Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

These four short abcb quatrains tell the story of faith. How it strengthens and guides the faithful person.

Keep writing

Joan

 Comment Written 25-May-2015

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reply by the author on 25-May-2015

Thanks so much Joan, for this fine, thoughtful review and comments blessings, Roy.

reply by dragonpoet on 25-May-2015

You're so very welcome, Roy.

Joan

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

Another gem of faith in sweet iambic trimeter. The imagery comes fast and beautiful giving your verse a great sense of inspired grace. Love the second verse in particular because I can picture faith like that.

 Comment Written 25-May-2015

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reply by the author on 25-May-2015

Thanks so much Mark, for this fine, thoughtful review and comments blessings, Roy.

Comment from Jacob Collins

Excellent

An excellent spiritual piece of poetry, Roy. I thought that you used a good sense of imagery in this piece and that your writing flowed well. I couldn't find any faults. Thanks for sharing...Jacob

 Comment Written 25-May-2015

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reply by the author on 25-May-2015

Thanks so much Jacob, for this fine, thoughtful review and comments blessings, Roy.

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This is a truly beautiful expression of complete trust and abiding faith in a loving God. It is flawlessly executed with rhythmic meter and seamless rhyme. Nicely done and I thank you doe sharing it.

 Comment Written 25-May-2015

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reply by the author on 25-May-2015

Thanks so much for this fine, thoughtful review and comments blessings, Roy.

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is a beautiful write, royowen, you did an excellent job writing this poem of faith that seeks the filling of the Spirit to bring God closer to thee. I enjoyed reading it.

 Comment Written 25-May-2015

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reply by the author on 25-May-2015

Thanks so much SW, for this fine, thoughtful review and comments blessings, Roy.

Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr

Excellent

Good morning Poet Roy
I enjoyed the song from your heart
Love the inspiration it brings to the reader
Nice work, be blessed!
Loyd

 Comment Written 25-May-2015

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reply by the author on 25-May-2015

Thanks so much Loyd, for this fine, thoughtful review and comments blessings, Roy.

reply by Loyd C. Taylor, Sr on 26-May-2015

My pleasure, Loyd

Comment from Antoine Charlemaine

Exceptional

Another inspirational read from the master. Thank you, Roy.

I especially liked this stanza:

God's Love is like a mountain,
the view is broad and wide,
But growth is in the valley,
where faith and wisdom bide!

This is profound. Beautiful. Encouraging. Ans so, so simply, succinctly true.

Thanks, Roy. Anthony

 Comment Written 25-May-2015

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reply by the author on 25-May-2015

Thanks again Anthony for the delightful comments, they give me a lift, thanks once again for your supportive review and exceptional rating and stars, blessing my friend, blessings, Roy.

Comment from heyjude

Exceptional

This is so beautiful, Roy. It has so much meaning
packed into it. I like the part about dream is self
that's dying so I can know my Lord. That's what I
need more of ... dying to self. Thanks so much for sharing.

 Comment Written 25-May-2015

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reply by the author on 25-May-2015

I think we all need to die a bit, Judy, but I do know God is happy wherever we are, that's the thing I love about Him! But this is a wonderful, uplifting, review, exceptional rating and stars, blessings, Roy.

Comment from DR DIP

Excellent

Really nice Roy, really nice

Your faith and compassion for God always shines through in your verse.
And this is no exception

YOU have a good flare for ABCB rhyme pattern and under that discipline the only thing I could suggest and it matters not if you pursue my suggestion or not because it's still a great poem... but here is my suggestion
In the first verse:

My heartsong is my saviour,
the rock on which I stand,
My heartbeat is my purpose,
my vision, dreams and plans.

Suggest either change the proximate rhyme by changing line 2 or 4 to perfect rhyme
maybe;

My heartsong is my saviour,
the rock on which one stands,
My heartbeat is my purpose,
my vision, dreams and plans.

OR

My heartsong is my saviour,
the rock on which I stand,
My heartbeat is my purpose,
my vision, and dreams are planned.

either one... your call

and the very last line in the last verse:

It knows God's love His grace.
maybe should have a semi colon or comma after love?

It knows God's love; His grace.

just a suggestion..

with the greatest respect, dip

 Comment Written 25-May-2015

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reply by the author on 25-May-2015

Thanks so much Dip, the great suggestions, for this fine, thoughtful review and comments blessings, Roy.

Comment from petalangela

Excellent

Words penned by a seasoned poet. Words of truth and of faith laid out for all to share. The words appear to say come feast on my banquet full of love
A faith so strong that death has no sting. The art work shows colours of the lord's creation

 Comment Written 25-May-2015

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reply by the author on 25-May-2015

Thanks so much for this fine, thoughtful review and comments blessings, Roy.