I Am
contemplative quatrains90 total reviews
Comment from Belinda
You very nicely describe the internal thought of a shy and modest person, who does not dare to acknowledge something (good) she has performed. Unlike the lark and the fawn, she hesitates. At the same time she realizes that:
I'll never reach the peak without the climb.
Whoever this is, I would like to say: go for it! Interesting and impressive, Brooke.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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You very nicely describe the internal thought of a shy and modest person, who does not dare to acknowledge something (good) she has performed. Unlike the lark and the fawn, she hesitates. At the same time she realizes that:
I'll never reach the peak without the climb.
Whoever this is, I would like to say: go for it! Interesting and impressive, Brooke.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Belinda, for a most perceptive review :-) Brooke
Comment from Dave-Aranda-Richards
You picked the perfect picture to entice me in. My wife and I just returned from the Wild Animal Park after spending the day there. Saw the two new born elephants. What a joy and then you wonderful poem was here. Only thing I could find wrong was not enought commas for my taste.
Dave
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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You picked the perfect picture to entice me in. My wife and I just returned from the Wild Animal Park after spending the day there. Saw the two new born elephants. What a joy and then you wonderful poem was here. Only thing I could find wrong was not enought commas for my taste.
Dave
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Sounds like a perfect day - I love baby animals :-) Thanks, Dave - I'll work on throwing in a few extra random commas. LOL Brooke
Comment from Aussie
Superb photograph; your poem title brought to me the words that Jesus spoke when asked "who are you?" Jesus replied "I am, that I am." Now, that has nothing to do with your beautiful poem. I loved the presentation and the declaration of being. Within your poem is a message, I wonder how many readers will find it? God is not coming down to bail us out, God is out playing golf. We need to make the moves and climb our own mountains. Blessings.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Superb photograph; your poem title brought to me the words that Jesus spoke when asked "who are you?" Jesus replied "I am, that I am." Now, that has nothing to do with your beautiful poem. I loved the presentation and the declaration of being. Within your poem is a message, I wonder how many readers will find it? God is not coming down to bail us out, God is out playing golf. We need to make the moves and climb our own mountains. Blessings.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Kay, you and I are so on the same page :-) Thanks so much, my friend. Brooke
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Dis poor old crippled lady is feeling solly for self today; four stitches in my shoulder from nice Doctor yesterday - damn, can't do de house dusting, too sore. Bugger! LOL just have sit and talk to you. Hee, ouch! Hee.
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What happened that you needed stitches? I only ever needed stitches once, when I got a pebble in my knee at recess in sixth grade, and then they used staples instead of stitches, so I've never actually had stitches. Does it hurt??? I want to kiss your boo boo. You're bringing out the maternal instinct in me. :-)
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When you start to age, you get all sorts of lumps and bumps on your skin; one on my shoulder was really annoying and had turned black; Doctor had to dig deep when she cut it out sh..t did that hurt, even after three injections. I could feel her stitching. I did feel wobbly by the time I got home; she showed me the jar with my skin etc. and that put me off lunch! I'm OK, not as bad as having my leg taken off! I have to log off now (just posted a new poem) thanks Mommy! Love, K.
Comment from prophetess
It seems like these poems are talking to me today Brooke. I love the message that reached out to me, telling me that I am, and I can. Thank you for your beautiful and inspiring poem.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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It seems like these poems are talking to me today Brooke. I love the message that reached out to me, telling me that I am, and I can. Thank you for your beautiful and inspiring poem.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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thank you so much, prophetess - there is no higher compliment :-) Brooke
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You're welcome. :)
Comment from WRITER1
So many of us are afraid to poke our heads out and take our chances. I know I have been in that situation a few times in my life. Very good piece.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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So many of us are afraid to poke our heads out and take our chances. I know I have been in that situation a few times in my life. Very good piece.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Donna - I was thinking people might be able to relate. :-) Brooke
Comment from IndianaIrish
Well, Brooke, I think a few people might be able to relate to your clever poem ... like all of us? LOL I liked your using the lark and fawn as examples and the artwork is adorable.
Karyn :>)
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Well, Brooke, I think a few people might be able to relate to your clever poem ... like all of us? LOL I liked your using the lark and fawn as examples and the artwork is adorable.
Karyn :>)
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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I figured it didn't speak for me alone LOL Thanks so much, Karyn. Brooke :-)
Comment from Katiesherrill
I just love this. All of nature free proclaims "I am" and yet we feel so unsure of who we are. "Why does my voice delay to shout, "I am," " Thank you for sharing. It could really relate.
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I just love this. All of nature free proclaims "I am" and yet we feel so unsure of who we are. "Why does my voice delay to shout, "I am," " Thank you for sharing. It could really relate.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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I suspected more than a few people could relate to this - thank you so much, Katie. Brooke :-)
Comment from paul in australia
again a work well constructed and hopeful, well crafted messages. enhanced by the photograph od hestiatnt but determined first steps. tho a cliche "no pain no gain" springs to mind, but in much more attractive phrasing. Well done, Regards Paul
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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again a work well constructed and hopeful, well crafted messages. enhanced by the photograph od hestiatnt but determined first steps. tho a cliche "no pain no gain" springs to mind, but in much more attractive phrasing. Well done, Regards Paul
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Paul. Glad you like my poetic packaging of an old saying :-) Brooke
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my pleasure Brooke, I enjoyed your work as i do
Comment from GentleWind
This piece is my favorite. I love the message and the way you used the lark and the deer was creative. The rhyme is well done and it flows well. The artwork is perfect too. Great job
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This piece is my favorite. I love the message and the way you used the lark and the deer was creative. The rhyme is well done and it flows well. The artwork is perfect too. Great job
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Gentle Wind - I appreciate your kind comments :-) Brooke
Comment from Sally Carter
What a beautiful metaphor for not holding back on living our lives.
Your poem contains the usual captivating mix of well chosen words and insightful thoughts, and was a joy to read.
I couldn't help but wonder how much of Brooke was speaking in the last stanza. You give the impression of being a very fulfilled person. Are you really still waiting to shout "I am" in some form??
Best wishes and thanks for sharing such a fascinating poem.
Sally
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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What a beautiful metaphor for not holding back on living our lives.
Your poem contains the usual captivating mix of well chosen words and insightful thoughts, and was a joy to read.
I couldn't help but wonder how much of Brooke was speaking in the last stanza. You give the impression of being a very fulfilled person. Are you really still waiting to shout "I am" in some form??
Best wishes and thanks for sharing such a fascinating poem.
Sally
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Yes, I am still gearing up to reach that point, Sally :-) I've done lots in the past, need to do more now. Thanks, my friend :-) Brooke
