Reflections Of Color
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "The Stranger"A collection of my All-Time Best rated song lyrics
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Comment from robina1978
Excellent photo that complements your poem perfectly. With this one I can see it is a song lyric. This lonely female falls for a lose, not just with gambling but everything. Original title.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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Excellent photo that complements your poem perfectly. With this one I can see it is a song lyric. This lonely female falls for a lose, not just with gambling but everything. Original title.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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Comment from gypsymoth
I'm sure I met this guy:) I really like this poem. I do sense the meter being off. It's like , even though you can't sing, you
can hear when someone is off key. The first place I sense it is the line,Don't think that you're the only one he's made(into )
a memory.. I would interject memory, read it aloud both ways.
The next would be , He's just the latest reson for the tears that you (have) cried. Again, read it aloud, it balances the lines.
Other than those two lines, I think it's great. Gypsymoth
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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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I'm sure I met this guy:) I really like this poem. I do sense the meter being off. It's like , even though you can't sing, you
can hear when someone is off key. The first place I sense it is the line,Don't think that you're the only one he's made(into )
a memory.. I would interject memory, read it aloud both ways.
The next would be , He's just the latest reson for the tears that you (have) cried. Again, read it aloud, it balances the lines.
Other than those two lines, I think it's great. Gypsymoth
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Comment Written 02-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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Thanks for your comments.
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Im sorry, I meant to write, I would interject into,not , memory.
Comment from RichardFann
I liked this country style poem, or more probably a song.
As I read it I am more watching a country singer on stage with his guitar.
First line is a knock out.
One puzzle, if he's coming into town, how is he one hundred miles from nowhere?
Should it be 'he's come a hundred...'
Especially liked the one-two-three punches of:
'He's a gambler, and a loser, and he's bet it all before.'
I've known some gamblers, and that beautifully sums it up.
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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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I liked this country style poem, or more probably a song.
As I read it I am more watching a country singer on stage with his guitar.
First line is a knock out.
One puzzle, if he's coming into town, how is he one hundred miles from nowhere?
Should it be 'he's come a hundred...'
Especially liked the one-two-three punches of:
'He's a gambler, and a loser, and he's bet it all before.'
I've known some gamblers, and that beautifully sums it up.
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Comment Written 02-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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Actually these were intended to be Country song lyrics. I just published them as poetry. "He's a hundred miles from nowhere" is an expression meaning he is way out of his element. Thanks for your comments.