tangerine robe kneels
A riddle.66 total reviews
Comment from MelB
This is very well written. So much said in so few words. I cannot imagine the fear that goes through the ones executed, as they walk out to the sand. This does send chills through all that watch the news and hear about the beheadings. The beheadings are not a surprise, as they were predicted in the Bible. ISIS are the ancestors of the ancient Assyrian people, who were just as evil. It is still hard to fathom how people can be so evil.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
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This is very well written. So much said in so few words. I cannot imagine the fear that goes through the ones executed, as they walk out to the sand. This does send chills through all that watch the news and hear about the beheadings. The beheadings are not a surprise, as they were predicted in the Bible. ISIS are the ancestors of the ancient Assyrian people, who were just as evil. It is still hard to fathom how people can be so evil.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
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MelB, it was hard for me to conduct research for this haiku because I surfed the net for pictures of the victims wear the tangerine robes or jumpsuits. I hoped I did not come across an actual picture of the beheading in process or its aftermath. What I am left with are pictures of men staring me in the face for the last time.
Thank you for your review.
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Heartbreaking and haunting!
Comment from BLACKDYKE
Thanks SIS CAT for the info' and the explanation. I am a thicko and therefore needed a little help. I recognise the haiku style and love the way it spells out the story even though only 17 syllables are used. This up to date and fearsome. A wonderful post. Eric
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
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Thanks SIS CAT for the info' and the explanation. I am a thicko and therefore needed a little help. I recognise the haiku style and love the way it spells out the story even though only 17 syllables are used. This up to date and fearsome. A wonderful post. Eric
Comment Written 23-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
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Thank you for your kind review. My haiku told a story is as few words as possible. The readers complete the story. Thank you for acknowledging this.
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my pleasure
Comment from LIJ Red
The only negative comment I'd think of is that the notes are absolutely essential to the sense of the haiku-which is a lot like a senryu, since the action here is by humans, and the fear in living rooms ironic. Just remarking. Excellent post.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
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The only negative comment I'd think of is that the notes are absolutely essential to the sense of the haiku-which is a lot like a senryu, since the action here is by humans, and the fear in living rooms ironic. Just remarking. Excellent post.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
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LIJ, I agree. Many reviewers stated that without the notes, they would not have understood the haiku. Part of the difficulty is that both the news and we ourselves block out the executions. The film stops before the knife falls. The picture is snapped before the victim's execution. My haiku forces people to use their imagination to complete the execution.
I invested a half hour this morning studying Basho, Buson, and, my favorite, Issa. Their haiku are self-contained worlds without footnotes. My fear is that the executions will become so common place that we will either know what those garments signify or we will become complacent.
Thank you for the review.
Comment from misscookie
I must confess I didn't get the poem
Until I read your authors notes.
Than It made a lot of sense. This sadden my heart once I understood .
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
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I must confess I didn't get the poem
Until I read your authors notes.
Than It made a lot of sense. This sadden my heart once I understood .
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
Comment Written 23-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
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Thank you, Cookie, for your six star review. I am humbled that the notes helped you understand my poem. I am saddened to have written the poem.
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Thank you, Cookie, for your six star review. I am humbled that the notes helped you understand my poem. I am saddened to have written the poem.
Comment from Deniz22
Well done and a good reminder we should not soon forget this audacious act of barbarism, and especially those who died. It's difficult to believe men can be so soul-hardened as to perpetuate such deeds.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
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Well done and a good reminder we should not soon forget this audacious act of barbarism, and especially those who died. It's difficult to believe men can be so soul-hardened as to perpetuate such deeds.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
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Thank you, Deniz22, for your kind review. We will not forget these atrocious acts.
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Thank you, Deniz22, for your kind review. We will not forget these atrocious acts.
Comment from artemis53
Well done, Sis Cat. Depersonalization has been used for ages to separate you as a being from another one. One example is name calling in racial prejudice. If you read "Silence of the Lambs" you will see depersonalization used also. When those use this technique often enough thy blur the edges and become depersonalized themselves sharing no names or country of birth.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
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Well done, Sis Cat. Depersonalization has been used for ages to separate you as a being from another one. One example is name calling in racial prejudice. If you read "Silence of the Lambs" you will see depersonalization used also. When those use this technique often enough thy blur the edges and become depersonalized themselves sharing no names or country of birth.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
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Thank you, artemis53, for your kind review. I was unaware of what I achieved with this haiku until another poet pointed out the depersonalization aspect of it. Thank you for adding your perspective.
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Thank you, artemis53, for your kind review. I was unaware of what I achieved with this haiku until another poet pointed out the depersonalization aspect of it. Thank you for adding your perspective.
Comment from Delahay
This does say quite a bit with few words. I would not have thought of the jumpsuits as tangerine, it seems such an innocuous word for what happens.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
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This does say quite a bit with few words. I would not have thought of the jumpsuits as tangerine, it seems such an innocuous word for what happens.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
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Thank you, WardHays, for your kind review. The color shocks me. It is the new color of death. If you are in one of their videos and you are wearing that color, you are going to die.
Thank you for your review.
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Thank you, WardHays, for your kind review. The color shocks me. It is the new color of death. If you are in one of their videos and you are wearing that color, you are going to die.
Thank you for your review.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Sis Cat,
It is a horrific, what is happening in the world, and sadly, there seems to be no end.
I can't even fathom what hostages go though as they are led to their death.
Heartbreaking for families to have to deal losing a loved one is such matter.
I'm afraid in what's left in my lifetime, there will be no change--perhaps getting worse instead.
Well said in so few words.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*.*)
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
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Hi, Sis Cat,
It is a horrific, what is happening in the world, and sadly, there seems to be no end.
I can't even fathom what hostages go though as they are led to their death.
Heartbreaking for families to have to deal losing a loved one is such matter.
I'm afraid in what's left in my lifetime, there will be no change--perhaps getting worse instead.
Well said in so few words.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*.*)
Comment Written 23-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
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Thank you, Jax, for your review. The executions are so horrible that I can go on for days talking about them. I chose that saying less is saying more. Thank you for your review.
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Thank you, Jax, for your review. The executions are so horrible that I can go on for days talking about them. I chose that saying less is saying more. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Dean Kuch
I'm really sorry I missed that rather more graphic poem on beheadings, Sis Cat. You wouldn't happen to know the name of it, would you?
To take nothing away from your well written senryu (haiku deals specifically with things in nature sans humanity or personification) you have created and shared with us all. We all chose to express what we hear, see, smell and taste in very different ways. You chose a less graphic, more metaphorical approach, whereas the aforementioned, more graphic poem by the unnamed poet saw the same things you did, just a bit differently. That's what makes reading and writing so much fun -- the varied views expressed and the ways in which they're presented.
Well done. ~Dean
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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I'm really sorry I missed that rather more graphic poem on beheadings, Sis Cat. You wouldn't happen to know the name of it, would you?
To take nothing away from your well written senryu (haiku deals specifically with things in nature sans humanity or personification) you have created and shared with us all. We all chose to express what we hear, see, smell and taste in very different ways. You chose a less graphic, more metaphorical approach, whereas the aforementioned, more graphic poem by the unnamed poet saw the same things you did, just a bit differently. That's what makes reading and writing so much fun -- the varied views expressed and the ways in which they're presented.
Well done. ~Dean
Comment Written 22-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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No, Dean, I do not know the name of the poet. The poem so repulsed me because of its violence and length--a rant, really--that it inspired me to go in the opposite direction. Now I wish I could thank that poet. I hope the poet reads my poem and messages me.
Thanks for the review.
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No, Dean, I do not know the name of the poet. The poem so repulsed me because of its violence and length--a rant, really--that it inspired me to go in the opposite direction. Now I wish I could thank that poet. I hope the poet reads my poem and messages me.
Thanks for the review.
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Hey, you're more than welcome, Sis Cat. But let me ask you this? What isn't graphically reprehensible about the beheading of innocent civilians? No matter how you slice it (no pun intended), the mere thought of the despicable act make me want to vomit.
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Dean, the executions are graphic and reprehensible. A growing number of poets and writers on FanStory offer their unique perspectives on these heinous acts. I am one of a growing number of voices trying to respond and understand what cannot be understood.
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Dean, the executions are graphic and reprehensible. A growing number of poets and writers on FanStory offer their unique perspectives on these heinous acts. I am one of a growing number of voices trying to respond and understand what cannot be understood.
Comment from Dawny53
Hi Cat.. until my dying day I will never be able to understand how such horrid atrocities are becoming more and more .. and what scares me is that people will begin to see them as less and less of a big deal.. that is the ultimate scary.. you describe well here in your short poem exactly what I'm trying to say..
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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Hi Cat.. until my dying day I will never be able to understand how such horrid atrocities are becoming more and more .. and what scares me is that people will begin to see them as less and less of a big deal.. that is the ultimate scary.. you describe well here in your short poem exactly what I'm trying to say..
Comment Written 22-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2015
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Thank you, Dawny53, for your kind review. I, too, cannot understand that horror. My poem tries to say the unsayable. Thank you for your review.
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Thank you, Dawny53, for your kind review. I, too, cannot understand that horror. My poem tries to say the unsayable. Thank you for your review.
