Battlefield Lament
reflective naani (for war series)87 total reviews
Comment from Lynne
Learned two things: First, a new word, florid. Second, I did not realize poppies carried such awesome symbolism. Well, I guess three things: Naani delves into current affairs. Go Teach, go ! D!
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2010
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Learned two things: First, a new word, florid. Second, I did not realize poppies carried such awesome symbolism. Well, I guess three things: Naani delves into current affairs. Go Teach, go ! D!
Comment Written 05-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2010
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Thank you. So glad you enjoyed the new stuff along with the poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Dave M
Brooke,
This is an excellent short poem about the legacy of war. I enjoyed reading it and couldn't find anything here to criticize.
We missed the snow this time, just lots of rain. Hope the storm isn't as bad as forcasted.
Dave
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2010
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Brooke,
This is an excellent short poem about the legacy of war. I enjoyed reading it and couldn't find anything here to criticize.
We missed the snow this time, just lots of rain. Hope the storm isn't as bad as forcasted.
Dave
Comment Written 05-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Dave, sorry for the delayed response - am working valiantly to clear reviews :-) Brooke
Comment from Ms. Gray
I never associated the poppies with blood lost on the battlefield - I don't know why. Your poem points me in that direction and doesn't let me look away. It's a message I need to think about with all the warfare in the world.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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I never associated the poppies with blood lost on the battlefield - I don't know why. Your poem points me in that direction and doesn't let me look away. It's a message I need to think about with all the warfare in the world.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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thank you, Patti. In Flanders Fields the poppies grow - one of the world's most beloved poems, makes the association between this flower and the war dead - in the U.S, Canada, England and Australia, and perhaps other places, paper poppy flowers are sold by Veterans and poppy wreaths placed on soldiers' graves.
My dad always bought the paper poppies for me on Veteran's Day. Brooke
Comment from Curt Mongold
I just love the way you turn a phrase so eloquntly in rhyme Brooke. You inspire me to ever higher and loftier works by penning such lovely sadness.
You are in top form here, my dear poet friend.
Curt
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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I just love the way you turn a phrase so eloquntly in rhyme Brooke. You inspire me to ever higher and loftier works by penning such lovely sadness.
You are in top form here, my dear poet friend.
Curt
Comment Written 05-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Curt. I trust you are safe from this storm. Your reviews, as always, mean a great deal to me. Brooke :-)
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Storm? There's a storm? (lol)
I am safe, for now. If something doesn't break for me by spring though, my path is going to fork.
Comment from c_lucas
Brooke, were you reaching to get a rhyme? The subject of this poem merits a six, but I am down to fives. I wish you the best of luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Brooke, were you reaching to get a rhyme? The subject of this poem merits a six, but I am down to fives. I wish you the best of luck in your contest.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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I did not think I was reaching, Charlie :-) Thank you, my friend!! Brooke
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You're welcome, Brooke. Charlie
Comment from Winslow
Dear Brooke,
My dad was a veteran of WWI. In Flander's fields the poppie's grow.... Any war is hell and the bloom of youth covers the fields, but lost in the mist of time, forever young they wander there, where poppies grow.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Dear Brooke,
My dad was a veteran of WWI. In Flander's fields the poppie's grow.... Any war is hell and the bloom of youth covers the fields, but lost in the mist of time, forever young they wander there, where poppies grow.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 05-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Winslow. My dad was a veteran of WWII and always bought me paper poppies :-) Brooke
Comment from snow leopard
A startling poem. One is hit with red, blood and loss in each line. Makes one think of the battles underneath our land.
I know that when I traveled into some areas in the south that battles were fought, it felt as if you could still feel the ghosts there, the loss of blood and the grief.
Very well done!
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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A startling poem. One is hit with red, blood and loss in each line. Makes one think of the battles underneath our land.
I know that when I traveled into some areas in the south that battles were fought, it felt as if you could still feel the ghosts there, the loss of blood and the grief.
Very well done!
Comment Written 05-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Vicki. Civil War battlefields have long intrigued me. Brooke
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Brooke,,
It's amazin how many thought you have put into your Naani poem
Just to go to a cemetery where our brave ones are buried show how blood flowed from different battle fields.
Gert
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Hello Brooke,,
It's amazin how many thought you have put into your Naani poem
Just to go to a cemetery where our brave ones are buried show how blood flowed from different battle fields.
Gert
Comment Written 05-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Gert, for your most gracious review. Brooke :-)
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Smiles Brooke
Gert
Comment from HAWordsmith
A lovely little naani and a pleasure to read...the alliteration gives a feel of the flowing. It does well to depict the death of everything in battle by not planting flowers since the planting of flowers is a hopeful gesture. These use of the red poppy was a brilliant stroke as well. I did not see if there was an author's note or not, however, I have to assume that your use of this flower will be lost on many readers. Again, this was a pleasure to read. Thank you.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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A lovely little naani and a pleasure to read...the alliteration gives a feel of the flowing. It does well to depict the death of everything in battle by not planting flowers since the planting of flowers is a hopeful gesture. These use of the red poppy was a brilliant stroke as well. I did not see if there was an author's note or not, however, I have to assume that your use of this flower will be lost on many readers. Again, this was a pleasure to read. Thank you.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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I did give an author's note for those who need an explanation :-) Thank you, my friend, who knows better than most the sacrifice of those who fight on foreign shores.
Comment from jeslaf
Tight meter and rhyme as is your standard fare, but I was stricken by the 'coincidence' that earlier today with a tutoring student I read about the blood on the battlefield at Gettysburg was 'ankle deep'--your words and imagery brought me straight there. Good stuff.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Tight meter and rhyme as is your standard fare, but I was stricken by the 'coincidence' that earlier today with a tutoring student I read about the blood on the battlefield at Gettysburg was 'ankle deep'--your words and imagery brought me straight there. Good stuff.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Thank you, Jes. I cannot even imagine the horror of the battles fought in our Civil War - some things are too horrific to describe. Brooke
