Whisper
spiritual free verse75 total reviews
Comment from Carole Rosa
Teresa, Your poetry piece is done very well and you have presented it so nicely. Just last week, Honeycomb had a poem named 'Whisper'. This must be a popular title for a poem. Smiles. Carole
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Teresa, Your poetry piece is done very well and you have presented it so nicely. Just last week, Honeycomb had a poem named 'Whisper'. This must be a popular title for a poem. Smiles. Carole
Comment Written 22-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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I missed Honeycomb's poem. I'll have to go look at that. Thanks Carole for the great review:)
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The poem flows and connects well. The author's words are thought provoking, clear and creative.
The reader like how the author used the senses to convey the message. The artwork is perfect and compliments this poem.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Excellent Poem! The poem flows and connects well. The author's words are thought provoking, clear and creative.
The reader like how the author used the senses to convey the message. The artwork is perfect and compliments this poem.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much:)
Comment from Irish Rain
Beautiful whispers to God. I believe He hears them all, even the silent whispers of our hearts. Always there, we are His, because He is ours. This is a treasure.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014
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Beautiful whispers to God. I believe He hears them all, even the silent whispers of our hearts. Always there, we are His, because He is ours. This is a treasure.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014
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Thank you. Yes I think He hears them all:)
Comment from krys123
Teresa;
superb creative and inventive imagination, descriptive and expressive imagery(" to the street Cardinal song Or the Flight of a butterfly Your message I wish to know"),
absolutely an outstanding picture that complements and represents your poem for its purity and tenderness, as it is it's a beautifully written prayer and I can't see changing it of suggesting anything that would differ. These are some of the traits and qualities that I found within your poem/prayer.
Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always Teresa.
Alex
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014
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Teresa;
superb creative and inventive imagination, descriptive and expressive imagery(" to the street Cardinal song Or the Flight of a butterfly Your message I wish to know"),
absolutely an outstanding picture that complements and represents your poem for its purity and tenderness, as it is it's a beautifully written prayer and I can't see changing it of suggesting anything that would differ. These are some of the traits and qualities that I found within your poem/prayer.
Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always Teresa.
Alex
Comment Written 22-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much Alex:)
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You are so sincerely welcome Teresa
Comment from Charlene0513
To TAB_that's me,
Truly the way we should look up to God with for then He surly does know you are needing Him
I hope you don't mind but I couldn't resist when I read your notes. So I wrote another stanza; I hope you don't mind.
Here goes: create in me a longing to seek Your word
to glorify Your name in spirit and in truth
show thanksgiving for His love bestowed
Then instead of repeating yourself with "whisper" I thought you might like to use: low euphoric sounds in the breeze
(a couple more letters used)
Also, instead of saying ........,wake up my ears
(4 extra letters used
Charlene
*please let me know what you think as they are only suggestions.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014
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To TAB_that's me,
Truly the way we should look up to God with for then He surly does know you are needing Him
I hope you don't mind but I couldn't resist when I read your notes. So I wrote another stanza; I hope you don't mind.
Here goes: create in me a longing to seek Your word
to glorify Your name in spirit and in truth
show thanksgiving for His love bestowed
Then instead of repeating yourself with "whisper" I thought you might like to use: low euphoric sounds in the breeze
(a couple more letters used)
Also, instead of saying ........,wake up my ears
(4 extra letters used
Charlene
*please let me know what you think as they are only suggestions.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014
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Charlene, I do appreciate your suggestions as well as your review. I think you should start your poem with the stanza you added to mine. I'll check into your suggestions and see if I want to make changes:)
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the extra few lines were only for your benefit not mine. See fit to use them or not.
Comment from flamingstar
Add comma after "I am yours,..." for direct address. Lovely prayer, offered with a pure and searching heart - and with enough humility that you'll be actually able to receive His response!
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014
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Add comma after "I am yours,..." for direct address. Lovely prayer, offered with a pure and searching heart - and with enough humility that you'll be actually able to receive His response!
Comment Written 22-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much;)
Comment from acerisestory
Your poem is a beautiful entreaty to God to show himself to you in the beauties of nature, Teresa.
I love the repetition of "tell me" in between your second and third stanzas, and the repetition of whisper in the first stanza. Your words have a lovely flow.
Well done, my friend! Thank you for sharing. Alana
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014
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Your poem is a beautiful entreaty to God to show himself to you in the beauties of nature, Teresa.
I love the repetition of "tell me" in between your second and third stanzas, and the repetition of whisper in the first stanza. Your words have a lovely flow.
Well done, my friend! Thank you for sharing. Alana
Comment Written 22-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much:)
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Teresa - you should have entered this in the Faith contest. A simple statement of belief so beautifully versed. This is enhanced by a lovely orchid well displayed. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014
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Teresa - you should have entered this in the Faith contest. A simple statement of belief so beautifully versed. This is enhanced by a lovely orchid well displayed. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 22-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014
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Thanks Dorothy:)
Comment from JPilcher
The title pulled me in and the illustration is a phenomenal choice for this. The overall presentation with the formatting and choice of colors too - perfectly selected. Well done. :) Jill P.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014
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The title pulled me in and the illustration is a phenomenal choice for this. The overall presentation with the formatting and choice of colors too - perfectly selected. Well done. :) Jill P.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014
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Thank you Jill:)
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My pleasure!!
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Teresa,
This is beautiful. I love the white background and simple artwork, making this, less is more because the message to find the Lord, packs a wallop.
I wish I had a sixer for you.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*.*)
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014
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Hi, Teresa,
This is beautiful. I love the white background and simple artwork, making this, less is more because the message to find the Lord, packs a wallop.
I wish I had a sixer for you.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*.*)
Comment Written 22-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2014
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Thank you very much Jax:)
