One Night Stand
Passion unleashed can turn to love54 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
It seems like the first two stanzas could be from a man watching a redheaded woman dance and the second two from the lonely woman. The last show the effects of a one night stand. If the relationship is to continue then they need not to wake up alone or give each other their full names and phone numbers. But if they are drunk, they won't remember to do this.
Good luck in the contest and keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2017
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It seems like the first two stanzas could be from a man watching a redheaded woman dance and the second two from the lonely woman. The last show the effects of a one night stand. If the relationship is to continue then they need not to wake up alone or give each other their full names and phone numbers. But if they are drunk, they won't remember to do this.
Good luck in the contest and keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 05-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2017
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Thank you for reviewing my poem. I haven't thought of it the way you described. I's always nice to see a different
point of view.
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No problem. Glad I could give you a different interpretation of your poem,
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No problem. Glad I could give you a different interpretation of your poem,
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Comment from MizKat
Hi JustJo,
You always write the nicest things.
I'm happy to read what you write.
Thanks for sharing your lovely work.
I'll look forward to reading more.
Kat
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2017
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Hi JustJo,
You always write the nicest things.
I'm happy to read what you write.
Thanks for sharing your lovely work.
I'll look forward to reading more.
Kat
Comment Written 05-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2017
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Thanks, Kat, for your kind remarks on my work. I write from my heart and experiences most of the time. I am an uncomplicated person thus the simple language. :O)
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I like to write poetry with simple language too. Also I write from my heart and the way God would like me to write. Kat
Comment from Sis Cat
Often, no, a one night stand seldom turns into forever love, but a sequence of one night stands in which the lovers remain along again after the alcohol and the buzz of sex wears off. You write eloquently:
Morning light will discover
Two lonely souls again
Alcohol and desire for a moment
Your name and face forgotten
This is both a sensual and somber poem. It is alluring, revealing desire, like a moth attracted to the flame, but it is a flame that burns and leaves one numb and hungry for another intoxicating high of sex.
This is a superb, and deep free verse love poem that looks at one night stands with realistic and poetic eyes.
Thank you for sharing. I wish you contest success.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2017
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Often, no, a one night stand seldom turns into forever love, but a sequence of one night stands in which the lovers remain along again after the alcohol and the buzz of sex wears off. You write eloquently:
Morning light will discover
Two lonely souls again
Alcohol and desire for a moment
Your name and face forgotten
This is both a sensual and somber poem. It is alluring, revealing desire, like a moth attracted to the flame, but it is a flame that burns and leaves one numb and hungry for another intoxicating high of sex.
This is a superb, and deep free verse love poem that looks at one night stands with realistic and poetic eyes.
Thank you for sharing. I wish you contest success.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2017
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Thank you, Sis Cat, for your review of my poem. True most one night stands don't last beyond the lust. That is what
happened with my husband. The poem is about our first meeting. It was lust and really good sex in the beginning.
Once, I got to know him a lasting love developed. We're old but the sex is still good. LOL
Comment from nancy_e_davis
It is possible for two people to find love on a dance floor I suppose. Everyone can feel lonely at any time and you just might find the love of your life, Good job. So you married him. Was it Good? LOL Nancy
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2017
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It is possible for two people to find love on a dance floor I suppose. Everyone can feel lonely at any time and you just might find the love of your life, Good job. So you married him. Was it Good? LOL Nancy
Comment Written 05-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2017
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Yes, Nancy, it is still good. I met him on a dance floor and at first, it was lust and really good sex. After all these years our love is still so strong. I don't know why I was so fortunate but I am glad.
Comment from Hitcher
Well I think you are still with this man you have answered that question friend. I met my wife on a dance floor... we are still together 26 years later. Happy days, nice poem !!
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2017
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Well I think you are still with this man you have answered that question friend. I met my wife on a dance floor... we are still together 26 years later. Happy days, nice poem !!
Comment Written 05-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2017
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Glad to know I'm not the only one who met their husband/wife on the dance floor. True it was lust and really good sex at first and still is after all these years. But the love is so strong I can't imagine my life without him.
Comment from Janet Foor
I'm happy for you that this turned to love. What started out as a "one night stand" became so much more.
The picture and the red color added to the red hot love topic.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2017
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I'm happy for you that this turned to love. What started out as a "one night stand" became so much more.
The picture and the red color added to the red hot love topic.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 05-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2017
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Thank you, Janet, for commenting on my poem. I am glad you liked it.
Comment from Pullmanspb
Your poem struck me as very, very honest. That kept me reading, as it isn't a new topic. I LOVED the note that you married him and have children with him.
Steven
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2017
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Your poem struck me as very, very honest. That kept me reading, as it isn't a new topic. I LOVED the note that you married him and have children with him.
Steven
Comment Written 05-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2017
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Steven, thank you for reviewing my poem. Yes, I am a very honest person. My work is from my heart and own experiences. I am a very uncomplicated person. Guess my husband is too. ;o)
Comment from AnnieDawn
I am happy that you were able to hang on to the one you danced with for so many are just what you wrote about. One night stands. I wonder about your Alaska picture as my heart resides there with someone in my faraway past. Oh well. I loved your poem and good luck in the contest. I rate very few free form poems as most do not make much sense to me. Yours hit the mark.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2017
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I am happy that you were able to hang on to the one you danced with for so many are just what you wrote about. One night stands. I wonder about your Alaska picture as my heart resides there with someone in my faraway past. Oh well. I loved your poem and good luck in the contest. I rate very few free form poems as most do not make much sense to me. Yours hit the mark.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2017
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Thank you, AnnieDawn, I am glad you chose to read my poem. My work is simple and uncomplicated like me. LOL.
The Alaska picture was taken in 2009. My son lives in Anchorage with the love of his life. We go up about every three years. I miss him something terrible.
Comment from Fridayauthor
A very nice love poem that asks an interesting question. I love the fact you can visualize the scene and the evening so easily with the words and description you chose.
Very enjoyable read indeed.
Thank you.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2017
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A very nice love poem that asks an interesting question. I love the fact you can visualize the scene and the evening so easily with the words and description you chose.
Very enjoyable read indeed.
Thank you.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2017
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I am so glad you enjoyed my poem about the first time I met my husband. Thank you for reviewing.
Jo
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Well, if it's meant to be, then it will happen. I enjoyed your poem. You gave readers a desire to read on & find out for themselves. But then you stopped short of saying it did lead to true love. One can only guess. Readers will have to decide for themselves. Good presentation--the colors, the flow of lines, the message. Best wishes in the contest. Jan
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2017
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Well, if it's meant to be, then it will happen. I enjoyed your poem. You gave readers a desire to read on & find out for themselves. But then you stopped short of saying it did lead to true love. One can only guess. Readers will have to decide for themselves. Good presentation--the colors, the flow of lines, the message. Best wishes in the contest. Jan
Comment Written 05-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2017
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Thank you, Jan, for reviewing my poem. I married him and have been so happy for 43 years now. I can't imagine my life without him.
