Comment from Jazh

Excellent

I really enjoyed this image - it made me think of Simon and Garfunkel! It definitely fulfills the terms of the contest - very light and sweet. The ending is effective: "there is no vow I would withhold/from thee". Do you know which bridge it is? Best of luck for the contest. :)

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2009

Yes, it is called the Forth Bridge in Edinburgh - I googled it after I used it because it intrigued me so. The angle of the photo makes it look as if it really does span a sea, but it turns out to be a nineteenth century bridge, historically famous, that just crosses a river. :-) I think it is quite beautiful. Thanks, Adele : -) Brooke

reply by Jazh on 15-Aug-2009

Yes, I thought it was Scottish - I remember seeing it or something very similar when I was there years ago. It is beautiful - I love bridges too. :)

Comment from Dave M

Excellent

Brooke,

This is one fine poem, no nits of any sort and exactly what the contest rules ordered. This sort of hyperbole love poem has been around probably as long as people have done more than grunted, and you've done an excellent, original job with it.

Dave

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2009

Dave, thank you for recognizing the lightheartedness of this hyperbole love poem - that is exactly what I was going for to suit the needs of the "light and sweet" contest :-) Brooke

reply by Dave M on 15-Aug-2009

Brooke,

You're welcome. I understood that perfectly.

"For you I'd climb the highest mountain,
Swim across the deepest sea,

And I'll come by your house this evening if it isn't raining."

Dave

reply by the author on 15-Aug-2009

Now you've gone and made me laugh!!! :-)

Comment from Colette

Excellent

Brooke you have done it yet again, wonderful words of romance
I love this, everybody will.

If you published a book of poetry I would be your first customer Brooke,

All the best Colette

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2009

Thank you, Colette - I rarely write romance poetry, but I was in the mood for light and sweet today :-) I truly appreciate your encouraging comments :-) Brooke

Comment from PUPA

Excellent

Hi Brooke,
A true devotion is jumping out of this well crafted and presented poem. I enjoyed the form, the meaning and that loving feeling it gave me while reading it.
Good Luck in this lighthearted contest.
Love
Pupa

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2009

Thank you, Pupa - lighthearted is exactly what I was aiming for, so I'm so glad it came across that way for you :-) Brooke

Comment from tony bronk

Excellent

A sweet and lovely love poem. You followed the instructions very well. I read one poem that was really very intense. Good job. Tony

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2009

This contest has been posted before, and each time I find some entries are definitely NOT light and sweet. I was determined to follow the instructions, Tony :-) Thank you for noticing that. Brooke

Comment from MadameSparkle

Excellent

I loved this poem and I'll tell you why. It reminds me of a theme I love to use, i.e. nothing is too much to do to get to the one you love. "Ain't no mountain high enough" etc. Well done.
Sparkles

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2009

You're not the first person to be reminded of that Marvin Gaye classic, which thrills me since I love that song! Thanks so much, Stella. Brooke :-)

Comment from Amicus

Excellent

Well, you sure nailed light, sweet, and romantic in this well crafted technically flawless pair of cinquain poems, Brooke. The call and response organizing technique is clever and each of the poems in this sequence is a delight. Then, taken together, they are doubly delightful! :>)

Good poem...good entry for this competition.

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2009

Thank you - I'm most pleased at your response, my friend :-) Brooke

Comment from DeboraDyess

Excellent

Very beautiful, Brooke. And a lovely statement of love and dedication. A good contest entry with no suggestion or correction. Blessings, Deb

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2009

Thank you, Deb - I appreciate your thoughtful review :-) Brooke

Comment from Arkine

Excellent

Nice, it reminded me of Shakespear and his star crossed lovers though. A distance between them, no matter how hard they tried. A lot of us could use more bridges though, I guess, sometimes, true understanding and communication is hard to achieve.

Okay, I'm not sure why this triggered those thoughts but it did. ;)

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2009

You're a lot deeper than I am today - I was just trying to be sweet and light! LOL I'm going to leave the philosophizing to you :-D Thanks so much, my friend. Brooke :-)

reply by Arkine on 15-Aug-2009

~LOL~ What a sweet poem.

You'll have to forgive me I spent most of last night talking with other cops on why people act the way they do. ;)

reply by the author on 15-Aug-2009

I do so much deep philosophizing in so many of my poems, I honestly thought this one was pure whimsy, but you're not the first person today to start philosophizing and talking about my metaphors, etc etc. And I swear all I was writing about was some guy who boasts to his beloved that he loves her so much he'd build a bridge to cross the seas for her and then she remarks that if he did that, she would give him any old thing he asked for! LOL I'm going to have to write another fairy in the garden poem soon and see if my wonderful readers see anything in that other than cute little creatures flitting around flowers! LOL You just have a great rest of your weekend!! Brooke :-)

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Good afternoon Brooke,
very unique way to describe the expansion of love like a bridge that seems to go on forever

Two great cinquains - blended together to make a lovely romance poem
Gert

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2009

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2009

Good afternoon to you, too, Gert. Thanks so much :-) Brooke