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A modern sonnet on life's twists and turns.74 total reviews
Comment from babylonia
brooke,
the meter and rhyme sound pretty good in this one. i have to admit for a while i was checking so i could learn but found most pieces follow well, as does this one. its sentiments are beautiful. LOL sometimes you just have to push through the pain no matter how much you want to hide. i always learn from it. easy to read and follow. no spaggies do i see. imagery is excellent. made me smile. keep up the good work~
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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brooke,
the meter and rhyme sound pretty good in this one. i have to admit for a while i was checking so i could learn but found most pieces follow well, as does this one. its sentiments are beautiful. LOL sometimes you just have to push through the pain no matter how much you want to hide. i always learn from it. easy to read and follow. no spaggies do i see. imagery is excellent. made me smile. keep up the good work~
love,
barbara
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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Barbara, you are a most insightful person and kind reviewer - thank you!
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you are very welcome~
love,
barbara
Comment from Paul Greatrix
Your poem has a strong and thought provoking message here. You tell it beautifully as well. I especially liked 'engage life only when it favoured me.'
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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Your poem has a strong and thought provoking message here. You tell it beautifully as well. I especially liked 'engage life only when it favoured me.'
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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thanks so much for your gracious review peace, Brooke
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I think that we all take the simplest and littlest things in life for granted. I also agree that we often forget how precious life is and we forget that we might not always have a tomorrow.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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I think that we all take the simplest and littlest things in life for granted. I also agree that we often forget how precious life is and we forget that we might not always have a tomorrow.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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you are most kind - thanks for yet another good review.
Peace, Brooke :-)
Comment from Mightierthanthesword
I know exactly what you mean, sometimes you want some kind of reassurance or future planning. But the poem asks a deeper question, would life be better with knowledge of the future and I think I agree with you when you say no!
Great poem, I loved particularly the comparison of life to a chart and the extended metaphor there.
Fantastic to read and food for thought!
Excellent poem
Oli
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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I know exactly what you mean, sometimes you want some kind of reassurance or future planning. But the poem asks a deeper question, would life be better with knowledge of the future and I think I agree with you when you say no!
Great poem, I loved particularly the comparison of life to a chart and the extended metaphor there.
Fantastic to read and food for thought!
Excellent poem
Oli
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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Oli, I am most appreciative of your thoughtful and insightful response. Thank you, as always, Brooke :-)
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You are more then welcome.
In addition I read your presidential speech and thought it was great.
I had nothing very intelligent to say about it due to an incredible lack of understanding of american politics so I didn't review.
Vote Brooke!
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oh, please do reconsider - I am anticipating people's being mean to me. LOL
Comment from lawriemac
This is another example of your wonderful talent.
To me, not being a 'poet technician', a sonnet is a sonnet.
Although everyone would welcome a trouble-free life, I will take each day on merit irrespective of what the fortune cookie may have to say.
Having read the sonnet twice, to ensure I got the meaning, I would think that if everyone ventured mout only on the good days, what a bore life would be.
Best wishes
Lawrie
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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This is another example of your wonderful talent.
To me, not being a 'poet technician', a sonnet is a sonnet.
Although everyone would welcome a trouble-free life, I will take each day on merit irrespective of what the fortune cookie may have to say.
Having read the sonnet twice, to ensure I got the meaning, I would think that if everyone ventured mout only on the good days, what a bore life would be.
Best wishes
Lawrie
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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you get the meaning perfectly - you are most perceptive. thanks so much for this thoughtful review! :-) Brooke
Comment from Donovan
We do look for earthly guarantees, but there is none, Book Job. Anyway, heavenly guarantees get us through these earthly trials. Good poem. Now that I think of it, there are some guarantees, must be. Every night I see them on the infomercials. Maybe life is one big infomercial, but wait, there's more...
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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We do look for earthly guarantees, but there is none, Book Job. Anyway, heavenly guarantees get us through these earthly trials. Good poem. Now that I think of it, there are some guarantees, must be. Every night I see them on the infomercials. Maybe life is one big infomercial, but wait, there's more...
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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Oh, Donovan, my day has officially begun after I can laugh at your life observations :-) I love infomercials - for the 15 minutes one is on, I am convinced I need whatever that grater/peeler/corer/cleaner thing does even though I don't cook! LOL Good thing I can resist a sale pitch. Thank you! :-) Brooke
Comment from joan marie
I hesitate to suggest because I look up to you for experienced reviews. But wouldn't the maybe not being there work just a bit better? Not chart wherein each hour's plotted? I look at the colors provided and they don't ever seem to look this good to me. But they know what they are doing. Great read something worth pondering. joan marie
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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I hesitate to suggest because I look up to you for experienced reviews. But wouldn't the maybe not being there work just a bit better? Not chart wherein each hour's plotted? I look at the colors provided and they don't ever seem to look this good to me. But they know what they are doing. Great read something worth pondering. joan marie
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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Joan, I don't get your meaning - wouldn't the not being there work just a bit better? I'm not arguing with that - I'm just not understanding what it means. Thanks for the review, friend :-) Brooke
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This is what I get for not reading authors note first. Sonnet I say leave it alone. Should have notes first. Sorry. jm
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no need for apologies!
Comment from UKFish
Clever piece. I think that you skilfully convey sentiments we all have some days. For me the iambic pentameter is not needed, I much prefer a modern take on a form providing it still flows and this sonnet does. Good bracketing of the guarantees at either end, with a nice little personal twist.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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Clever piece. I think that you skilfully convey sentiments we all have some days. For me the iambic pentameter is not needed, I much prefer a modern take on a form providing it still flows and this sonnet does. Good bracketing of the guarantees at either end, with a nice little personal twist.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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thank you for positive comments on both the craft and content of my poem - I appreciate your thoughtfulness! Peace, Brooke
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
A great piece of verse, Brooke,
cleverly thoughtout and well
presented, the words thought-provoking.
I know for certain I don't want to know
what is to come - as if it's not good,
we would surely worry.
Margaret.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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A great piece of verse, Brooke,
cleverly thoughtout and well
presented, the words thought-provoking.
I know for certain I don't want to know
what is to come - as if it's not good,
we would surely worry.
Margaret.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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You are always so positive, Margaret - I am about to read your new chapters after checking my reviews - I can hardly wait to see what has happened since the deflowering! :-) Brooke
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Wildacres - is a part chapter to set
the scene of Jessica's life in
her new home.
SomeONE said nothing much happens,
but then it's only setting the scene and
everyone else seems to have enjoyed
it.
Margaret.
Comment from unidian
Maybe we have some kind of subliminal link Brooke! I've just done something (Leave me be!) which, if not exactly the same is close enough for me to pull the curtains ;-) Great piece, Tom x
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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Maybe we have some kind of subliminal link Brooke! I've just done something (Leave me be!) which, if not exactly the same is close enough for me to pull the curtains ;-) Great piece, Tom x
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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Tom, you are most thoughtful, as always - I hope to read your closely related work very soon! :-) Brooke
