Triolets: Traditional and Modified
Viewing comments for Chapter 48 "In Dreams I am a Gliding Swan"Poems employing this musical, repeating form
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Comment from TinyTeena
When asleep and dreaming you can be anything you want to be - happy,content and peaceful.You are able to escape from life itself and enter a pretend world that's safe and serene. But when awake reality hits and fears/responsibilities/worries all come flooding back. Why must this be so? Why can't the serenity of dreams continue on into the daylight?
The triolet form is well suited to this topic showing your mind questioning, worrying about things while also floating along peacefully, like the swan on the lake - a true depiction of a peaceful dream.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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When asleep and dreaming you can be anything you want to be - happy,content and peaceful.You are able to escape from life itself and enter a pretend world that's safe and serene. But when awake reality hits and fears/responsibilities/worries all come flooding back. Why must this be so? Why can't the serenity of dreams continue on into the daylight?
The triolet form is well suited to this topic showing your mind questioning, worrying about things while also floating along peacefully, like the swan on the lake - a true depiction of a peaceful dream.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Kristine - I sure would love a world where that serenity could just continue uninterrupted :-) Brooke
Comment from Deejharrington
Lovely! And how true, our daily aches and pains come back to reality when we wake up. Sometimes dreams are so comforting I wish not to wake up, wanting the fantasy to continue.
deb
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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Lovely! And how true, our daily aches and pains come back to reality when we wake up. Sometimes dreams are so comforting I wish not to wake up, wanting the fantasy to continue.
deb
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Deb. I thought some others could relate to this :-) Brooke
Comment from ~Dovey
In analysis this has layers and layers of meaning akin to running rubble through a sieve and retrieving flakes of gold at the end of the process. Simply beautiful, Brooke. :)
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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In analysis this has layers and layers of meaning akin to running rubble through a sieve and retrieving flakes of gold at the end of the process. Simply beautiful, Brooke. :)
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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Thank you, my friend. I always try to include layers in what I write, so I appreciate your finding them :-) Brooke
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
Good afternoon Brooke and she is a beautiful bird and loved the way you gave her life and revealed to us heer thoguths. I enjoyed, Loyd
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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Good afternoon Brooke and she is a beautiful bird and loved the way you gave her life and revealed to us heer thoguths. I enjoyed, Loyd
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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thank you, Loyd - so glad you enjoyed my triolet and the swan :-) Brooke
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You are welcome and I did, LOyd
Comment from jadapenn
You could be chanting this to jada, Brooke. In my dreams I am a swan, so free and unencumbered by any nonsense of the world. Sometimes one can just dig your head under the pillow and keep on dreaming.
This triolet is beautiful. I have never given you a six and think you deserve one now.
You always make my day with a lovely poem.:) luv jada
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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You could be chanting this to jada, Brooke. In my dreams I am a swan, so free and unencumbered by any nonsense of the world. Sometimes one can just dig your head under the pillow and keep on dreaming.
This triolet is beautiful. I have never given you a six and think you deserve one now.
You always make my day with a lovely poem.:) luv jada
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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Well, thank you, my friend - first you entertain me with Sheena and the safari and now this - how much nicer could you possibly make my day? :-) Brooke
Comment from AnnaLinda
Brooke,
Your french triolet is just beautiful! I can't believe
that you were able to find artwork to match your poem
so well.
Your poem 'glides' smoothly across the page and I especially
liked these lines:
"Why must my fears awake with dawn,
replacing peace with throbbing ache"
I can also relate to them...
Linda
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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Brooke,
Your french triolet is just beautiful! I can't believe
that you were able to find artwork to match your poem
so well.
Your poem 'glides' smoothly across the page and I especially
liked these lines:
"Why must my fears awake with dawn,
replacing peace with throbbing ache"
I can also relate to them...
Linda
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Linda. I'm so glad you enjoy the poem and the illustration as I always spend some time locating good art :-) Brooke
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You are welcome Brooke!
Comment from patwannabe
Brooke, another good one with the repeating lines. I'm not sure why that adds so much to a poem, but it sure hits my 'comfort' spot.
Thank you, pat
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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Brooke, another good one with the repeating lines. I'm not sure why that adds so much to a poem, but it sure hits my 'comfort' spot.
Thank you, pat
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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It hits my comfort spot too - my daughter hates them, but hey, I can't do everything just to please her! LOL Thanks so much, Pat :-) Brooke
Comment from words
Another delicious write.
I swear, you are the Julia Childs of poetry.
I especially liked:Why must my fears awake with dawn,
replacing peace with throbbing ache
while in my dreams I am a swan
who glides upon a peaceful lake?
There are more than one days when I ask myself this very question.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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Another delicious write.
I swear, you are the Julia Childs of poetry.
I especially liked:Why must my fears awake with dawn,
replacing peace with throbbing ache
while in my dreams I am a swan
who glides upon a peaceful lake?
There are more than one days when I ask myself this very question.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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The Julia Childs of poetry - what a fascinating concept - I always thought she was the coolest broad :-) Thank you, Diane :-) Brooke
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She was the best at what she did and so are you.
Comment from ulster3
Hello Brooke.
Even the title is lyrical. This is an exceptionally well written and musical triolet. Because the words fall so soft it heightens the distinction between dreams and life. I love this. Rebecca
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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Hello Brooke.
Even the title is lyrical. This is an exceptionally well written and musical triolet. Because the words fall so soft it heightens the distinction between dreams and life. I love this. Rebecca
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Rebecca. I'm so pleased you heard the musicality in this triolet :-) Brooke
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So am I. If I couldn't hear the music in that one I think I'd need to give up on poetry completely Brooke. lol
Comment from missy98writer
Brooke,
You've mastered another troilet. I like the theme of the narrator dreaming of being a swan. Vivid imagery. Your rhyme is perfect. I love the repeating refrain. 'In Dreams I am a Gliding Swan.' Awesome art work you've picked. I liked the lines:
while in my dreams I am a swan.
Why must my fears awake with dawn,
replacing peace with throbbing ache
Another outstanding reflective triolet. Swans are such beautiful birds.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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Brooke,
You've mastered another troilet. I like the theme of the narrator dreaming of being a swan. Vivid imagery. Your rhyme is perfect. I love the repeating refrain. 'In Dreams I am a Gliding Swan.' Awesome art work you've picked. I liked the lines:
while in my dreams I am a swan.
Why must my fears awake with dawn,
replacing peace with throbbing ache
Another outstanding reflective triolet. Swans are such beautiful birds.
Melissa.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Melissa - I'm pleased you enjoyed this triolet, and yes, they are magnificent creatures :-) Brooke
