this read as two words, after all it implies "some plan", some method"...so should be written as two words?
Matt saw the chocolate candy bar and a slip of paper on the floor and picked them up.
Two "and" in this sentence, the first for listing, the second for joining two sentences. Suggest "Matt saw the chocolate candy bar and a slip of paper on the floor. He picked them up."
Everything will workout.
"work out" - two words, otherwise it's an exercise routine.
Leya dried her cheeks and took a deep breath.
Line spacing before this.
I told him he couldn't annul the marriage because I wasn't a virgin. He slapped me and called me a liar.
OK now I see why she needs to have the non virgin documentation.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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I think Matt might just be able to talk Steven round and get him to return.
he put his hand on her back and rubbed softly.
I feel that "and gently stroked it" sounds more concerned. Maybe "rubbed" sounds a bit harder, just a thought.
someway
I'm not sure about this but should this read as two words, after all it implies "some plan", some method"...so should be written as two words?
Matt saw the chocolate candy bar and a slip of paper on the floor and picked them up.
Two "and" in this sentence, the first for listing, the second for joining two sentences. Suggest "Matt saw the chocolate candy bar and a slip of paper on the floor. He picked them up."
Everything will workout.
"work out" - two words, otherwise it's an exercise routine.
Leya dried her cheeks and took a deep breath.
Line spacing before this.
I told him he couldn't annul the marriage because I wasn't a virgin. He slapped me and called me a liar.
OK now I see why she needs to have the non virgin documentation.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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I copied this so I can make all the corrections. Thank you for your review and support. I appreciate from a great author like you.
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Not a great author, just a fellow author. =D
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I've read your work. I am impressed. You're very good.
Comment from jadapenn
Hi Girlfriend, this was a very nice chapter. Matt is still the terrific and dependable guy. He now seems to be everyone's big daddy. I loved the emotion in the chapter. Poor Leya. I hope Steven comes to his senses - soon.
One little gremlin:
She's not capable [of] doing anything that bad. She must be exaggerating.
Luv jada
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Hi Girlfriend, this was a very nice chapter. Matt is still the terrific and dependable guy. He now seems to be everyone's big daddy. I loved the emotion in the chapter. Poor Leya. I hope Steven comes to his senses - soon.
One little gremlin:
She's not capable [of] doing anything that bad. She must be exaggerating.
Luv jada
Comment Written 10-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Hey, I have always loved Matt. He's the man I wish more men would be like. Oh well, he's a figment of my imagination. Thank you for your review. I am trying to read your latest post, but keep getting interrupted.
