Tantalizing Eyes
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Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
The rocky road of love! Eager to see what happens next.
he put his hand on her back and gently st[r]oked it.
"I knew[,] as long as we stayed married[,] Father couldn't force me to marry Carlos.
When Steven and I made love[,] it was spontaneous."
Roberta
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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The rocky road of love! Eager to see what happens next.
he put his hand on her back and gently st[r]oked it.
"I knew[,] as long as we stayed married[,] Father couldn't force me to marry Carlos.
When Steven and I made love[,] it was spontaneous."
Roberta
Comment Written 10-Apr-2010
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I just went in and corrected the errors. Thank you for your kind review and continued support. I hope things are going well for you.
Comment from Dave M
Barbara,
This is an exceptional chapter. Matters are tangled, and sometimes a good friend is a lot more valuable than a lover. I enjoyed this read thoroughly and couldn't find anything to criticize.
Dave
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Barbara,
This is an exceptional chapter. Matters are tangled, and sometimes a good friend is a lot more valuable than a lover. I enjoyed this read thoroughly and couldn't find anything to criticize.
Dave
Comment Written 10-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate your continued support. I miss our almost daily contact. I hope your next story is coming along.
Comment from Rama Rao
This chapter is also excellent and carried the interesting story forward.
Men hate to be used by women. You brought out a valid point for conflict.
Now we have to watch how it'll be resolved.
"I knew he'd risk his career for me but still used him." This sentence is not clear.
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This chapter is also excellent and carried the interesting story forward.
Men hate to be used by women. You brought out a valid point for conflict.
Now we have to watch how it'll be resolved.
"I knew he'd risk his career for me but still used him." This sentence is not clear.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2010
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I will recheck that sentence and see if I can make it any clearer. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from RebelRose
Another great chapter. I surely hope this gets worked out although I think it may take a while. Steven probably won't listen to any explanation; it may take something stronger than that.
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Another great chapter. I surely hope this gets worked out although I think it may take a while. Steven probably won't listen to any explanation; it may take something stronger than that.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2010
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We shall see. Thank you for your review and continued support.
Comment from Ted T
Hi Barbara :)
Nice chapter. It's quite emotional and has good conflict working through excellent dialogue. I didn't see any SPAG, but I sometimes miss it. I'm not a SPAG hunter like many other reviewers. I go for story and believable dialogue exchanges.
Good work.
Ted
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Hi Barbara :)
Nice chapter. It's quite emotional and has good conflict working through excellent dialogue. I didn't see any SPAG, but I sometimes miss it. I'm not a SPAG hunter like many other reviewers. I go for story and believable dialogue exchanges.
Good work.
Ted
Comment Written 10-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your review. I sometimes struggle to make sure my men act like men.
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Hi :)
That's funny, I have no trouble writing women who act like females. Obviously, "Thorns" is full of female conversations.
Ted
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I raised four boys and a husband, well, I am still trying to raise him. I have two boys still at home, one engineer who was laid off from Caterpillar, and now teaching HS math, and a 17 year old, but I am always worried that I am making my males too female.
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I didn't sense any of that in your last chapter. The guys sounded quite male to me.
Ted
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Thank you.
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You're welcome.
Gotta get to work.
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Have fun.
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Always do :)
Ted
Comment from Arkine
Well, I dunno, I guess it depends on how suspicious a person he really is. At the same time, he's still being a bit of a nit-wit. You don't go running away everytime there's a problem with a relationship. If everyone did that no one would be married. ~L~ Anyhow, great chapter! :)
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Well, I dunno, I guess it depends on how suspicious a person he really is. At the same time, he's still being a bit of a nit-wit. You don't go running away everytime there's a problem with a relationship. If everyone did that no one would be married. ~L~ Anyhow, great chapter! :)
Comment Written 10-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your review. Steven didn't trust Leya from the beginning and this added fuel to the fire.
Comment from Sherelynne
I thought that this carried over nicely from the previous chapter by expounding on what was going on with Leya and Steven. I thought also that, again, the characters are easy to follow and real.
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I thought that this carried over nicely from the previous chapter by expounding on what was going on with Leya and Steven. I thought also that, again, the characters are easy to follow and real.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from adewpearl
Steven is being a hothead, but Leya should have shared more information with him - they both were a little dumb in this whole transaction. Now he has gone off to sulk and left her to cry her eyes out - while both of them are totally in love.
You really play this all out so realistically. :-) Brooke
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Steven is being a hothead, but Leya should have shared more information with him - they both were a little dumb in this whole transaction. Now he has gone off to sulk and left her to cry her eyes out - while both of them are totally in love.
You really play this all out so realistically. :-) Brooke
Comment Written 10-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from RazberryBullet
This is a bit scary, but I have a feeling Steven and Leya will come together again and trust one another. Looking forward to the next instalment!
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This is a bit scary, but I have a feeling Steven and Leya will come together again and trust one another. Looking forward to the next instalment!
Comment Written 10-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your review and continued support. I appreciate both. Steven and Leya have a very rocky road ahead of them.
Comment from Kashif Ali Abbas
The chapter adds pace of story in your familiar style. Your powerful and strong "dialogues" The set the tone, move the story, decide actions of the character and easily overpower description and narration.
Brilliant!
K
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The chapter adds pace of story in your familiar style. Your powerful and strong "dialogues" The set the tone, move the story, decide actions of the character and easily overpower description and narration.
Brilliant!
K
Comment Written 10-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
