The Ottava Rima
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Comment from Gert sherwood
Hi Brooke,
Love your thoughts about the Month of May at least we know that Spring is really here
(recall the saying,
April showers bring May flowers.
smiles
Gert
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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Hi Brooke,
Love your thoughts about the Month of May at least we know that Spring is really here
(recall the saying,
April showers bring May flowers.
smiles
Gert
Comment Written 07-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Gert - I appreciate your thoughtful comments and review :-) Brooke
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Smiles
Gert
Comment from Amfunny
I think the dogwoods are my favorite trees of all. I miss seeing them. People here in Texas love the magnolia tree but I don't like them. Your poem was delightful. It made me anxious to be in my pool and watching the hummingbirds again. Well done.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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I think the dogwoods are my favorite trees of all. I miss seeing them. People here in Texas love the magnolia tree but I don't like them. Your poem was delightful. It made me anxious to be in my pool and watching the hummingbirds again. Well done.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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We have magnolias and dogwood - I have always favored the dogwood but I love all the flowering trees :-) Thanks, Norma Jean : -) Brooke
Comment from Nanny 6
brook, burble, blithe...These words totally made your poem a joy to read. The lovely flowers in springtime blossem forth in your poem. Very cheerful piece of fine art! Judy
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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brook, burble, blithe...These words totally made your poem a joy to read. The lovely flowers in springtime blossem forth in your poem. Very cheerful piece of fine art! Judy
Comment Written 07-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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Thanks so much, Judy- glad you enjoyed my word choices and the mood : -) Brooke
Comment from patmedium
WOW... I'm off to Google these blooms and bushes. This is a really lovely poem, Brooke. You have such a wonderful way with words. Pat.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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WOW... I'm off to Google these blooms and bushes. This is a really lovely poem, Brooke. You have such a wonderful way with words. Pat.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Pat. I hope you have a good time googling :-) Brooke
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I have done... beautiful. Pat.
Comment from Dustman6180
Wow, Brooke, you've been very busy writing poetry lately. Must be the Spring is inspiring you. Another beautiful poem. A little early, since May is three weeks away. But you give us something to look forward to. Thanks. Dusty
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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Wow, Brooke, you've been very busy writing poetry lately. Must be the Spring is inspiring you. Another beautiful poem. A little early, since May is three weeks away. But you give us something to look forward to. Thanks. Dusty
Comment Written 07-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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Thanks, Dusty - I pretty much post one poem a day. May is my favorite month, so I just jumped the gun a bit. LOL Brooke :-)
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I'm partial to April -- my daughter's name (born in August though.)
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Brooke,
I just reviewed a poem of Margaret's about spring and now yours...I am longing for spring! I hate to sound like a broken record but it snowed here again last night! This is just so beautiful and well written ottava rima that I am jealous. (smile) Well done....blessings....chey
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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Hi Brooke,
I just reviewed a poem of Margaret's about spring and now yours...I am longing for spring! I hate to sound like a broken record but it snowed here again last night! This is just so beautiful and well written ottava rima that I am jealous. (smile) Well done....blessings....chey
Comment Written 07-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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It snowed again? Isn't there an office where you can register an official complaint?? LOL I'm so sorry, dear friend. Hang in there, Chey- it really can't keep up forever. Brooke :-)
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I thought I would call the govenor but my son thought it might not be the thing to do (what's wrong with him anyway!) sigh
Comment from Dall
When you write these do you count along the way or do you write it and then count it later. I think this is so much skill. So much talent. I loved the words, and the play of it all, very well done!
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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When you write these do you count along the way or do you write it and then count it later. I think this is so much skill. So much talent. I loved the words, and the play of it all, very well done!
Comment Written 07-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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Oh, I count each and every line as I write it - I usually don't go on to line two until I'm really happy with line one :-) Thank you, Dall. Brooke :-)
Comment from missy98writer
Brooke,
Another masterpiece of structured verse you've written. Beautiful art work and presentation. Wonderful imagery. Great use of alliteration. Spot on rhyme and meter. The lines I liked the best:
When hummingbirds who've dropped by for a drink
watch fawns' first fumbling steps with merriment,
When Johnny-Jump-Up gives the brook a wink,
whose waters burble by with blithe content
Thanks for sharing your ottava rima celebrating May and spring.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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Brooke,
Another masterpiece of structured verse you've written. Beautiful art work and presentation. Wonderful imagery. Great use of alliteration. Spot on rhyme and meter. The lines I liked the best:
When hummingbirds who've dropped by for a drink
watch fawns' first fumbling steps with merriment,
When Johnny-Jump-Up gives the brook a wink,
whose waters burble by with blithe content
Thanks for sharing your ottava rima celebrating May and spring.
Melissa.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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Thanks, Melissa, for your gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from MissMerri
How beautifully you've summed up the advent of Spring!
My mother loved to watch the hummingbirds in her garden, and I can't see a hummingbird without thinking of her and remembering her love for all creation.
Not surprisingly, my favorite lines in your poem are:
"When hummingbirds who've dropped by for a drink
watch fawns' first fumbling steps with merriment,"
but as usual, I love the whole poem. I wonder how you so consistently turn out beautiful poem after beautiful poem.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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How beautifully you've summed up the advent of Spring!
My mother loved to watch the hummingbirds in her garden, and I can't see a hummingbird without thinking of her and remembering her love for all creation.
Not surprisingly, my favorite lines in your poem are:
"When hummingbirds who've dropped by for a drink
watch fawns' first fumbling steps with merriment,"
but as usual, I love the whole poem. I wonder how you so consistently turn out beautiful poem after beautiful poem.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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Thank you, MissMerri - I'm so glad this triggered such nice memories :-) Brooke
Comment from WRITER1
Hopefully we will have this wonderful weather in May. This is a very nice piece. I am waiting for my Johnny-jump-ups to start to pop up.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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Hopefully we will have this wonderful weather in May. This is a very nice piece. I am waiting for my Johnny-jump-ups to start to pop up.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Donna - yes, I really am in the mood for a great May :-) Brooke
