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A modern sonnet on life's twists and turns.74 total reviews
Comment from wierdgrace
This is excellent and I needed to read one of your poems that tells the imformation, the structure, and the images of everything I love to hear. thank you.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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This is excellent and I needed to read one of your poems that tells the imformation, the structure, and the images of everything I love to hear. thank you.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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yours is a most gracious response - thank you! Peace, Brooke
Comment from earthlybeing
Great poem. So true that we have no guarantees and even if we could see into the future would we want to know it all. Then we would not be free to do as we should. We would focus on the bad. Thanks, Jeanette
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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Great poem. So true that we have no guarantees and even if we could see into the future would we want to know it all. Then we would not be free to do as we should. We would focus on the bad. Thanks, Jeanette
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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thanks, jeanette for your philosophical comments! Brooke :-)
Comment from Kentucky Sweet Pea
Ha! Brooke, way to tell it! I would not want a crystal ball at all. It would be surely abused by the masses if we could know the future. God knows what He is doing, thankfully.
Penny
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Ha! Brooke, way to tell it! I would not want a crystal ball at all. It would be surely abused by the masses if we could know the future. God knows what He is doing, thankfully.
Penny
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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I must admit it would be tempting from time to time, but yes, I would do my best always to resist using it :-) thank you again! Brooke :-)
Comment from KelinaJ
Interesting image selection. I pictured a line chart or a bar graph as I read through. Good presentation and color scheme. Good use of rhythm and rhyme. The lines flow well aloud. (Yes, I really read it out loud. Poetry is better that way.) Excellent Job.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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Interesting image selection. I pictured a line chart or a bar graph as I read through. Good presentation and color scheme. Good use of rhythm and rhyme. The lines flow well aloud. (Yes, I really read it out loud. Poetry is better that way.) Excellent Job.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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I actually did start out by looking for a chart LOL I read many of the poems I review out loud - glad you do too. thank you, Brooke :-)
Comment from bard owl
Sometimes I truly thinkit is better if we do not know what will come to pass. Tragedy and illness is easier to take in small (and sometimes not-so-small) doses. The human soul is durable but not beyond breaking. This is a very thought-provoking poem you have penned. Excellent. BLessings, Linda
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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Sometimes I truly thinkit is better if we do not know what will come to pass. Tragedy and illness is easier to take in small (and sometimes not-so-small) doses. The human soul is durable but not beyond breaking. This is a very thought-provoking poem you have penned. Excellent. BLessings, Linda
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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Linda, I appreciate that you got some meaning from this - yes, I don't know what I would do if I knew now when my sister is going to die or if my daughter is going to have her heart broken - best to learn about each thing as it happens.
Thank you, Brooke :-)
Comment from PoesyPoet
Well, this is certainly food for thought! You have me wondering too what would I do if I had life's chart.
Very original. You should have made this a contest.
Nice work.
PP
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Well, this is certainly food for thought! You have me wondering too what would I do if I had life's chart.
Very original. You should have made this a contest.
Nice work.
PP
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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I'm glad this gave you food for thought - not much more a poet can aspire to than inspiring thought. thank you, Brooke :-)
Comment from PatriciaLiteHickman
when I say this title, it gave me a chuckle so I had to come and see; good choice of artwork;
I find sonnet's to have such gentle energy;
now this:
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And if such a chart were within my grasp,
would I truly want to extend my hand,
to hold my future secure in my clasp,
to know which days dismal and which ones grand?"
I cannot resist commenting on it lol. I am an astrologer; do not consider myself a "fortune teller" at all; and do not engage in "parlor games" to entertain others; :-)
But what I discovered through a life long study is that we are actually born with a set of instructions; our natal birthchart is as unique to each as a set of fingerprints :-)
I believe there would be way less suicides in the world if someone could know "okay, this period, you will feel down" that energy will change after a month, 3 months, or whatever; but it will change (and it does); people do themselves in because they do not understand that what goes down - will come back up - and vice versa; "no it's not a good time to sign that contract or get married or buy that car" better to wait till such and such; do they listen; some do :-) The Wise Men followed a star.
Of course this is well written; lovely both in presentation and choice of color too :- no corrections. Do I agree with most of what is written here? sure I do :-) Thank you my dear, creative, fanstory friend for the opportunity to think today :-)
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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when I say this title, it gave me a chuckle so I had to come and see; good choice of artwork;
I find sonnet's to have such gentle energy;
now this:
"
And if such a chart were within my grasp,
would I truly want to extend my hand,
to hold my future secure in my clasp,
to know which days dismal and which ones grand?"
I cannot resist commenting on it lol. I am an astrologer; do not consider myself a "fortune teller" at all; and do not engage in "parlor games" to entertain others; :-)
But what I discovered through a life long study is that we are actually born with a set of instructions; our natal birthchart is as unique to each as a set of fingerprints :-)
I believe there would be way less suicides in the world if someone could know "okay, this period, you will feel down" that energy will change after a month, 3 months, or whatever; but it will change (and it does); people do themselves in because they do not understand that what goes down - will come back up - and vice versa; "no it's not a good time to sign that contract or get married or buy that car" better to wait till such and such; do they listen; some do :-) The Wise Men followed a star.
Of course this is well written; lovely both in presentation and choice of color too :- no corrections. Do I agree with most of what is written here? sure I do :-) Thank you my dear, creative, fanstory friend for the opportunity to think today :-)
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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your response is both fascinating and insightful - thanks for all of the things you've given me to think about :-) Peace, Brooke :-)
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You are welcome Dear Brooke, if you have questions, feel free to send me a priv message :-) I'll tell you about what happened when I told my grandmother at age 25, "I'm going to study astrology" and she replied "Oh My God! You're going straight to hell!" :-) You are,as always welcome for the review :-) Tricia
Comment from onslaught of thought
what an amazing message, yet do you mean i should accept my depression and use it for what it is worth? its so hard to live a full life with this condition. your words give me hope, and hope is all i have at the moment
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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what an amazing message, yet do you mean i should accept my depression and use it for what it is worth? its so hard to live a full life with this condition. your words give me hope, and hope is all i have at the moment
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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my older sister has lived with depression for 50 years, and I would never ask her to just live with it. I would hope you would live each day, good or bad, and whilst you're living, fight the good fight to find your way out of depression. My ex-husband, now deceased, was an amazingly talented photographer and writer, and it broke my heart to see his depression chip away at his desire to use his talent. I commend you for using your talent. I wish you well. Peace, Brooke
Comment from MumEsGirl
yet another masterpiece. You had a message to deliver, and you did it with style.
Who of us has not at sometime wished to know what the future holds, so that we might alter our destiny or hide away. If this is the new form of sonnet then I could really aspire to trying one myself - your works are an inspiration
hugs kate
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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yet another masterpiece. You had a message to deliver, and you did it with style.
Who of us has not at sometime wished to know what the future holds, so that we might alter our destiny or hide away. If this is the new form of sonnet then I could really aspire to trying one myself - your works are an inspiration
hugs kate
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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Kate, thanks so much for your always kind comments! Peace, Brooke :-)
Comment from rmdelta
adewpearl,
another well written poem and so easy to understand. Interesting point of view and I agree with you. Let the day bring what it may. I don't want to know in advance.
Nice one, adwepearl
Reggie
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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adewpearl,
another well written poem and so easy to understand. Interesting point of view and I agree with you. Let the day bring what it may. I don't want to know in advance.
Nice one, adwepearl
Reggie
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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Reggie, thanks so much! Peace, Brooke
