Triolets: Traditional and Modified
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "If I Controlled the Hands of Time"Poems employing this musical, repeating form
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Comment from fictionwriter
I love this poem. There are few days that really stand out but those days are always remembered and cherished. I love the passion behind this one. Great job.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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I love this poem. There are few days that really stand out but those days are always remembered and cherished. I love the passion behind this one. Great job.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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Thank yo
Comment from Minglement
Now, this one is the best triolet I've seen, ever! Wish I had six stars. It demonstrates the how the form can be used without the repetition feeling forced. It flows so beautifully! Great job. Good luck.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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Now, this one is the best triolet I've seen, ever! Wish I had six stars. It demonstrates the how the form can be used without the repetition feeling forced. It flows so beautifully! Great job. Good luck.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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Marcia, thank you! It's my first ever triolet, so you can't imagine how encouraging your comments are!! Brooke :-)
Comment from Jazh
This is a lovely poem, Brooke. I enjoyed it, and I've not read any 'triolets' before (I learn something new here every day!). It flows beautifully, and the repeated lines are very effective. Good luck with the contest. :)
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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This is a lovely poem, Brooke. I enjoyed it, and I've not read any 'triolets' before (I learn something new here every day!). It flows beautifully, and the repeated lines are very effective. Good luck with the contest. :)
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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I have never written one before though I was aware of them - I just looked the little buggers up and the first recorded triolets are from the 13th century! It's an odd little form, but I decided to try it out so I could say I had written one in my life. LOL Thanks, Brooke :-)
Comment from babylonia
brooke,
nicely done. the day i would recreate. hmmm ... i wonder what day that would be? LOL there are so many good ones. usually it isn't so much the day as the moment. made me smile. easy to read and follow. no spaggies.
good luck~
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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brooke,
nicely done. the day i would recreate. hmmm ... i wonder what day that would be? LOL there are so many good ones. usually it isn't so much the day as the moment. made me smile. easy to read and follow. no spaggies.
good luck~
love,
barbara
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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You're right - there are perfect days and perfect moments - I've had some perfect days, but who can squeeze much detail into 8 lines when half of them are repeated? LOL Thanks, Brooke
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brooke,
you did well. i do know what you mean sometimes you just have to do your best. it is poetry for god's sakes. LOL
love,
barbara
Comment from Domino
Hi, Brooke
I'm no lover of these shorties that require repetition. Not much room for anything else, though I like haiku, so that a little contradictory, I guess ;-).
Mind you, one can only do one's best within the rules, nd you've done a great job here. Very sweet and enjoyable with excellent content. Love, Ray xx
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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Hi, Brooke
I'm no lover of these shorties that require repetition. Not much room for anything else, though I like haiku, so that a little contradictory, I guess ;-).
Mind you, one can only do one's best within the rules, nd you've done a great job here. Very sweet and enjoyable with excellent content. Love, Ray xx
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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Ray, I had no great idea for today so decided I'd go with the prompt as I've never written this form before. I agree - 8 lines is too short to be repeating half of them - I will not be making a habit of writing lots of triolets. Thank you for your kind review. Brooke
Comment from RapturedHeart
Excellent, Brooke. Who wouldn't want to go back to their most intimate and thrilling moments. If only - sigh - . Lovely romantic thought for this contest. Wishing you all the best in the voting booths:). Take care,
Heather
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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Excellent, Brooke. Who wouldn't want to go back to their most intimate and thrilling moments. If only - sigh - . Lovely romantic thought for this contest. Wishing you all the best in the voting booths:). Take care,
Heather
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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Heather, thank you for your thoughtful comments - it would be a neat trick, wouldn't it? I've never written a triolet before so I appreciate your encouragement :-) Brooke
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Very well written again this has a good feel to it you have done very well with the form this is a strong thought provoking piece I enjoyed regards Fuller
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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Very well written again this has a good feel to it you have done very well with the form this is a strong thought provoking piece I enjoyed regards Fuller
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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Fuller, thank you for an encouraging review of my first attempt at this form! Brooke
Comment from PUPA
Brooke, your writing is always so unique, like this triolet. I love how created it, the lines are repeated to create a stronger meaning.
Well done, good luck.
Love
Pupa
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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Brooke, your writing is always so unique, like this triolet. I love how created it, the lines are repeated to create a stronger meaning.
Well done, good luck.
Love
Pupa
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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I've never tried this form before - thank you for your kind words, Brooke
Comment from Dklrdmcches
I enjoyed this piece. thought it flowed well and gave the reader a taste of the heart. very creative piece was easy on the eyes and gentle to the touch...DKLRD
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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I enjoyed this piece. thought it flowed well and gave the reader a taste of the heart. very creative piece was easy on the eyes and gentle to the touch...DKLRD
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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Thank you - I appreciate your kind review, Brooke
Comment from Ginny
I have been visiting Fanstory roughly once in a fortnight 'en vitesse', essentially to read your work, but not giving myself the time to review. Today I was captured by the idea of a 'triolet'. Yours is a skilfully conjured example of a triolet and you have used your poetic talent to the fullest. I particularly love the lines
"If I controlled the hands of time
no poet's measure gift of rhyme
could hope our love to replicate"
Well done and good luck!f
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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I have been visiting Fanstory roughly once in a fortnight 'en vitesse', essentially to read your work, but not giving myself the time to review. Today I was captured by the idea of a 'triolet'. Yours is a skilfully conjured example of a triolet and you have used your poetic talent to the fullest. I particularly love the lines
"If I controlled the hands of time
no poet's measure gift of rhyme
could hope our love to replicate"
Well done and good luck!f
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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This is my one and only ever triolet - so thank you for the positive comments - all that repetition in only 8 lines is a bit daunting! :-) Brooke
