rondels and rondeaus
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Comment from Colette
Oh Brooke you have worked your magic on this reflective
rondeau. The words of a Mother, you couldn't possibly
have written this with such conviction if you hadn't
experienced it. You are reminding me of the time when my
little Emma was in her cradle and as I watched her sleep
similar thoughts would run through my mind.
Thank you for the lovely memories.
Colette
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2009
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Oh Brooke you have worked your magic on this reflective
rondeau. The words of a Mother, you couldn't possibly
have written this with such conviction if you hadn't
experienced it. You are reminding me of the time when my
little Emma was in her cradle and as I watched her sleep
similar thoughts would run through my mind.
Thank you for the lovely memories.
Colette
Comment Written 13-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Colette - I had a firstborn son who hated to sleep unless I held him and a secondborn daughter who just feel asleep when I laid her down - both of them were beautiful when they slept :-) Brooke
Comment from BarnCat
Brooke -- you have a very deep creative well from which to drink. This poem has just the right everything -- tone, rhyme, repetition, imagery -- the whole package. What a marvelous way to lay your child to sleep at night. Simply perfect. Deb
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2009
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Brooke -- you have a very deep creative well from which to drink. This poem has just the right everything -- tone, rhyme, repetition, imagery -- the whole package. What a marvelous way to lay your child to sleep at night. Simply perfect. Deb
Comment Written 13-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Deb - so glad you enjoyed this little lullaby :-) Brooke
Comment from Lisha L
Wow, This must have been extremely difficult to write with so many distinct rules to write it, but the end result is breathtakingly gentle and beautiful. I may have to try one of these as well.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2009
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Wow, This must have been extremely difficult to write with so many distinct rules to write it, but the end result is breathtakingly gentle and beautiful. I may have to try one of these as well.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Lisha - yes, rondeaus are difficult to compose but most satisfying when completed :-) Brooke
Comment from easyeverett
An excelllent example of a great French poetic written by the great decadents, Verlaine, Rimbaud and the maste Charles Baudelaire. It is a lovely poem to read and absorb. Your metered presentation was perfection and I salute your creative skills applied with such panosh. easy
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2009
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An excelllent example of a great French poetic written by the great decadents, Verlaine, Rimbaud and the maste Charles Baudelaire. It is a lovely poem to read and absorb. Your metered presentation was perfection and I salute your creative skills applied with such panosh. easy
Comment Written 13-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Easy. So glad you enjoyed my use of the rondeau :-) Brooke
Comment from Deejharrington
Adorable! Any new mother would enjoy having that prayer framed above their babies' head. A beautiful prayer with just enough whimsy to appeal to fairy lovers. You did a lovely job with this one,
deb:)
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2009
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Adorable! Any new mother would enjoy having that prayer framed above their babies' head. A beautiful prayer with just enough whimsy to appeal to fairy lovers. You did a lovely job with this one,
deb:)
Comment Written 13-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Deb - since your comments are so positive, I wonder if you really meant to give it a 4 rating? Brooke
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Lord no! just bad typing, I changed it, sorry!!!deb:)
Comment from WRITER1
This is a really lovely poem, it would be wonderful tucked into a baby shower card. This one is so sweet, I did really enjoy reading it.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2009
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This is a really lovely poem, it would be wonderful tucked into a baby shower card. This one is so sweet, I did really enjoy reading it.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2009
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Thanks so much, Donna :-) I'm so glad you liked this lullaby so much - you are most generous :-) Brooke
Comment from AnnaLinda
adewpearl,
Your rondeau poem, "Sleep Well, Sweet Child" is very lovely!
Your rhyming lines are enjoyable to read and they create a very gentle, tender and loving poem.
Your repetition of "Sleep well, sweet child" is effective. "Here is one of my favorite parts of your poem:
"may all your dreams be doubly blest and sunshine greet your day ahead."
Your presentation is beautiful as well!
SweetLinda
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2009
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adewpearl,
Your rondeau poem, "Sleep Well, Sweet Child" is very lovely!
Your rhyming lines are enjoyable to read and they create a very gentle, tender and loving poem.
Your repetition of "Sleep well, sweet child" is effective. "Here is one of my favorite parts of your poem:
"may all your dreams be doubly blest and sunshine greet your day ahead."
Your presentation is beautiful as well!
SweetLinda
Comment Written 13-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2009
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Thank you, SweetLinda, for this most gracious response to my lullaby :-) Brooke
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You are welcome!
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
Hi Pearly One,
Another delightful, whimsical poem! I loved the flow of this one and especially how it was addressed to little children. I can just imagine a little child sitting on his/her mother's/father's knee completely charmed as this poem is being read. Loved it.
Hugs, Whizpurr ^-^
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2009
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Hi Pearly One,
Another delightful, whimsical poem! I loved the flow of this one and especially how it was addressed to little children. I can just imagine a little child sitting on his/her mother's/father's knee completely charmed as this poem is being read. Loved it.
Hugs, Whizpurr ^-^
Comment Written 13-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Whizpurr - so glad you enjoyed visualizing this lullaby scene :-) Brooke
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Brooke...I had forgotten about this poetry form but I think it beautiful. Your words are soft and well chosen. I can't think of anything more precious than a sleeping child. Well done....blessings....chey
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2009
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Hi Brooke...I had forgotten about this poetry form but I think it beautiful. Your words are soft and well chosen. I can't think of anything more precious than a sleeping child. Well done....blessings....chey
Comment Written 13-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Chey - I love rondeaus :-) You are most kind. Brooke
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed the strong rhythm and rhyme of your poem. My favorite images were of the "golden" "web" and the "nest" metaphor. I also especially liked your lovely "sprites" and "rose petals."
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2009
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I enjoyed the strong rhythm and rhyme of your poem. My favorite images were of the "golden" "web" and the "nest" metaphor. I also especially liked your lovely "sprites" and "rose petals."
Comment Written 13-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Joan. I'm so glad you liked the web and the nest - it was like pulling teeth to come up with the imagery for this lullaby! Brooke :-)
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Thanks for the feedback: I appreciate your hard work, especially since the final result makes the creation seem so effortless. -J
