The Quest
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Comment from Unspoken94
Another terrific chapter of daughter and birth mother. I have some suggestions:
Beginning after Part Eleven.
Par. 9: ("I nodded) Remove italics. Place them before ("That) and after (questions.")
Par. 12: I nodded at that in agreement and continued to (say?). It that what you want here?
Par. 13: Put the italics after (today.")
Par. 15: down town should be one word.
Par. 17; ...and most likely (on) ---add an e to this.
I look forward to Chapter 12. -Bill
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2015
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Another terrific chapter of daughter and birth mother. I have some suggestions:
Beginning after Part Eleven.
Par. 9: ("I nodded) Remove italics. Place them before ("That) and after (questions.")
Par. 12: I nodded at that in agreement and continued to (say?). It that what you want here?
Par. 13: Put the italics after (today.")
Par. 15: down town should be one word.
Par. 17; ...and most likely (on) ---add an e to this.
I look forward to Chapter 12. -Bill
Comment Written 14-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2015
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Hi Bill, I'm so pleased that you're following my story, and that you like it. I have corrected and think it reads ok now. Thank you so much again. All best. Ulla
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I have reactivated a poem that I think you might enjoy reading. It's titled, "To Be a Child Again." I listed it with 8pts/82 cents. -Bill
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Ulla, I just reactivated a poem, titled, "Free to Believe" so that I could enter it in the "Thoughts About God" contest. If you have a moment, would you consider reviewing this? The voting has begun and will continue for 5 days. Thanks, Bill
Comment from Cajungirl
I must admit I have not read any of the previous parts of your story as I have been off the site for 8 months. This is an exceptionally well written and very interesting,
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2015
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I must admit I have not read any of the previous parts of your story as I have been off the site for 8 months. This is an exceptionally well written and very interesting,
Comment Written 14-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2015
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Oh Cajungirl. Welcome back and thank you so much for your review and the awesome six. I'm so pleased that you like my writing. All best. Ulla
Comment from Nosha17
I've no sixes left Ulla, that was a lovely chapter, must have been wonderful hearing how your mother met your father. Well narrated with good descriptions and interspersed with dialogue. Two things, Para 3, were starting to get, Para 15, and then there were those eyes..
Most enjoyable. Faye
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2015
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I've no sixes left Ulla, that was a lovely chapter, must have been wonderful hearing how your mother met your father. Well narrated with good descriptions and interspersed with dialogue. Two things, Para 3, were starting to get, Para 15, and then there were those eyes..
Most enjoyable. Faye
Comment Written 14-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2015
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Oh Faye, thank you so much. You don't know how pleased I am that you like my story and the writing. Yeah it is to be quite a story, hence I've broken it up, If I'd continued it would have been too long. Hope you are doing well. All best. Ullax
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Well, I would have liked f
this chapter to tell us more about your father. It was a little short but I know we will know all about it eventually Ulla. How exciting for you. Well done. Nancy
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2015
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Well, I would have liked f
this chapter to tell us more about your father. It was a little short but I know we will know all about it eventually Ulla. How exciting for you. Well done. Nancy
Comment Written 14-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2015
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Thank you so much Nancy. I know it is on the short side but would have been hard to break up later and then it would have become far too long. Thanks a lot again. All best. Ulla
Comment from royowen
What a wonderful thing to find your mum after all those years, your adoptive mum must have been OK with it, usually adoptive parents have made up their minds to want children, as I and my were, except our children are our biological children also. Well done, Ulla she's starting to explain who your Biological father is also, good yarning, lovely biography, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2015
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What a wonderful thing to find your mum after all those years, your adoptive mum must have been OK with it, usually adoptive parents have made up their minds to want children, as I and my were, except our children are our biological children also. Well done, Ulla she's starting to explain who your Biological father is also, good yarning, lovely biography, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 14-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2015
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Thank you so much for this lovely review. Had Internet problems but should be up and running now. More to follow soon. All best. Ulla
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Well donee Ulla
