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Comment from boberto
Also, a good contest entry Brooke. Looks like I'm off to a slow start. The artwork you used sure brings back some memories. I have had the distinction of moving to places and that winter, they would have the worst winter in history. It's that black cloud over my head. Good luck in the contest.
Rob
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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Also, a good contest entry Brooke. Looks like I'm off to a slow start. The artwork you used sure brings back some memories. I have had the distinction of moving to places and that winter, they would have the worst winter in history. It's that black cloud over my head. Good luck in the contest.
Rob
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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Rob, thank you! It's my first ever cinquain, and did not submit until a half hour before deadline as it took forever to think of a subject where I could do the rise and fall thing - I won't just do syllable count. You're most kind, Brooke
Comment from earthlybeing
We have snow in our forecast also. For us that is not very often down here. Hope you stay warm. Great poem. Thanks, Jeanette
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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We have snow in our forecast also. For us that is not very often down here. Hope you stay warm. Great poem. Thanks, Jeanette
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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Jeanette - thank you! Staying warm involves many layers of clothing and a blanket over the lap - today we're supposed to get 4 inches of rain!!! Yuck, but at least it isn't a foot of snow! Brooke
Comment from babylonia
brooke,
this is hilarious. made me smile. made me giggle. we had snow these last couple of days. not too bad. baby girl still had to go to school. easy to read and follow. no spaggies do i see. imagery is excellent. keep up the good work~
good luck~
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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brooke,
this is hilarious. made me smile. made me giggle. we had snow these last couple of days. not too bad. baby girl still had to go to school. easy to read and follow. no spaggies do i see. imagery is excellent. keep up the good work~
good luck~
love,
barbara
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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Glad you like my first ever cinquain! It took me up to a half hour before deadline to produce!! Thank you for your gentle review, Brooke
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brooke,
you did a great job. i figured you did these all the time. this is one style i can actually do. i hope you do well in the contest.
love,
barbara
Comment from Donovan
No one should ever have their view obscured of you and your critters. First of all..they may run you over as they go merrily on their way. And secondly, number one suffices. Very good.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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No one should ever have their view obscured of you and your critters. First of all..they may run you over as they go merrily on their way. And secondly, number one suffices. Very good.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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thank you, Donovan - one more half hour of fretting and I would have missed the deadline - I never enter form contests, but this is sponsored by a talented friend, but two seconds after I reserved a spot I started having second thoughts - I'm so pleased you think my first cinquain turned out OK. You're sweet, as always. Brooke
Comment from KelinaJ
Great image selection. Your title fits it perfectly. By midwinter, if my mailbox was outside like that (and not on my porch) it would look like that. Good presentation and color scheme. The near pure greyscale is perfect for this image. The words are a perfect description of what is seen in the image. Excellent.
Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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Great image selection. Your title fits it perfectly. By midwinter, if my mailbox was outside like that (and not on my porch) it would look like that. Good presentation and color scheme. The near pure greyscale is perfect for this image. The words are a perfect description of what is seen in the image. Excellent.
Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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Kelina, thank you for such positive comments about my first ever cinquain - your kindness is always appreciated. Brooke
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Your work is just that good. :-)
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Brooke You know how much I enjoy the snow .
What great images of a morning to view fresh new snow
Smiles
good luck
Gert
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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Hello Brooke You know how much I enjoy the snow .
What great images of a morning to view fresh new snow
Smiles
good luck
Gert
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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Gert, yes, your Vermont must already have had some lovely snow by now - we've just had dustings - thanks for your positive review! Brooke
Comment from debskatz
Wait a minute! This can't be you! It's not A to Z!! lol
OK, so you do cinquains nearly as well as a-z. I'm just damn glad I don't have your view. I'll stay down here in 'Bama where it's a huge story if we even get a few flurries. Let you yankees stay holed up till Spring.
What wuz I supposed to do? My meds have kicked in & i can barely focus. Oh, yeah. the poem. didn't i already say that it was good? well, then i don't have to do it agai then do i?
night,
deb xx
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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Wait a minute! This can't be you! It's not A to Z!! lol
OK, so you do cinquains nearly as well as a-z. I'm just damn glad I don't have your view. I'll stay down here in 'Bama where it's a huge story if we even get a few flurries. Let you yankees stay holed up till Spring.
What wuz I supposed to do? My meds have kicked in & i can barely focus. Oh, yeah. the poem. didn't i already say that it was good? well, then i don't have to do it agai then do i?
night,
deb xx
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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this is my first cinquain - I signed up for the contest a few minutes after it was posted and finally had the nerve to write this less than an hour before the submission deadline! glad you think it worked out! we've only had dustings so far this season, but maybe day after tomorrow they say. I'm ready to move far away from snow. Brooke
Comment from Dawn of Tomorrow
I was beginning to think you weren't going to do it. So glad you did. It's just gorgeous. Love what you did with it. BRAVO, DARLING.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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I was beginning to think you weren't going to do it. So glad you did. It's just gorgeous. Love what you did with it. BRAVO, DARLING.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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I did it with minutes to spare! LOL You don't know how close I came to sending you an apology instead! You are so kind - I've been expecting you to scold me all day long!!! Brooke
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I would never do that, sometimes we enter something and realize we shouldn't have but force it anyway. You didn't do that, your Cinquain is lovely and had the turn very nicely done. Probably one of the stronger entries. Going to be a hard one to judge.
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I'm just glad to have an entry at all!!! and I won't post something just to meet deadline - I have reserved spots before never to enter something - I won't embarrass myself. :-)
Comment from ulster3
Hello Brooke.
While I've never tried one, you sure seem to have the Cinquain down. I love the pristine picture painted by your words here. Great luck to you in this contest. IMHO you have a strong one. fondly, rebecca
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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Hello Brooke.
While I've never tried one, you sure seem to have the Cinquain down. I love the pristine picture painted by your words here. Great luck to you in this contest. IMHO you have a strong one. fondly, rebecca
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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I have it down - you're making me laugh. I signed up for this contest shortly after it was posted as I chatted with the sponsor, a friend. That was days and days ago - I entered it with a half hour to go before deadline because I had no blasted idea what to write a cinquain about that could have that fall at the end!! Oh, deadlines sure are useful. thanks ever so much for this confidence booster. Brooke
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Well you made me laugh with that response Brooke. I tell you I loved it.
It is a wonderful Cinquain.
Comment from Brian S. Pratt
till drifts pile high and soon obscure
--having lived on the west coast all my life, never got to experience this. Would like to. Maybe have to winter in Ohio or Mass where my brother lives.
Good poem.
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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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till drifts pile high and soon obscure
--having lived on the west coast all my life, never got to experience this. Would like to. Maybe have to winter in Ohio or Mass where my brother lives.
Good poem.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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Brian, snow is highly overrated!! LOL It is pretty to see a few times, but hell to walk in or drive in - I am ready to move to warmer climes. :-) Thank you, Brooke
