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I Can't Wait!

A visit with Santa .........

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Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hello Carol,
Here I was afraid that Kaitlyn was just frighten of Santa and then you came up with a wonderful ending that made me laugh.
Smiles
Gert

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2009
    Gert

    Glad you enjoyed. She is visiting me today and just loved to see her picture on the computer screen. Thanks again. Carol
reply by Gert sherwood on 03-Dec-2009
    You are welcome Carol,
    What made me smile I never could get my youngest daughter ( Barbara) to sit on Santa's lap she was deathly affair of him.
    Gert
Comment from Patrick G Cox
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Ah, the joys of small children and the festive season ...

Amusing and very realistic, every parent's nightmare. The ever so helpful brother who porbably could have told his mother earlier ...

No spag spotted.

Patrick

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2009
    Patrick

    Boys will be boys, I guess..Thanks for the review. Glad you enjoyed my grand children's story. smile, Carol
reply by Patrick G Cox on 03-Dec-2009
    Yup, only had the one, but two girls on either side of him. They all had their moments ... Patrick
Comment from missy98writer
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Begin Again,
What a great story. I love your well crafted tales. You're one of the Queens of short fiction on this site. The photo is great of your grandkids. "You better not pout you better not cry because Begin Again wrote another great tale."
I had to go there.
It so funny what some kids will say when on Santa's lap. I think your story is perfection.
Melissa.

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2009
    Melissa

    Thanks so much for your beautiful review. Kaitlyn is visiting me today and she loved seeing her picture on the computer screen. I am glad that you enjoyed the story and I am humbled by your comments. Smiles to you, Carol
reply by missy98writer on 03-Dec-2009
    She's cute.
    Melissa.
Comment from AlvinTEthington
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Although not my sense of humor, the turn at the end is very good and would be amusing to most. I generally like the overall use of simple vocabulary for children, but I wonder if saying mothers are overstressed is more than a child could handle. That is a minor concern, however. Good juxtaposition of picture and poem.

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2009
    Alvin

    You are probably correct about the "overstressed" moms but the women reading the story will certainly relate. My grand daughter Kaitlyn is visiting me today and she was thrilled to see her picture on the computer screen. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. Carol
reply by AlvinTEthington on 03-Dec-2009
    You're welcome.
Comment from adewpearl
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The line's so long - add the apostrophe
Oh, I never even considered that - now you have me wondering how many times a year each jolly Santa is peed on! LOL This is just too funny. And your grandchildren are utterly adorable :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2009
    Brooke

    Thank you so much...Kaitlyn is visiting me today and she loved seeing her picture on the computer screen. I imagine they get "little blessings" more than once each year...such a risky job being a Santa. LOL Thanks again....Carol
Comment from lola29
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Carol, your grandchildren are sooo cute. I enjoyed the story, because it was filled with musings of what so many people experience during this time of year.

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2009
    Lola

    Thank you so much for the review and kind words. My little Kaitlyn is visiting me today and she loved seeing her picture on the computer screen. Glad you enjoyed the story. Carol
Comment from AnnaLinda
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BeginAgain,

This short holiday story, "I Can't Wait!" I so cute! The picture of your grandchildren is precious! They are beautiful!

Is this a real story? It gives a real life glimpse of holiday shopping and a Santa visit, whether it is or not.

I enjoyed reading it!

""Don't you want to talk to Santa?" (you have 2 quotation marks on the beginning of this sentence.)

SweetLinda

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2009
    Linda

    Thanks so much for reading my short little Christmas story. Kaitlyn is visiting today and she just loved seeing her picture on the computer screen. I am glad that you enjoyed our little story ...I guess Santa wasn't too happy with our little one. Smiles to you, Carol
reply by AnnaLinda on 03-Dec-2009
    You are welcome and I am sure that you will enjoy your visit immensely!
Comment from misscookie
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Are these your angels they are beayitful.
I love the story. It seems so real. Is this a true story.
I think itwas funny matbe not to santa but she dis say she had to leave .

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2009
    Cookie

    Yes, these are two of my precious grandchildren. Kaitlyn is visiting me today and we are having so much fun. She loved seeing her picture on the computer screen. Smiles to you...Carol
reply by misscookie on 03-Dec-2009
    You are truly blessed my friend enjoy your vist talk to you later.
Comment from jadapenn
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Um little apples didn't fall far from um tree. Can see the likeness there. This was cute and full of action. I laughed when Santa suddenly went quiet. Well - risk goes with the job.

Well done. luv jada

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 Comment Written 03-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2009
    Jada

    Thank you for the kind review and of course for loving my little ones. My precocious little Kaitlyn is visiting me today and we are having a marvelous time...she loved seeing her picture on the computer screen. Thanks again...Carol