Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

solid rhyming couplets
love the flipped/crypt pairing
great consonance and assonance in crass rapscallion
good alliteration in snorting, sporting stallion as well as internal rhyme
Strong iambic meter/cadence
more good sound devices throughout
As always, the rogue's attitude is maddening and spot on for the cad he is
Great fun, my friend :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014

Thanks so much, Brooke, for the detailed review and for taking it in the spirit intended. I appreciate it. :-) David

reply by adewpearl on 07-Feb-2014

Is there anyone who has not taken it in the right spirit? I think that would make for amusing reading ;-)

reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014

Not overtly, but a few curt comments give me pause about their overall comprehension of it, or perhaps hitting too close to the bone, biographically. The ladies taking part are all in on the joke, though, and I love what they're coming up with. I've anticipated most approaches, and was wondering when someone would finally go with the gay angle. Not being homophobic, that won't work with me. :-)

Comment from Jean Lutz

Excellent

Just a smooth talker or is there action? You work wonder with your words. This just may get some sizzling words slapped in your face. :-)

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014

THank you, Jean. Oh, yes, there's always action to satisfaction from the rogue.

The sizzle has already begun, but it only serves as an aphrodisiac to the rapscallion. ;-)

I appreciate the review.

Comment from Green Lake Girl

Excellent

I've cum to look forward to these Friday "lites". You are consistently clever and entertaining. Love your "wild, cavorting style."

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014

Thank you so much, Green Lake Girl. I appreciate the little bit of word play in your review, too! ;-) I'm so glad you can appreciate the satire, and the cavorting style of the dastardly rogue. David

Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

Friday it is. There will be many replies to your rogue half, no doubt. I guess this is good therapy for the ladies. I see no redeeming qualities in a man who would use and disrespect women this way and then exploit it as adventure. It is bringing out good writing so i guess this is a good writing exercise.

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014

Joy, please don't take it seriously, but there IS a social commentary in here about the men who would, and the women who allow it. Thank you. Oh, they shot first today, but there are too many to answer individually.

Comment from nky12364

Exceptional

I was really taken aback by the brilliance of the rhyming scheme and how you could come up with all these words that turn it into this brilliant story. This is truly a work of art. You sure are talented. Welldone!

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014

Thank you so much, nky12364, for your incredibly kind words, for the sixer, and for your time to read and review. I really appreciate it.

Comment from Tortie Heart

Excellent

Deserves a 6 rating. Excellent and fun! Excellent wording and images though is it 'seamen' as a play on 'semen?' 'The flashing of a starlet, and a dashing libertine,' a sentence just an example of the poem's entire great wording. A cautionary tale with charm. Thanks!

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014

Thanks so much, Tortie Heart, for your virtual sixer, and for the great review. Yes, that was a play on words, but since it works either way...

I'm so glad you liked it and took it in the spirit intended. Many thanks.

reply by Tortie Heart on 07-Feb-2014

Excellent work, enjoyed it! Tortie:)

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Sigh, I know you do this in fun. I was a virgin until I married and I liked the guys that respected me. Oh no I said the V word.. Oh no I followed it with the R word. Oh no. The R is Respect not rogue
God bless

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 Comment Written 07-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014

Yes, the V-word is like a silent dog whistle to the Rogue, so he may be sniffing around now. ;-)

THank you very much, Jenny. Not everyone realizes this is satire, and not some call out to the wenches of the world, but I appreciate those who DO know how to read between the lines.

Congrats on maintaining your virginity till marriage. I have much respect for you for that.

reply by kiwijenny on 07-Feb-2014

Thanks I decided that I would not drink or smoke or have sex before marriage when I was 14. I didn't want to shame my dad. His face came to my mind when I would date. I love my dear old dad

reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014

You're tops, Jenny. :)

reply by kiwijenny on 07-Feb-2014

:o)

Comment from Rondeno

Excellent

The wit and eloquence of Pope, the rapier-thrust bawdiness of Marvell and the sense of fun which suffused all of those talented libertines. You'll provoke another dust-storm of distaff dyspepsia. You rascal.

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 Comment Written 07-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014

The dust storm came first, my friend, but only using it as a smoke screen to dart in and out of the ladies (rooms), and turning the tables against them. ;-)

Thank you very much for your own eloquent review, which makes the rogue feel less dirty, but also emboldens him more. I appreciate you, my friend.

Comment from 24chas

Exceptional

Marillion, you are truly a rapscallion, and an awesome poet. I absolutely love this, and you get what I think is my last sixer of the week. Just an excellent taunt, my man.

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014

Thanks so much, Chas, for the last sixer, and for the great review!