Wildflower Haiku
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Comment from laurelp
Aw, no reason to shoot. The picture is a perfect foy to the words you wrote. As always, most enjoyable. You captured the scene perfectly.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Aw, no reason to shoot. The picture is a perfect foy to the words you wrote. As always, most enjoyable. You captured the scene perfectly.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Thank you, Laurel - the shooting is not over this poem but over the idea I might spend as frustrating a time coming up with a fourth and fifth haiku for the series! LOL Brooke
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Trust me I understood and have had the same feelings. : )
Comment from words
Oh, why would we shoot you? This is so lovely.
Art you chose is perfect. Love the dew on the leaves.
My favorite line is:
splendor in the shade
Such a wondrous flow and sound ....
Also, loved the title!
Well done. Keep it up!
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Oh, why would we shoot you? This is so lovely.
Art you chose is perfect. Love the dew on the leaves.
My favorite line is:
splendor in the shade
Such a wondrous flow and sound ....
Also, loved the title!
Well done. Keep it up!
Comment Written 17-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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To put me out of my misery!! LOL I'm glad you like the finished product - you were not sitting here whilst I was writing the 378 rejected lines that preceded it. :-) Thank you, Brooke :-)
Comment from pixiemillie
Shoot you- -right. I'm sure all have pens, not pistols aimed and hope to draw that special ink from a well that overflows daily. This is no exception. I happen to be quite fond of the Jacks. Before I moved to this home I lived in a home, where when you entered the front gate- -there in all their glory a whole bed of the Jacks in their pulpits preaching the glory of their form to all who entered.
Well done. I for one have the site of the 'pen' poised to suck all it can from the well-spring.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Shoot you- -right. I'm sure all have pens, not pistols aimed and hope to draw that special ink from a well that overflows daily. This is no exception. I happen to be quite fond of the Jacks. Before I moved to this home I lived in a home, where when you entered the front gate- -there in all their glory a whole bed of the Jacks in their pulpits preaching the glory of their form to all who entered.
Well done. I for one have the site of the 'pen' poised to suck all it can from the well-spring.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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a whole bed of them in one place? Oh, I could not stand that much treasure all at once :-) My dad and I hunted for them by the wooded stream in Valley Forge Park, and to find just one or two growing together was a rare pleasure. Thanks so much, Rose of Sharon. Brooke :-)
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A whole bed!!!And it is still there- -for a dear friend lives there and I visit frequently- -this is the time when they begin to make their appearance- -first those big beautiful variegated leaves and the ivory-colored heads open and reveal a golden stamen almost the size of a little finger.
I'm sure you and your Father had wonderful times looking and the sheer delight at finding one of these exquisite specimens.
Comment from Phil Kitom
It doesn't matter what the reason for creating
a poem of this description you have still
managed to come up with a good one well done
Brooke.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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It doesn't matter what the reason for creating
a poem of this description you have still
managed to come up with a good one well done
Brooke.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Thank you, Dave - you are most encouraging and appreciated :-) Brooke
Comment from MsRefusenik
(They are too stingy with their measley two sixes. I am always out of them.) I imagine it is a stunning series if this gorgeous haiku is representative. The picture is as beautiful and instills as much reverence as the words of the haiku. It is stunning, really. You had to have worked long and hard to find these 12 very wonderful, fitting words. Very nicely done, Brooke. Maryellen
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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(They are too stingy with their measley two sixes. I am always out of them.) I imagine it is a stunning series if this gorgeous haiku is representative. The picture is as beautiful and instills as much reverence as the words of the haiku. It is stunning, really. You had to have worked long and hard to find these 12 very wonderful, fitting words. Very nicely done, Brooke. Maryellen
Comment Written 17-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Thank you, Maryellen. Yes, with all the reviewing I do, I always need 10 sixes a week, not 2. At the very least I want 7, one for each day. You are most encouraging, and I appreciate it :-)
Comment from sgalletti
I love your great idea - a series of wildflower haikus. The picture is a perfect accompaniment to the picture you paint with words. Well done! The little flower in the pulpit under the canopy in the shade. Nice imagery. Perfect haiku. Sue
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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I love your great idea - a series of wildflower haikus. The picture is a perfect accompaniment to the picture you paint with words. Well done! The little flower in the pulpit under the canopy in the shade. Nice imagery. Perfect haiku. Sue
Comment Written 17-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Well, three wildflowers down. It may take me a year to get up to ten!!! LOL Thanks so much, Brooke :-)
Comment from jkhudson
LOL I think it is a good idea! Especially if you educate the reader about the wildflower. In other words, use your haiku as a hook . You could do this with any subject. nice job on this haiku!~:0) J
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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LOL I think it is a good idea! Especially if you educate the reader about the wildflower. In other words, use your haiku as a hook . You could do this with any subject. nice job on this haiku!~:0) J
Comment Written 17-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Thanks, Jules - I always appreciate your encouraging comments :-) Brooke
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
No - don't get shot- I
like the idea of you writing
more about nature - just up my
street -- and who would keep me
on my toes with my punctuation,
my friend!!
I'd never heard of Jack in the Pulpit -
I think you've written about it before
as I feel sure it was you who told me
about it.
Nice piece, Brooke.
Margaret.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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No - don't get shot- I
like the idea of you writing
more about nature - just up my
street -- and who would keep me
on my toes with my punctuation,
my friend!!
I'd never heard of Jack in the Pulpit -
I think you've written about it before
as I feel sure it was you who told me
about it.
Nice piece, Brooke.
Margaret.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Yes, I've written about it a couple of times - it's a wildflower my father used to take me to hunt for by the wooded stream in Valley Forge Park. Because they're not out in the open and not all that plentiful, finding one was like finding a treasure :-) Thank you, Margaret. Brooke :-)
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Perhaps you should dry and press
one and place it in a picture frame
behind glass -- would be great..
M
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PS and add a little poem beneath it.
Comment from Lyrical_CD
Good short write to go along with your wildflower? (lol) series. Anyway, I have a gun on me at all times, just let me know when you get a good idea again.
Cory
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Good short write to go along with your wildflower? (lol) series. Anyway, I have a gun on me at all times, just let me know when you get a good idea again.
Cory
Comment Written 17-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Cory!!! You're the first person to tell me he'd use the gun ROTFLMAO :-D Thank you, dear friend. You're a hoot. Brooke :-)
Comment from rama devi
Why should we shoot you? This is lovely and nicely phrased as well as tastefully presented. I love the closing line, echoes of splendor in the grass. I think your idea to make a book with different flowers is nice. you could market it in nurseries!
This is true to form and spag free. Nice subtle alliteration.
Smiles and warm Regards,
rama devi
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Why should we shoot you? This is lovely and nicely phrased as well as tastefully presented. I love the closing line, echoes of splendor in the grass. I think your idea to make a book with different flowers is nice. you could market it in nurseries!
This is true to form and spag free. Nice subtle alliteration.
Smiles and warm Regards,
rama devi
Comment Written 17-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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rama devi, thank you - I'm glad you appreciate the finished product after it underwent so many changes along the way. LOL Brooke :-)
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I appreciate all of your finished products!
:)
