Woodland Secrets Part Two
fantasy ottava rima - see author's notes90 total reviews
Comment from MissMerri
This is so enchanting a little story, and so beautifully told in perfect rhyme and meter. I wish I could score the whole instead of breaking it into three, but I'm going to score it as it is posted, and this is a perfect "second chapter" to what I've already read. Looking forward to the last...
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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This is so enchanting a little story, and so beautifully told in perfect rhyme and meter. I wish I could score the whole instead of breaking it into three, but I'm going to score it as it is posted, and this is a perfect "second chapter" to what I've already read. Looking forward to the last...
Comment Written 01-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Thank you, MissMerri. Sorry about having to break it down into three, but I'm posting as I write and it takes forever to do two verses :-) Brooke
Comment from nancyjam
A well crafted story - lovely rhyme and smooth flow.
You present such imaginative images, it is a pleasure
to read. I look forward to the third section. Thanks
for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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A well crafted story - lovely rhyme and smooth flow.
You present such imaginative images, it is a pleasure
to read. I look forward to the third section. Thanks
for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Nancyjam, thank you and good morning! :-) Brooke
Comment from jaeladarling
A beautiful continuation. And I won't complain about the intro. (Hahaha) :) I can't wait for the third installment. Well done!
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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A beautiful continuation. And I won't complain about the intro. (Hahaha) :) I can't wait for the third installment. Well done!
Comment Written 01-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Thank you, my friend. If all goes well, I'll have the third installment later today :-) Brooke
Comment from IndianaIrish
Oh my, Brooke, the imagery with this second part is even more spectacular than the first. Your description of the wedding party made me smile and see it all like it was being performed before me...buttermilk lace organza...how wonderful!
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Oh my, Brooke, the imagery with this second part is even more spectacular than the first. Your description of the wedding party made me smile and see it all like it was being performed before me...buttermilk lace organza...how wonderful!
Indy :>)
Comment Written 01-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Karyn, and good morning! Glad you liked the details - you wouldn't believe how much time I spent trolling google for articles on lace. LOL Brooke
Comment from Phil Kitom
A really special and colorful spectacle
this appears to be. All guests coming
from all quarters to witness such a fine
and enjoyable day free from all the
usual fears, everyone able to let
their hair down - so to speak.
The picture you paint here Brooke
is so strong and I can visualize
the three chapters together in a book.
Very well done it sings off the page...
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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A really special and colorful spectacle
this appears to be. All guests coming
from all quarters to witness such a fine
and enjoyable day free from all the
usual fears, everyone able to let
their hair down - so to speak.
The picture you paint here Brooke
is so strong and I can visualize
the three chapters together in a book.
Very well done it sings off the page...
Comment Written 01-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Dave, and good morning :-) I appreciate your kind comments. Brooke
Comment from nora arjuna
oh what's going on here? i'm trying my best reading left and right lol (prose and poetry). fantasy or fact, you always shine my friend. i love your description of the ceremony. will check for the rest.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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oh what's going on here? i'm trying my best reading left and right lol (prose and poetry). fantasy or fact, you always shine my friend. i love your description of the ceremony. will check for the rest.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Good morning, Nora. And thank you. Sorry about its being posted in parts, but I'm posting as I write. Brooke :-)
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morning to you. it's nightime where i am. :)
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Brooke:)
The magic continues on this wonderful day of woodland peace as the wedding vows seal the love of fairy bride and groom. I liked every easy flowing line, but if I must choose my favorites, I think it is:
Each maiden wore a frock of spider's silk
that shimmered in the gleaming sun's caress,
but none outshone the bride in buttermilk,
organza lace and pearls upon her dress.
What could conjure more vivid and exciting mental images? I'll be watching for part3. I still wish I had more stars left to give.
Roger
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Hi Brooke:)
The magic continues on this wonderful day of woodland peace as the wedding vows seal the love of fairy bride and groom. I liked every easy flowing line, but if I must choose my favorites, I think it is:
Each maiden wore a frock of spider's silk
that shimmered in the gleaming sun's caress,
but none outshone the bride in buttermilk,
organza lace and pearls upon her dress.
What could conjure more vivid and exciting mental images? I'll be watching for part3. I still wish I had more stars left to give.
Roger
Comment Written 01-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Roger, for such generous and lovely comments. Brooke :-)
Comment from redrider6612
This was wonderful as well. One thing I don't quite understand is the end of the second stanza, the predator or prey part, but then I can be a bit dense at times. Other than that, it flowed bery well. I think the imagery was even better in this part than the prior one. Excellent rhymes, good story progression. Very nice job.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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This was wonderful as well. One thing I don't quite understand is the end of the second stanza, the predator or prey part, but then I can be a bit dense at times. Other than that, it flowed bery well. I think the imagery was even better in this part than the prior one. Excellent rhymes, good story progression. Very nice job.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Thanks, Diane. The section about predator and prey is based on the concept of the Peaceable Kingdom - when the lion sleeps with the lamb. Brooke :-)
Comment from MsRefusenik
I love, love, love this section and especially: "Each maiden wore a frock of spider's silk
that shimmered in the gleaming sun's caress,
but none outshone the bride in buttermilk,
organza lace and pearls upon her dress."
And it all ends with the lion lying down with the lamb and peace as far as you can see. Just absolutely beautiful! I look forward to Part III. Maryellen
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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I love, love, love this section and especially: "Each maiden wore a frock of spider's silk
that shimmered in the gleaming sun's caress,
but none outshone the bride in buttermilk,
organza lace and pearls upon her dress."
And it all ends with the lion lying down with the lamb and peace as far as you can see. Just absolutely beautiful! I look forward to Part III. Maryellen
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Maryellen, thank you so much for this wonderfully generous review, and good morning! You've started my morning off right :-) Hopefully, Part three comes later today. Brooke :-)
Comment from HalfHoff
and me without a 6 --- poop again. surcease --- that is a really new one on me. Jeepers, you must be a poet or something! LOVED IT! --- Will stay tuned for #3! XO Lea Ann
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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and me without a 6 --- poop again. surcease --- that is a really new one on me. Jeepers, you must be a poet or something! LOVED IT! --- Will stay tuned for #3! XO Lea Ann
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Lea Ann, thank you for such a generous response to my fairy poem :-) You've started my morning off with a smile. Brooke
