Another Pretty Face
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Comment from Tellis
Joe opened the passenger car door. "I think that salesman was flirting with you." The first part of this sentence is a little awkward. I would drop the word "car". Ienjoyed reading this excellent chapter.
Tellis
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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Joe opened the passenger car door. "I think that salesman was flirting with you." The first part of this sentence is a little awkward. I would drop the word "car". Ienjoyed reading this excellent chapter.
Tellis
Comment Written 02-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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I made the change. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from RazberryBullet
Interesting confession on Joe's part about the girl in West point.
Got a chuckle here: "This is real leather, isn't it?" He glanced at her. "I sure hope so." :)
Well done!
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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Interesting confession on Joe's part about the girl in West point.
Got a chuckle here: "This is real leather, isn't it?" He glanced at her. "I sure hope so." :)
Well done!
Comment Written 02-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Ted T
Hi Barbara :)
Good, you're writing. That's great.
What happened?
Your dialogue exchanges just went from "Oh well" to excellent.
Now you're on track with seeping in information from the past and it's working a lot better.
Keep at it.
Ted
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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Hi Barbara :)
Good, you're writing. That's great.
What happened?
Your dialogue exchanges just went from "Oh well" to excellent.
Now you're on track with seeping in information from the past and it's working a lot better.
Keep at it.
Ted
Comment Written 02-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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Thank you, coming from you it means a lot. I appreciate your review.
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Hi Barbara :)
You're most welcome.
Keep at it.
Ted
Comment from Readywriter52
Joe is getting to know Sara. He learned that her reputation is bad by talking to a woman in the restaurant. Her attitude really irritated him. He also traded stories with Sara. Under normal circumstances, that's not a good idea, but she seemed to think it made him seem more human.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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Joe is getting to know Sara. He learned that her reputation is bad by talking to a woman in the restaurant. Her attitude really irritated him. He also traded stories with Sara. Under normal circumstances, that's not a good idea, but she seemed to think it made him seem more human.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from fairy77
Very interesting story.Its starting to get a little romantic.the character descriptions and unveiling are intriguing.The relationship between Joe and Sara is enjoyable.The setting of a small town is nice.This is developing into a nice story.Keep at it.I can't wait for the next chapter.beth.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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Very interesting story.Its starting to get a little romantic.the character descriptions and unveiling are intriguing.The relationship between Joe and Sara is enjoyable.The setting of a small town is nice.This is developing into a nice story.Keep at it.I can't wait for the next chapter.beth.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Thesis
Good chapter, Barb.
Joe seems like a good guy. He's willing to open up some embarassing moments to Sara, and willing to shun the townspeople who have asmall town view of the world.
I think Sara and he are falling in love. - John
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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Good chapter, Barb.
Joe seems like a good guy. He's willing to open up some embarassing moments to Sara, and willing to shun the townspeople who have asmall town view of the world.
I think Sara and he are falling in love. - John
Comment Written 01-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from krdeering
Nice job. This is the first time I have dipped into this book, but you got me oriented immediately and the conversation carried me through--very naturally, with nice breaks for the little fiddly gestures that people use when they're talking.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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Nice job. This is the first time I have dipped into this book, but you got me oriented immediately and the conversation carried me through--very naturally, with nice breaks for the little fiddly gestures that people use when they're talking.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review,
Comment from bookishfabler
Another good chapter. I like his sweetness and the conversations seem very natural letting the reader into thier lives. THis seems to be coming along nicely.
no nits I could see.
hugs Heidi
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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Another good chapter. I like his sweetness and the conversations seem very natural letting the reader into thier lives. THis seems to be coming along nicely.
no nits I could see.
hugs Heidi
Comment Written 01-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from meg2
This appears to be the makings of a very nice mystery romance. I must look for the first chapter so I can see the whole picture. I didn't see any mistakes, but then I am the one who needs much correcting :).
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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This appears to be the makings of a very nice mystery romance. I must look for the first chapter so I can see the whole picture. I didn't see any mistakes, but then I am the one who needs much correcting :).
Comment Written 01-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. We can often see the mistakes easier in other's writing than our own.
Comment from LadyWave
I enjoyed reading your work as always. Joe and Sara's relationship continues to develop nicely. I love the subtle connection between them.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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I enjoyed reading your work as always. Joe and Sara's relationship continues to develop nicely. I love the subtle connection between them.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
