The Minute Poem
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Comment from nukrz
That is romantic. You just never know when you in the heat of the moment that you are going to choose to spend the rest of your life with someone you made out with in a car. Thank you so much for sharing
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That is romantic. You just never know when you in the heat of the moment that you are going to choose to spend the rest of your life with someone you made out with in a car. Thank you so much for sharing
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2009
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Thanks so much - I do have lovely memories of making out in that car!! LOL Brooke
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Brooke,
here you are with another perfect written poem of the beginning of a passionate love scene, within a car with no heat, only the flames of love
Gert
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2009
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Hello Brooke,
here you are with another perfect written poem of the beginning of a passionate love scene, within a car with no heat, only the flames of love
Gert
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2009
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Gert, thank you for your perceptive reading :-) Brooke
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Brooke you are so welcome
Gert
Comment from perunest
"Love's first duet" - what a great line
to describe the beginnings of love.
This is a warm and sweet poem to
immortalize that first kiss, that first moment,
which will never be repeated in its
essence. Nicely done! Carolyn
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2009
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"Love's first duet" - what a great line
to describe the beginnings of love.
This is a warm and sweet poem to
immortalize that first kiss, that first moment,
which will never be repeated in its
essence. Nicely done! Carolyn
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2009
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Carolyn - oh, you so "get" it! Thank you, Brooke
Comment from debskatz
hey brooke,
how sweet! didn't you & your hubby remain friends after your divorce? and he was your first kiss. neat!
the poem is great. like i said, you're now an expert in minute poetry. i'm gonna have to try it some time.
thanks for sharing!
smiles,
deb
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2009
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hey brooke,
how sweet! didn't you & your hubby remain friends after your divorce? and he was your first kiss. neat!
the poem is great. like i said, you're now an expert in minute poetry. i'm gonna have to try it some time.
thanks for sharing!
smiles,
deb
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2009
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Deb, yes, we were life-long friends. My memories of things like our first kiss or our wedding or all the many things we did together are just as warm and sweet as the memories of people married 50 years - I have some awful memories too, but those I don't write poetry about!! LOL Have fun trying a minute poem :-) Thanks, Brooke
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yeah, it's kinda like my folks. they got divorced after 27 years, should have been a lot earlier! after the divorce (& a couple of years) they stopped fighting & were best friends (actually, friends with benefits, if ya know what I mean!). then, sorta like brother/sister, but always family.
glad you & your hubby were good friends. i'm sure it made it easier for the kids. did he ever remarry?
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nope, neither of us remarried - which is fine by me as all that stepfamily stuff is often a hassle for kids. :-)
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Ummmmm - lovely - the words
speaking of your first kiss
- (I like the presentation)...
and bringing to mind - mine.
It was from a French boy, which
rather shocked me as he seemed
to have an over-active tongue.
I was so young at the time!!!
Margaret.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2009
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Ummmmm - lovely - the words
speaking of your first kiss
- (I like the presentation)...
and bringing to mind - mine.
It was from a French boy, which
rather shocked me as he seemed
to have an over-active tongue.
I was so young at the time!!!
Margaret.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2009
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Margaret - the first time with a sophisticated French boy!!!
You are just full of surprises :-) Thanks, Brooke
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I am indeed - but I'm not telling.
M
Comment from Peter@Poole
What a beautiful evocation of a treasured episode in your life, Brooke. The progression is heart-warming. I particularly love the last stanza, especially the last two lines. Peter
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What a beautiful evocation of a treasured episode in your life, Brooke. The progression is heart-warming. I particularly love the last stanza, especially the last two lines. Peter
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2009
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Peter, thank you for your kind response - we all have such memories if we are lucky. Brooke
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My mother passed away six years ago, aged 89.
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How lucky you are to have had her all those years. I'm sure your memories of her could fill several books :-)
Comment from chaswriter
Brooke - Loved the Doors and that song. Many of the Door's songs were cryptic and had a background story to them. I never understood the lines:
Why won't you tell me what she said
What was that promise that you made
Do you remember what that was about?
A first kiss at the shopping mall in great rhyme and within a structured format. Love your last stanza. I can't remember how many times someone tapped on my fogged-in car in the midst of ardor. LOL. Well done. Charlie
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Brooke - Loved the Doors and that song. Many of the Door's songs were cryptic and had a background story to them. I never understood the lines:
Why won't you tell me what she said
What was that promise that you made
Do you remember what that was about?
A first kiss at the shopping mall in great rhyme and within a structured format. Love your last stanza. I can't remember how many times someone tapped on my fogged-in car in the midst of ardor. LOL. Well done. Charlie
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2009
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I didn't analyze the songs, Charlie! It's rock and roll and sounds cool. LOL Thanks, Brooke :-)
LOL. Love it.
Comment from rmdelta
brooke,
Ah, first kiss, first love. Nothing can ever take that away from us, can it? Memories, everybody's got them and they are the ripples on the lake.
Reggie
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brooke,
Ah, first kiss, first love. Nothing can ever take that away from us, can it? Memories, everybody's got them and they are the ripples on the lake.
Reggie
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2009
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Reggie, I recognize that phrase! :-) Thanks so much, and no, nobody can take away the memories. Brooke
Comment from starkat
Hi Brooke,
Beautifully written minute with perfect rhymes and meter. Great choice of colorful artwork helps set the stage for your first kiss. Excellent contest entry. Thanks for the fascinating biographical notes for the story behind your first kiss.. in a Dodge Dart in a parking lot mall listening to The Doors play "Touch Me Babe"...;) I can hear it now. Back then, I was driving a VW bug, and The Doors played for our Homecoming Dance that year, and I stood right in front of Jim Morrison while they played "Light My Fire" for forty-five minutes. I remember a long kiss afterwards, in the car, parked in front of her dorm room... I wanted to marry her, but a friend of mine beat me to it.
I especially liked your last stanza... as ardor grew, we never knew (what our first kiss would lead to)
Delightful poem. You sure are getting good with these minutes. Best of luck in the contest...;)
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2009
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Hi Brooke,
Beautifully written minute with perfect rhymes and meter. Great choice of colorful artwork helps set the stage for your first kiss. Excellent contest entry. Thanks for the fascinating biographical notes for the story behind your first kiss.. in a Dodge Dart in a parking lot mall listening to The Doors play "Touch Me Babe"...;) I can hear it now. Back then, I was driving a VW bug, and The Doors played for our Homecoming Dance that year, and I stood right in front of Jim Morrison while they played "Light My Fire" for forty-five minutes. I remember a long kiss afterwards, in the car, parked in front of her dorm room... I wanted to marry her, but a friend of mine beat me to it.
I especially liked your last stanza... as ardor grew, we never knew (what our first kiss would lead to)
Delightful poem. You sure are getting good with these minutes. Best of luck in the contest...;)
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2009
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Thank you for sharing your great story! I went to lots and lots of rock and roll concerts for a few years back then but never saw the Doors in person much to my regret. I'm glad you have great teen memories too even if she was the one who got away. Brooke :-)
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
How beautiful this piece it is more beautiful knowing that you ended up marrying this person your true love well done again regards Fuller
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2009
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How beautiful this piece it is more beautiful knowing that you ended up marrying this person your true love well done again regards Fuller
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2009
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Fuller, thank you for your warm comments, Brooke :-)
