I Long to Float
a reflective retourne87 total reviews
Comment from joan marie
You make it sound so fantastic and I am so fantastically afraid of heights. LOL. This has almost convinced me, though. Nice to read something light and airy. joan marie
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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You make it sound so fantastic and I am so fantastically afraid of heights. LOL. This has almost convinced me, though. Nice to read something light and airy. joan marie
Comment Written 25-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Joan Marie. I have my fears, but height is not among them - height just exhilerates me :-) I'm so happy that this makes you almost overcome that fear :-) Brooke
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I have always wanted to do that and have seen them floating so beautifully through the air. I literally have a panic attack, so it isn't safe for me to try. Last time I went up a two story watch tower in a park, they had to hold me and walk me back down. I almost fainted. It is so embarressing. jm
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That's OK -I'd have a panic attack if someone wanted me to bait a hook with a squirming worm.
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Arjuna just taught me how to post my photos in the text!!! I am so excited. I don't know how great the poem is, but the photos look good, LOL. Doesn't take much to excite me anymore. I can't fish for that reason either. jm
Comment from Sandy P.
I like your retourne very much! I have never tried one of these, but I love the style! Your background and picture are just a perfect match to your hopeful, unbeat words. Enjoyed very much.
Sandy
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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I like your retourne very much! I have never tried one of these, but I love the style! Your background and picture are just a perfect match to your hopeful, unbeat words. Enjoyed very much.
Sandy
Comment Written 25-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Sandy. It is just my second try at a retourne, but I do like the form :-) I so appreciate your encouragement. Brooke :-)
Comment from Sasha
When I was a child every dream (and I do mean every) I could and did fly. This is a wonderful reminder of the joy I felt in those dreams. Sadly, when I awoke my fear of heights always returned. Beautiful poem and took me back to a time when flight was my only escape. Great job with this one.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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When I was a child every dream (and I do mean every) I could and did fly. This is a wonderful reminder of the joy I felt in those dreams. Sadly, when I awoke my fear of heights always returned. Beautiful poem and took me back to a time when flight was my only escape. Great job with this one.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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Valerie, I had flying dreams too. I've always loved heights - I'd run to the top of observatory towers and beg for change to use in those machines you can turn to see all the sights in the distance. Thanks so much, my friend - I'm so glad I reminded you of a good escape. Brooke :-)
Comment from c_lucas
Hot air balloons brings out the cowardice in me. I have absolutely no desire to float throught the air in a silk baloon. This is very well written.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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Hot air balloons brings out the cowardice in me. I have absolutely no desire to float throught the air in a silk baloon. This is very well written.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Charlie - hey, we all fear something, just not the same thing - if you told me there would be a few dozen worms in the basket with me, I would refuse to go. LOL Brooke :-)
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I am a devout coward. (LOL)
Comment from fionageorge
Brooke, you have brougth back one of the greatest and exhilirating experiences of my life. When we went up in a hot air balloon with some other family members, the liberation (I have a fear of falling) was unbelievable. We did this in the wine/fruit region between New South Wales and Victoria (Mildura). Every time I relive this experience, I get another high. The very special part of this is, my sister who came with us from Holland, was diagnosed with Motor Neurone Disease not long after, and this was one of those experiences she hangs onto now, as her body deteriorates with this awful disease.
Sorry, this was about your poem, but, which as always, is beautifully structured and flows freely, just like that balloon.
Thanks for the memories and the ride Brooke.
Warmest regards and hugs
Marijk
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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Brooke, you have brougth back one of the greatest and exhilirating experiences of my life. When we went up in a hot air balloon with some other family members, the liberation (I have a fear of falling) was unbelievable. We did this in the wine/fruit region between New South Wales and Victoria (Mildura). Every time I relive this experience, I get another high. The very special part of this is, my sister who came with us from Holland, was diagnosed with Motor Neurone Disease not long after, and this was one of those experiences she hangs onto now, as her body deteriorates with this awful disease.
Sorry, this was about your poem, but, which as always, is beautifully structured and flows freely, just like that balloon.
Thanks for the memories and the ride Brooke.
Warmest regards and hugs
Marijk
Comment Written 25-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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Marijke, I am so honored that my poem connected with your own wonderful memories, especially of a time so important to your sister. Whenever I write something that truly means something to a person reading it, I feel that all the time and work I put into poetry is worth while. Thank you so much for sharing this with me. Brooke :-)
Comment from Curt Mongold
Somehow, for you, I don't believe the rhyme is optional, and rightly so, because this is just fantastic stuff. The lilting lines and repeats sing to the reader like a lullaby of happy clouds and harmony.
Beautiful Brooke.
Curt
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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Somehow, for you, I don't believe the rhyme is optional, and rightly so, because this is just fantastic stuff. The lilting lines and repeats sing to the reader like a lullaby of happy clouds and harmony.
Beautiful Brooke.
Curt
Comment Written 25-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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Well, I always take the option! LOL Thanks so much, Curt - your comments are always most welcome :-) Brooke
Comment from Jazh
What a lovely thought! I'll come too. The retourne is a complex form - I find the repetition very effective. I enjoyed this poem of escapism, particularly "star-strewn nights and sun-struck days". Cheers. :)
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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What a lovely thought! I'll come too. The retourne is a complex form - I find the repetition very effective. I enjoyed this poem of escapism, particularly "star-strewn nights and sun-struck days". Cheers. :)
Comment Written 25-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Adele - I like this form too :-) You are most welcome to escape with me. Brooke
Comment from HAWordsmith
A pleasure to read, and the rhythm and meter fit nicely with the floating away to better places theme. "...and winds blow but a balmy breeze" is nicely written...the aliteration is (I have no idea how to describe it) onomatopoeiaic. I don't know if there is a term for this in poetry or even if you understand what I am saying, but the sentence, when read, just sounds like the breeze blowing. Anyways, thank you for this posting and many blessings.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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A pleasure to read, and the rhythm and meter fit nicely with the floating away to better places theme. "...and winds blow but a balmy breeze" is nicely written...the aliteration is (I have no idea how to describe it) onomatopoeiaic. I don't know if there is a term for this in poetry or even if you understand what I am saying, but the sentence, when read, just sounds like the breeze blowing. Anyways, thank you for this posting and many blessings.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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thank you, and yes, I do understand what you are saying, and I am truly pleased by it :-) Brooke
Comment from kintesiegel
A joyous poem that laments the lack of paradise on earth. We would also benefit from a little ride to remember the possibilities of enchantment
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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A joyous poem that laments the lack of paradise on earth. We would also benefit from a little ride to remember the possibilities of enchantment
Comment Written 25-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2010
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Thank you, my friend, for a lovely review :-) Brooke
Comment from jeslaf
It reminded me a bit of balloon boy, but only because that's my mind...this was a wistful piece, and I liked the way the words were light and airy, which mirrored the floating imagery of the piece. :)
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It reminded me a bit of balloon boy, but only because that's my mind...this was a wistful piece, and I liked the way the words were light and airy, which mirrored the floating imagery of the piece. :)
Comment Written 25-Jan-2010
