Backyard Treasures
Memories of a time when a feather was a treasure96 total reviews
Comment from grassroots08
This is a good shot of nature for us and some of it felt nostalgic, as I went back and relived a bit of it all. You managed to pack in a lot of stuff in a few lines, Cheers, Don
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2008
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This is a good shot of nature for us and some of it felt nostalgic, as I went back and relived a bit of it all. You managed to pack in a lot of stuff in a few lines, Cheers, Don
Comment Written 20-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2008
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thank you for your most thoughtful comments and for letting me know it triggered memories for you
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Comment from Patricia Forsythe
This is a very good poem but I was having trouble with the meter in the 3rd line of the 4th stanza. 1 more syllable?? Also the meter in the last stanza 1st line - 1 more syllable there?
I keep reading it and wonder if I'm wrong. The stress sound also on BLUE in blue jay. What do you think of inserting a different word for BLUE?
This is only my opinion, though.
It's a very good poem of childhood.
Isn't it funny how the little things amused us?
Good luck,
Pat
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2008
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This is a very good poem but I was having trouble with the meter in the 3rd line of the 4th stanza. 1 more syllable?? Also the meter in the last stanza 1st line - 1 more syllable there?
I keep reading it and wonder if I'm wrong. The stress sound also on BLUE in blue jay. What do you think of inserting a different word for BLUE?
This is only my opinion, though.
It's a very good poem of childhood.
Isn't it funny how the little things amused us?
Good luck,
Pat
Comment Written 20-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2008
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thanks so much for your thoughtful review :-)
Comment from Scribbelini
Great poem, I love the imagery and feel the fascination.
Helicopter seeds from the maple tree,
I'd pull them apart to stick on my nose.
They spun to the ground as gifts from above -
more than first seems on a giant tree grows.
Such memories you envoked with this,
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2008
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Great poem, I love the imagery and feel the fascination.
Helicopter seeds from the maple tree,
I'd pull them apart to stick on my nose.
They spun to the ground as gifts from above -
more than first seems on a giant tree grows.
Such memories you envoked with this,
Comment Written 20-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2008
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I'm so glad you thought about your own memories while reading mine - thank you!
Comment from earthlybeing
Oh you are on a great roll. This one is such fun and brings back so many good memories or childhood. I enjoyed the treasure hunt. Thanks, Jeanette
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2008
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Oh you are on a great roll. This one is such fun and brings back so many good memories or childhood. I enjoyed the treasure hunt. Thanks, Jeanette
Comment Written 20-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2008
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Thank you kindly once again!!
Comment from jmyron
It is the memories that are the true treasure. The imagry of the poem Takes me back to whem I was a young fart, making castles from limestone rocks, huge, rocks, bigger than houses, and fighting the evils of the world in fantasy with my friends.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2008
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It is the memories that are the true treasure. The imagry of the poem Takes me back to whem I was a young fart, making castles from limestone rocks, huge, rocks, bigger than houses, and fighting the evils of the world in fantasy with my friends.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2008
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I am so happy that my memories triggered some of your own :-) Thank you for this warm review!
Comment from LadyMary
This is a wonderful writing of memories. I can relate to everyone of them, as I'm sure others can. Excellent rhyme provides smooth flow. You have captured the essence of our wonderful backyards. LadyMary
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2008
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This is a wonderful writing of memories. I can relate to everyone of them, as I'm sure others can. Excellent rhyme provides smooth flow. You have captured the essence of our wonderful backyards. LadyMary
Comment Written 20-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2008
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I'm so glad you related to my memories with your own - thank you so much for a thoughtful review :-)
Comment from RapturedHeart
I just love reminiscing with you, adewpearl. Sounds like you had such a fun time growing up. I remember being so excited when we'd find half an egg, or those puffy brown seed sacs, or those bouncy patches of mud. Everything is a treasure when you're young. My absolute favorites were the wild strawberries, though.
As usual, you've done a great job rhyming and bringing it all together.
I am not heir to family fortune -
no treasure have I under lock and key.
But clovers are still there for seeking,
and maples, from seeds, grow in majesty.
- this is fabulous!
Thanks for another inspiring read. Take care,
Heather
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2008
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I just love reminiscing with you, adewpearl. Sounds like you had such a fun time growing up. I remember being so excited when we'd find half an egg, or those puffy brown seed sacs, or those bouncy patches of mud. Everything is a treasure when you're young. My absolute favorites were the wild strawberries, though.
As usual, you've done a great job rhyming and bringing it all together.
I am not heir to family fortune -
no treasure have I under lock and key.
But clovers are still there for seeking,
and maples, from seeds, grow in majesty.
- this is fabulous!
Thanks for another inspiring read. Take care,
Heather
Comment Written 20-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2008
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I am so pleased you like this - thank you so much for a very warm review :-)
Comment from writerjen
Very lovely poem about backyard treasures. Descriptive language, held the reader's interest. Well done. No suggestions for change.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2008
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Very lovely poem about backyard treasures. Descriptive language, held the reader's interest. Well done. No suggestions for change.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2008
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Thanks so much for this thoughtful and kind review :-)
Comment from wierdgrace
That has been such a long time, but remembering was so awesome. The picture, photo, or artwork is beautiful, and fitting. The poem was very much enjoyable. thank you for posting.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2008
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That has been such a long time, but remembering was so awesome. The picture, photo, or artwork is beautiful, and fitting. The poem was very much enjoyable. thank you for posting.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2008
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Thank you so much for letting me know this brought back memories for you!
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ur welcome
Comment from E. W. Crowe
I don't know why my computer won't let me give you six stars, but this poem truly deserved it. Nice images, and the words are so sincere. Good Job, adewpearl.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2008
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I don't know why my computer won't let me give you six stars, but this poem truly deserved it. Nice images, and the words are so sincere. Good Job, adewpearl.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2008
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Oh, we only each get two 6's a week - I think I get mine back sometime tomorrow - yes, it's very frustrating when you really want to reward them, but I appreciate the thought! Thank you so very much. :-) Brooke
