Comment from grassroots08

Excellent

As I am not into triolets, because of the repetition, I won't comment too much. It was done well according to the form and format.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2009

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2009

That's okay - I'm not into every form out there either - though I tend to love the repeating ones. You're a dear :-) Brooke

Comment from DecrepitOldBag

Exceptional

And what a splendid poem it is! Honestly, Brooke, I myself can really identify with this. I have to confess even now I am healing, I often feel suspicious when people try to befriend me, wondering "What do they really want? What is their agenda? Best not open up - that will only give them ammo with which to hurt me."
Sometimes, a friendly hand, without words, or an action - without platitudes, says more than words ever could...and earns more trust too.
Absolutely brilliant writing, my friend.
Warmest wishes and hugs
Kat

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2009

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2009

Kat, people who have not been abused or deceived or exploited having a harder time understanding this concept - you have lived this and are most insightful because of it. Thank you, Brooke :-)

Comment from rmdelta

Excellent

Brooke,

this was a really sweet poem, my dear friend. I particularly enjoyed the tenderness with which you wrote it and your notes were great. Well done.

I realize how much I've been letting you and my other friends on the site down by my lack of constant reviewing as I had been doing. I'm just not well enough yet to stay on here long enough to do very many at one sitting like I used to do. My apologies, dear friend.

Reggie

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2009

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2009

Reggie, you are not letting me down by taking care of your health. You get yourself strong and well. :-) Thank you, my friend :-) Brooke

Comment from Joyce L.

Excellent

I love "just poems". Sometimes they are the best. You can tell a lot about a person through the hand shake. A touch tells a lot. This poem is a reminder.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2009

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2009

Thanks, Joyce - your warm response is most appreciated :-) Brooke

Comment from Crusty

Excellent

Poem or triolet, what ever it is, it works for me. Very well written my friend. I enjoyed it very much.

Please, have yourself another fine day miss Brooke.

Brad...

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2009

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2009

Thanks, Brad - I just read the Bear and Bee poem - what a delight! I wish you a fine day too. :-) Brooke

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

This is very deep, reflective and compelling,Brooke. It is a keen observation that those who need help often have been deeply wounded and may not discern that they can trust the helping hand.
Lovely phrasing and lyrical flow. Well presented.
No nits, of course {there never are in your work! If there was a contest for who can write the most NIT-FREE poems, You'd win, hands down!)

Lvoe, rd

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2009

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2009

rama devi, aren't you just sweetly funny - I think they should make up a big old certificate for me from the nit-pickers association :-D Thank you, Brooke :-)

Comment from Nanny 6

Excellent

You created the perfect picture of distrust from someone that really needs help. Life experiences can really do a number on both man and beast. Very good point to ponder, Brooke...Judy

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2009

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2009

Judy, thank you - I appreciate your kind comments. Brooke :-)

Comment from words

Excellent

Loved the opening lines:

In tenderness a hand extends
an offer of compassion's aid,
and with this act mistrust transcends

And the repetition of :

In tenderness a hand extends

Also appreciate the message of the poem.

Sometimes the thing most needed by a person is just the hand extended.


Also without the extended hand charity does not really uplift either the receiver or the giver.

Well done.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2009

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2009

Thank you for your most perceptive understanding of my poem! Brooke :-)

Comment from schlosslaw_2000

Excellent

An excellent poem, Brooke. You have very effectively woven variations of the lines below through the poem to make a point with a powerful thrust.

"In tenderness a hand extends
an offer of compassion's aid"

Larry

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2009

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2009

Thanks so much, Larry - I always appreciate your gracious and warm comments. Brooke :-)

Comment from fastdigits

Excellent

Never you mind if it is not
in true triolet form, the words
are heart-felt, soft, tender
written with compassion that
comes through as one sifts
through the words as the cascade
down the page in gentle fashion
extending the hand of friendship.
Well done

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 Comment Written 25-Jun-2009

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2009

Thank you, as always!!! Brooke :-)