The Ottava Rima
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "A White Rose and Her Shadow"ottava rima poetry
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Comment from Adri7enne
Ah, you're such a romantic, Brooke. Even the shadow falls in love with the rose. If it's anything like that artwork rose, I can well understand the attraction. I like the ottava rima, as done by you, Brooke. Good job!
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Ah, you're such a romantic, Brooke. Even the shadow falls in love with the rose. If it's anything like that artwork rose, I can well understand the attraction. I like the ottava rima, as done by you, Brooke. Good job!
Comment Written 25-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Adrienne - this piece of art just called out to me :-) Brooke
Comment from dportwood
Structure and rhyming are done perfectly in this poem. The message, whether it be loneliness, friendship, or an explanation of the cycle of life (or a combination of all these) is unigue and well done.
Duane
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Structure and rhyming are done perfectly in this poem. The message, whether it be loneliness, friendship, or an explanation of the cycle of life (or a combination of all these) is unigue and well done.
Duane
Comment Written 25-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Duane - this one was more a response to the picture than one with any particular message in mind, so choose whatever suits you! :-) Brooke
Comment from skye
Beautifully crafted, using form and structure to its best possible limits.
I love the idea within the poem, the shadow as a bereft friend, who has been the rose's companion for life.
Very well done.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Beautifully crafted, using form and structure to its best possible limits.
I love the idea within the poem, the shadow as a bereft friend, who has been the rose's companion for life.
Very well done.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Skye - so glad you like this fanciful personification :-) Brooke
Comment from Just2Write
Oh, so sad, Brooke - I don't know which to feel more sorry for, the rose or her shadow friend. I guess, the shadow, for even though the shadow was a friend the rose created, it lived and died when the rose did. The rose, chose it's solitary life, and could interact with bees and wind and pretty maids, but the shadow could do none of these things. When the rose died, the shadow a symbiot, was doomed to follow. Sorry for rambling - This poet just touched me deeply. Rose
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Oh, so sad, Brooke - I don't know which to feel more sorry for, the rose or her shadow friend. I guess, the shadow, for even though the shadow was a friend the rose created, it lived and died when the rose did. The rose, chose it's solitary life, and could interact with bees and wind and pretty maids, but the shadow could do none of these things. When the rose died, the shadow a symbiot, was doomed to follow. Sorry for rambling - This poet just touched me deeply. Rose
Comment Written 25-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Rose - what a touching response to my personified characters :-) Brooke
Comment from jodim
How in the world do you come up with these wonderful twists and imagination? You are such an inspiration to me. I learn so much by reading your poems. Excellent! Blessings..... jodim
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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How in the world do you come up with these wonderful twists and imagination? You are such an inspiration to me. I learn so much by reading your poems. Excellent! Blessings..... jodim
Comment Written 25-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Jodim - in this case the artwork totally inspired me :-) Brooke
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Hi - how lovely is this...
a rose and her shadow as a
friend -- and how apt is the
artwork! I just love it all.
Well penned, Brooke. Margaret.
Margaret.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Hi - how lovely is this...
a rose and her shadow as a
friend -- and how apt is the
artwork! I just love it all.
Well penned, Brooke. Margaret.
Margaret.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Margaret - the art just intrigued me and seemed like it needed a poetic story :-) Brooke
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Just perfect.
We've been out gathering bits and pieces
we need for our trip -- and are feeling quite
exhausted all ready!!
This weekend will be crazy with all the family
coming together, some staying, and then, before
we know it, we will be off... but will talk to you
before then, my friend.
Margaret.
Comment from Joyce L.
Loved the creative poem and the picture was picture perfect. It makes me think of how our shadow can be our best friend...we better like what we see.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Loved the creative poem and the picture was picture perfect. It makes me think of how our shadow can be our best friend...we better like what we see.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Joyce - I appreciate your gracious response to this fanciful poem :-) Brooke
Comment from gargoyle socks
This is a beautiful poem. It kind of reminds me of Thomas Moore's poem, Tis The Last Rose Of Summer (one of my favorites). I love how you've described the shadow as the rose's best friend.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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This is a beautiful poem. It kind of reminds me of Thomas Moore's poem, Tis The Last Rose Of Summer (one of my favorites). I love how you've described the shadow as the rose's best friend.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Sorrowclouds, thank you. I read that poem so many years ago - I'll have to revisit it. Brooke :-)
Comment from L.lora
A very delicious poem Brooke. This emotes great depth of passion and aloneness, while reiforcing the strength of spirit. Your poem speaks on many different levels from it's multi layers. For me; I change your "a friend bereft." to "a bereft friend" if it won't alter your count or flow..just a thought.. great read..Lora
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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A very delicious poem Brooke. This emotes great depth of passion and aloneness, while reiforcing the strength of spirit. Your poem speaks on many different levels from it's multi layers. For me; I change your "a friend bereft." to "a bereft friend" if it won't alter your count or flow..just a thought.. great read..Lora
Comment Written 25-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Lora - the last words of the final two lines have to rhyme with each other, which is why I have the left/bereft rhyming :-) Thanks for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
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Sorry Brooke, I'm a bit slow this AM, didnt' even catch that, was going for the way I read it and connecting with the line before...guess I better go have another cup of coffee...hugs..
Comment from Annmuma
Very interesting -from the artwork through the thought that expands upon it. Well done and bears reading a second time to be sure I've squeezed every meaning from every angle! thanks. ann
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Very interesting -from the artwork through the thought that expands upon it. Well done and bears reading a second time to be sure I've squeezed every meaning from every angle! thanks. ann
Comment Written 25-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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I love the artwork, which inspired the poem - Thank you, Ann :-) Brooke
