Wildflower Haiku
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Comment from Blaidd Drwg
I cant believe that it only takes you two hours to write these haikus. My problem would be cutting this lovely description from 200 words down to 12.
Some of these words are so beautiful in the way they have captured this image; hang on a second, let me count: yep, there's 12 of them. But the "wood's canopy" image is priceless.
John
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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I cant believe that it only takes you two hours to write these haikus. My problem would be cutting this lovely description from 200 words down to 12.
Some of these words are so beautiful in the way they have captured this image; hang on a second, let me count: yep, there's 12 of them. But the "wood's canopy" image is priceless.
John
Comment Written 17-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Thanks, John - oh, not being able to use more words kills me - sometimes I would give my soul for a rule that would allow me one extra syllable!! That happened today, as a matter of fact :-) Brooke
Comment from jadedgemini2
If it makes you feel any better, I have had one in the works for about two weeks now and another in the works for a couple of months (that one is going to be tricky and I knew it once I got it in my head, but I still want to do it *LOL*).
Reading a haiku is always fun because you never know what you'll find (sounds like something Forest would say *LOL*). Sometimes they can be easy, taking only minutes to jot down, or they can take hours to write. It really is fun:)
This one painted such a nice picture for me that now I want to go look them up and see what they need to grow. *LOL* I don't have a green thumb anymore:)
Great job!!! All your hard work paid off:)
Jaded:)
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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If it makes you feel any better, I have had one in the works for about two weeks now and another in the works for a couple of months (that one is going to be tricky and I knew it once I got it in my head, but I still want to do it *LOL*).
Reading a haiku is always fun because you never know what you'll find (sounds like something Forest would say *LOL*). Sometimes they can be easy, taking only minutes to jot down, or they can take hours to write. It really is fun:)
This one painted such a nice picture for me that now I want to go look them up and see what they need to grow. *LOL* I don't have a green thumb anymore:)
Great job!!! All your hard work paid off:)
Jaded:)
Comment Written 17-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Jaded, thank you - I don't have a green thumb either, which is probably one reason I enjoy flowers that grow wild so much! :-) Brooke
Comment from LYLE
Brooke,
I can't shoot you. I really like your twelve words, and the images they have produced. "...below woods' canopy"
and "splendor in the shade" are such beautiful images, because they are so restful to me. Thank you for the moment.
Fondly, Lyle
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Brooke,
I can't shoot you. I really like your twelve words, and the images they have produced. "...below woods' canopy"
and "splendor in the shade" are such beautiful images, because they are so restful to me. Thank you for the moment.
Fondly, Lyle
Comment Written 17-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Thank you, my dear friend. :-) This is a most generous and encouraging review - you've made my day filled with sunshine though where I live has not had one single sunny day in all of June :-) Brooke
Comment from Mrs Jones
The haiku is perfect in structure and the description of the flower is spot on.
"blooms below woods' canopy" clever.
Well done
Cheers
Rose
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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The haiku is perfect in structure and the description of the flower is spot on.
"blooms below woods' canopy" clever.
Well done
Cheers
Rose
Comment Written 17-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Thanks so much, Rose - I appreciate your pointing out the part you particularly enjoyed :-) Brooke
Comment from luna
Good things take time, Brooke! I love your haiku, I shy away from them because I don't write them that well. The picture goes perfect with your words about the jack-in-the-pulpit. Looking forward to more.
Love,
Jenny *smile*
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Good things take time, Brooke! I love your haiku, I shy away from them because I don't write them that well. The picture goes perfect with your words about the jack-in-the-pulpit. Looking forward to more.
Love,
Jenny *smile*
Comment Written 17-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Jenny, I don't think I've written a dozen total so far, on any subject. They kill me. Thanks so much, Brooke :-)
Comment from Stephen C Winter (Vs
The quality in your words always shines through Brooke, So it is two hours well spent. The only thing I will shoot is my admiration of you.
It is funny though, sometimes my writing is speedy and flows ....other times I sit there, a puzzled look on my face,just blank.
Steve
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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The quality in your words always shines through Brooke, So it is two hours well spent. The only thing I will shoot is my admiration of you.
It is funny though, sometimes my writing is speedy and flows ....other times I sit there, a puzzled look on my face,just blank.
Steve
Comment Written 17-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Steve, yes, that is how it works - I just wish the flowy times were more frequent! LOL Brooke :-)
Comment from Nanny 6
Lol. Maybe I will in my next story about you. lol. It's amazing how much time it can take to put your heart into words. You did fabulous on this haiku, Booke! It was well worth the time you spent creating it. : ) Judy
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Lol. Maybe I will in my next story about you. lol. It's amazing how much time it can take to put your heart into words. You did fabulous on this haiku, Booke! It was well worth the time you spent creating it. : ) Judy
Comment Written 17-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Judy, thank you. Oh good, I can look forward to a story in which some crazed lady shoots me! LOL Brooke :-)
Comment from c_lucas
You are living proof that a great idea can be a pain in the a__. This is very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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You are living proof that a great idea can be a pain in the a__. This is very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Charlie - you know exactly what I mean!!! Thank you, my humorous and perceptive friend :-) Brooke
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You're welcome, Brooke. Charlie
Comment from Peter@Poole
I think it's a wonderful idea, rather like my bird haiku, and I get the opportunity to study your expertise! You are honest to say it took you two hours, but I think the quality shows, Brooke. Your poem is as beautiful as the plant, which we also have in Britain, though I can't be sure whether it's a sub-species. Peter
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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I think it's a wonderful idea, rather like my bird haiku, and I get the opportunity to study your expertise! You are honest to say it took you two hours, but I think the quality shows, Brooke. Your poem is as beautiful as the plant, which we also have in Britain, though I can't be sure whether it's a sub-species. Peter
Comment Written 17-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Peter, thank you - though I think my next wildflower haiku may take a while to post - you obviously have less trouble with these little buggers as your bird haiku come out in timely fashion :-) Brooke :-)
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Well, we enjoy the same things and it shows in our poetry.
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With regard to the salient features of a bird featured in my haiku, Brooke, I do use a field guide to check my own observations, and would expect you to do the same.
Comment from Rabianabian
What a nice idea! Your dandelion and buttercup haikus were very good, and this is a fitting continuation. Excellent job and good luck in your wildflower/haiku series!
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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What a nice idea! Your dandelion and buttercup haikus were very good, and this is a fitting continuation. Excellent job and good luck in your wildflower/haiku series!
Comment Written 17-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2009
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Mary, thank you - I'm so glad you still remember the others! Brooke :-)
